Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Not Yet"A collection of poems on these themes
54 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
Funny, irreverent and entertaining. I went for a heart test two weeks back and came home with five stents inserted to five artery blockages. I was a few weeks from an attack. So you see, I just said much the same, not in great Pommy vernacular, or clever verse, but in my own defiant way. Great work.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Funny, irreverent and entertaining. I went for a heart test two weeks back and came home with five stents inserted to five artery blockages. I was a few weeks from an attack. So you see, I just said much the same, not in great Pommy vernacular, or clever verse, but in my own defiant way. Great work.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Mark, I'm really sorry to hear of your health problems - good catch to get it in time. Let's hope the stents do the trick and you can tell old skull-face to shove off for a few more years yet!
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah! Well, Steve, good luck with that when it happens, buddy. I'm certain he'll just up and walk right back out where he came from, LOL. Don't Fear the Reaper, huh? Wasn't it a band called Blue Oyster Cult who performed that song?
In all seriousness, this was pretty funny, Steve. Let me know how it works out for ya...heh-heh-heh. :}
~Dean
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Hah! Well, Steve, good luck with that when it happens, buddy. I'm certain he'll just up and walk right back out where he came from, LOL. Don't Fear the Reaper, huh? Wasn't it a band called Blue Oyster Cult who performed that song?
In all seriousness, this was pretty funny, Steve. Let me know how it works out for ya...heh-heh-heh. :}
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Dean - don't know the song, but it sounds like a goody!
Just saying, 'there's no need to just lie down and take it!'
Steve
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You're very welcome, Steve. And nope, we sure don't. :)
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is a witty type of poem with good humour as well. The photo is of the grim reaper I guess. Looks like he could mean business. But I like your words and how you expressed them. Keep up the great work. Drew
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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This is a witty type of poem with good humour as well. The photo is of the grim reaper I guess. Looks like he could mean business. But I like your words and how you expressed them. Keep up the great work. Drew
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Drew.
Steve
Comment from LIJ Red
Do not go quietly into the night, the poet said. Geez, what muscles it would take to hit a grain field with a ten foot scythe. (Still sounds better than a three meter scythe.) I like the beat and the NZ dialect.
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Do not go quietly into the night, the poet said. Geez, what muscles it would take to hit a grain field with a ten foot scythe. (Still sounds better than a three meter scythe.) I like the beat and the NZ dialect.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you - I think you are the only reviewer to make the connection to Dylan Thomas' poem.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
clever pairing of artwork and poem
excellent abcb rhyming
I really like the dialect/vernacular of the speaker and his feisty attitude
good alliteration in chop some other chap
strong cadence throughout
strong visuals
This is a guy after my own heart :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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clever pairing of artwork and poem
excellent abcb rhyming
I really like the dialect/vernacular of the speaker and his feisty attitude
good alliteration in chop some other chap
strong cadence throughout
strong visuals
This is a guy after my own heart :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Yeah, feisty old coot isn't he? Gotta love him....
Not planning on dying any time soon.
Steve
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahahahaha! G'day Steve. That mate is one funny piece of poetry mate. I just burst out laughing and all 600 family members came running in here to see if I had gone nutso! When I saw the pic. I thought it was Dean! You are a genius Sir. Cheers Fez
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Hahahahahaha! G'day Steve. That mate is one funny piece of poetry mate. I just burst out laughing and all 600 family members came running in here to see if I had gone nutso! When I saw the pic. I thought it was Dean! You are a genius Sir. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Yeah looks a bit like one of Dean's.
Keep an eye on all those relatives, my friend!
Steve
Comment from krys123
Steve; I really did enjoy your writing so much and even the vernacular is excellent. the rhyming of course is neither forced nor labored and very helpful in the rhythmic flow where your cadence, tempo and meter help so well with your rhythm. Your imagination is truly inventive and resourcefully creative. Very clever and witty also. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Steve; I really did enjoy your writing so much and even the vernacular is excellent. the rhyming of course is neither forced nor labored and very helpful in the rhythmic flow where your cadence, tempo and meter help so well with your rhythm. Your imagination is truly inventive and resourcefully creative. Very clever and witty also. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Alex.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome Steve
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very clever rhyming quatrain poem. That's speaking your mind. I enjoyed this one, my friend. Great use of dialect--of course you are good at everything. Take care~Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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A very clever rhyming quatrain poem. That's speaking your mind. I enjoyed this one, my friend. Great use of dialect--of course you are good at everything. Take care~Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Debbie.
Steve
Comment from donaldcolson
Great poetic work. Entertaining and full of sentiments we would all wish for. Good to view death as at our beck and call. Yes wouldn't it be great ti have that kind of control. Like the dialect. don
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Great poetic work. Entertaining and full of sentiments we would all wish for. Good to view death as at our beck and call. Yes wouldn't it be great ti have that kind of control. Like the dialect. don
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Donald.
Maybe we can't send him packing, but we don't have to welcome him in!
Steve
Comment from Debbie Noland
Love the use of dialogue in this entertaining little affirmation of life. It helps to create a humorous tone, with the poem's persona asserting a perceived control over death, making for a spirited piece that sends a message we can all relate to. Alliteration in Line 3 is nice too.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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Love the use of dialogue in this entertaining little affirmation of life. It helps to create a humorous tone, with the poem's persona asserting a perceived control over death, making for a spirited piece that sends a message we can all relate to. Alliteration in Line 3 is nice too.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Debbie - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
