Love Remembered
contest entry53 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Beautiful artwork that complements your Christmas story very well. I found it hard to understand but that must be me. I think the husband died on the road because of black ice. Then his wife and kids organised it all. Best wishes for the contest. And the same wishes to you and yours.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Beautiful artwork that complements your Christmas story very well. I found it hard to understand but that must be me. I think the husband died on the road because of black ice. Then his wife and kids organised it all. Best wishes for the contest. And the same wishes to you and yours.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much, Ine. Happy Holidays to you! Bev
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a lovely story, and had a great lesson to teach. I do worry at this time of year that there will be lots of unhappy people due to problems with alcohol, drunk driving being one of the worst. This is a well written story, and a wake-up call. Well done! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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That was a lovely story, and had a great lesson to teach. I do worry at this time of year that there will be lots of unhappy people due to problems with alcohol, drunk driving being one of the worst. This is a well written story, and a wake-up call. Well done! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much, Sandra. I always feel a special empathy for people with addictions this time of year. I struggle with a terrible sweet-tooth and there's stuff everywhere. I can only imagine something worse like alcohol. Anyway, so kind of you to read and review my story in such a gracious manner. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from michaelcahill
This was a great pleasure to enjoy as a reader. Very uplifting and true to life I thought. As a writer, WOW. I'm so lucky to have found this place. I hear show don't tell all the time. It's when I see it in action that it truly begins to sink in as more than a catch phrase. The scene where he's described as a drunk and he breaks into a sob is amazing. I've no doubt it would take me half a page of blathering to "tell" what you "showed" in so very few words. Just wonderful. A great story and no doubt a strong contender. Good luck, mikey
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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This was a great pleasure to enjoy as a reader. Very uplifting and true to life I thought. As a writer, WOW. I'm so lucky to have found this place. I hear show don't tell all the time. It's when I see it in action that it truly begins to sink in as more than a catch phrase. The scene where he's described as a drunk and he breaks into a sob is amazing. I've no doubt it would take me half a page of blathering to "tell" what you "showed" in so very few words. Just wonderful. A great story and no doubt a strong contender. Good luck, mikey
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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What a truly gracious and generous review, Mikey. I really appreciate your kind insights and compliments. I agree completely - this site has been truly invaluable in teaching me so much about good writing. And I think of you as being one of the bright stars among so many good writers.
Thank you for the good luck wishes, as well. Much appreciated!
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from boxergirl
Great job with your Christmas narrative, Bev. The best way to brighten our own lives is to help others. Great imagery details and you've left me wanting more. 8-)
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Great job with your Christmas narrative, Bev. The best way to brighten our own lives is to help others. Great imagery details and you've left me wanting more. 8-)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much, BG. I appreciate the great review! :) Bev
Comment from Nosha17
That was a heart-warming story so apt this Christmas season. It is also what people should do all year round, feel for others and offer friendship and help. Well narrated, excellent characters and dialogue and thoroughly enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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That was a heart-warming story so apt this Christmas season. It is also what people should do all year round, feel for others and offer friendship and help. Well narrated, excellent characters and dialogue and thoroughly enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Faye, thanks so much for the great review and good luck wishes. I appreciate both very much. Merry Christmas, Bev
Comment from Zue65
This is nice, strangers meeting, with a seed of doubt but eventually the plot made in heaven, made them trust each other to give way for the Christmas tree to be finally cut and allow Christmas to happen in that lonely house deserted by a departed father and friend of Rick. I enjoyed it. Excellent.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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This is nice, strangers meeting, with a seed of doubt but eventually the plot made in heaven, made them trust each other to give way for the Christmas tree to be finally cut and allow Christmas to happen in that lonely house deserted by a departed father and friend of Rick. I enjoyed it. Excellent.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks so very much for your generous and gracious review, NASSUS. I appreciate your taking time to read at this busy time of hear! Merry Christmas, Bev
Comment from amahra
Great Christmas story. Well written with lots of descriptive writing to engage the reader. Great contest entry as well.
A thick log caught fire and fell forward, hitting the stove's door with a thud. [great bit of detail that bring realism to your reader]
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Great Christmas story. Well written with lots of descriptive writing to engage the reader. Great contest entry as well.
A thick log caught fire and fell forward, hitting the stove's door with a thud. [great bit of detail that bring realism to your reader]
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks a bunch for the awesome review, Amahra. I sure appreciate you taking time out read my story during this busy time of year. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from flylikeaneagle
A warm meal and friendly faces are always nice. Warm house and conversations are last a long time. Glad that she can get a tree for the season and they can get to know each other during the season of joy. Nice story. I had to make chicken tortilla soup for the family. Come on over! Merry Christmas. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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A warm meal and friendly faces are always nice. Warm house and conversations are last a long time. Glad that she can get a tree for the season and they can get to know each other during the season of joy. Nice story. I had to make chicken tortilla soup for the family. Come on over! Merry Christmas. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the gracious review and generous invitation, fly. I love chicken tortilla soup, but must head south to spend time with my relatives. Hope you have a really lovely Christmas! :) Bev
Comment from abbasjoy
A beautiful story, with a bonding of mother and son with this stranger from her husband's past. Suddenly, after being really sceptical, mother and son are able to relate to the man who was a friend of his dad and her husband.
All three needing each other, and because of this common bond they are able to finally connect.
Enjoyable read.
Blessings to you and your family, Bev, and wishing you a wonderful Christmas and New Year.
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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A beautiful story, with a bonding of mother and son with this stranger from her husband's past. Suddenly, after being really sceptical, mother and son are able to relate to the man who was a friend of his dad and her husband.
All three needing each other, and because of this common bond they are able to finally connect.
Enjoyable read.
Blessings to you and your family, Bev, and wishing you a wonderful Christmas and New Year.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Joan, thank you so very much for your thoughtful, generous and gracious review. It means a lot coming from such a lovely lady!
All the Blessings you heart can hold,
Bev
Comment from judiverse
Very touching story, and the loneliness of Christmas without your spouse is really felt by Jan and comes across well. The fact that they have to skimp on Christmas adds to the feeling of emptiness. The arrival of the stranger, Richard, is introduced well. The lack of trust Jan shows is sensible, as one never knows what to expect these days. Richard presents a credible story, although it's news to Jan about her husband being an alcoholic. We don't know what has brought Richard out at this time with a desire to see David. He is now in trouble himself, evidently relapsed. The meeting is good all around. Jan and her son have a chance to do a kindness and Richard is going to chop down a Christmas tree for them. This reminds me of the radio shows that our group performs. It would be that kind of story. (I question whether you need the introduction about Curtis and the dinner invitation that doesn't get delivered. Just start with Jan's dream about her husband. See how that works.) Great story, but I think it stands without that. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Very touching story, and the loneliness of Christmas without your spouse is really felt by Jan and comes across well. The fact that they have to skimp on Christmas adds to the feeling of emptiness. The arrival of the stranger, Richard, is introduced well. The lack of trust Jan shows is sensible, as one never knows what to expect these days. Richard presents a credible story, although it's news to Jan about her husband being an alcoholic. We don't know what has brought Richard out at this time with a desire to see David. He is now in trouble himself, evidently relapsed. The meeting is good all around. Jan and her son have a chance to do a kindness and Richard is going to chop down a Christmas tree for them. This reminds me of the radio shows that our group performs. It would be that kind of story. (I question whether you need the introduction about Curtis and the dinner invitation that doesn't get delivered. Just start with Jan's dream about her husband. See how that works.) Great story, but I think it stands without that. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks for your suggestions and insights. Judi. I appreciate your taking time to read at this busy time of year. I'll need luck in the contest as there are some very good entries. Thanks again!
:) Bev
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You're very welcome. There are always so many entries. I liked the feeling of hope in yours, with all the characters having something added to their lives at Christmas. judi
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Thanks again, Judi.
