The Ghost of Marion Lear
A tale of love, loss and revenge in the old west...75 total reviews
Comment from ravim
From ghosts and goblins to westerns and Marilyn! I've now got grips with your style and thoughts, 'am more at ease than before. This was nice encounter to pen, though, I felt the story fell short at the climax. Not your fault. It still had that imperial touch, kill and mayhem. Suits you rather well. (I'd love to see a Nature poem from you!)...
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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From ghosts and goblins to westerns and Marilyn! I've now got grips with your style and thoughts, 'am more at ease than before. This was nice encounter to pen, though, I felt the story fell short at the climax. Not your fault. It still had that imperial touch, kill and mayhem. Suits you rather well. (I'd love to see a Nature poem from you!)...
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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I've written several nature haiku, ravim, but none of them have ever done very well. Like a reviewer once told me, it's probably best to stick with what I know. Every time I try to branch out and write something kinder, and more gentle, it's not very well received.
~Merry Christmas
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. Lines rhymed good to writing.
IN THE YEAR OF OUR LORD, 1834, A MAN RODE IN TO TUCKER'S SOUND,
WITH FIERY BLOCK EYES, HE WAS ONE DESPISED, FOLKS RAN WHEN HE CAME 'ROUND.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Excellent poem. Lines rhymed good to writing.
IN THE YEAR OF OUR LORD, 1834, A MAN RODE IN TO TUCKER'S SOUND,
WITH FIERY BLOCK EYES, HE WAS ONE DESPISED, FOLKS RAN WHEN HE CAME 'ROUND.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks, thee-name. Yep, that about sums it up, right there.
~Dean
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Dean - this western story poem was wonderful in every way. I loved it, as always your images and detail are fabulous. This read so smoothly it had a lyrical feel to it and flowed down the page effortlessly. I enjoy Charlie's stories and funny enough this reminded me of him before I even got to your author note. Excellent work my friend i enjoyed every minute of it.
Thanks for sharing and happy holidays.
Mo
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Dear Dean - this western story poem was wonderful in every way. I loved it, as always your images and detail are fabulous. This read so smoothly it had a lyrical feel to it and flowed down the page effortlessly. I enjoy Charlie's stories and funny enough this reminded me of him before I even got to your author note. Excellent work my friend i enjoyed every minute of it.
Thanks for sharing and happy holidays.
Mo
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much, Mo', and Happy Holidays and a very Merry Christmas to you & your family. ;)
Dean
Comment from robina1978
I did not realise it was a poem. It rhymed all the way. Tells the story of a man that fancies a woman and she accepts. But then someone else calls him for a duel, and kills him. The female is beyond comforting.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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I did not realise it was a poem. It rhymed all the way. Tells the story of a man that fancies a woman and she accepts. But then someone else calls him for a duel, and kills him. The female is beyond comforting.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Ine. Have a happy holidays! ~Dean
Comment from evilynne
An old time Western - how neat! I haven't read Charlie's work, but I'll check it out soon. As for your work, it is spellbinding as always and reading it is a pleasure. Have a Happy Holiday! Evi
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An old time Western - how neat! I haven't read Charlie's work, but I'll check it out soon. As for your work, it is spellbinding as always and reading it is a pleasure. Have a Happy Holiday! Evi
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
Comment from Eric1
Hi Dean, this is a classic my friend, a real story in a poem! I was completely enthralled from beginning to end, great flow of words brilliant rhyming and the dialogue was spot on, I am following Charlies latest at the moment, but this would easily stand alongside it, Brilliant!
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Hi Dean, this is a classic my friend, a real story in a poem! I was completely enthralled from beginning to end, great flow of words brilliant rhyming and the dialogue was spot on, I am following Charlies latest at the moment, but this would easily stand alongside it, Brilliant!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Very good the master at work again.
I love the flow of your pieces and the ease of reading.
this one was different and I loved the story line. Nicely done
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Very good the master at work again.
I love the flow of your pieces and the ease of reading.
this one was different and I loved the story line. Nicely done
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks very much, Barb. i appreciate your comments.
~Dean
Comment from Oatmeal
Dean K,
Very nicely written work. Perfectly arranged. Very good formatting. Smooth flowing. Understandable. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Dean K,
Very nicely written work. Perfectly arranged. Very good formatting. Smooth flowing. Understandable. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
Comment from DR DIP
That is fkg awesome deano! you never cease to amaze with your amazing productions I love the stories in these style of rhyming poems you so eloquently write so prolofically
thanks for sharing yet another amazing production
as always, a friend
dip
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That is fkg awesome deano! you never cease to amaze with your amazing productions I love the stories in these style of rhyming poems you so eloquently write so prolofically
thanks for sharing yet another amazing production
as always, a friend
dip
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Intriguing western story poem. Her sweet love lay dead to rights in the dirt streets. Thus said, Joe's Dillinger felled him between the eyes! The day is over, as the town becomes colder, whores need a cryin' shoulder. Not to be coy, oh, boy, this is city slicker's cotton picker. I got my single action six shooter; I look like Clint, as I squint at this marvelous western flick. Could lead to script -- stories from tales of the crypt. Count your cylinders. Spook-a-D00, boo... Dang, I got a spent chamber!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Intriguing western story poem. Her sweet love lay dead to rights in the dirt streets. Thus said, Joe's Dillinger felled him between the eyes! The day is over, as the town becomes colder, whores need a cryin' shoulder. Not to be coy, oh, boy, this is city slicker's cotton picker. I got my single action six shooter; I look like Clint, as I squint at this marvelous western flick. Could lead to script -- stories from tales of the crypt. Count your cylinders. Spook-a-D00, boo... Dang, I got a spent chamber!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Spook-a-Doo. Glad you enjoyed...
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