A Lovely Day In Dean's Neighborhood
A Short Story Of Intrigue and Chicanery26 total reviews
Comment from CR Delport
Oh my, Mickey. You sure have a curious mind :) Those 4 star reviews are rather scary, but the reviewers better watch out :) Good luck in this contest, if they don't disqualify you again :)
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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Oh my, Mickey. You sure have a curious mind :) Those 4 star reviews are rather scary, but the reviewers better watch out :) Good luck in this contest, if they don't disqualify you again :)
Have a great day.
Christelle.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from nor84
At the risk of being done away with suddenly by one of your pals, Mikey, I have to say I think you have the wrong grizzly. It's grisly you need. Gosh, hanging out in Dean's neighborhood could be hazardous to one's health. Be careful.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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At the risk of being done away with suddenly by one of your pals, Mikey, I have to say I think you have the wrong grizzly. It's grisly you need. Gosh, hanging out in Dean's neighborhood could be hazardous to one's health. Be careful.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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I just couldn't bear to have a piece without at least one mistake! Hahaha! I'm too lazy to do any of this stuff. I just write about it. :))
Comment from judiverse
I have to dispense with a 6 for this. It is creative and ingeniously funny. Great dialogue. I imagine more than one person has wanted that which possesses Dean Kuch's brain. I like the ending where Dean wins the contest over Mikey Boy, even though Dean's been reduced to writing about sweet puppies curing vampires. I'm sure all the ladies on FanStory loved that one. "The Horror of the Helper" was fun. I loved the "crapola Ayatollah" phrase. Great work. Great characterizations. Big of you to Dean emerge the winner! judi
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I have to dispense with a 6 for this. It is creative and ingeniously funny. Great dialogue. I imagine more than one person has wanted that which possesses Dean Kuch's brain. I like the ending where Dean wins the contest over Mikey Boy, even though Dean's been reduced to writing about sweet puppies curing vampires. I'm sure all the ladies on FanStory loved that one. "The Horror of the Helper" was fun. I loved the "crapola Ayatollah" phrase. Great work. Great characterizations. Big of you to Dean emerge the winner! judi
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from mikemagine
Funny stuff here, Michael. Very cleverly worked out, and I think this could take it...
I never watched Fried Green...My guess is that I'd fall asleep or change the channel.
Peace!
Mike
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Funny stuff here, Michael. Very cleverly worked out, and I think this could take it...
I never watched Fried Green...My guess is that I'd fall asleep or change the channel.
Peace!
Mike
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Wow x a zillion. There are so many lines I favor. Lots of presents to unwrap in this demented, twisted, warped, epilogue of the Dean -- of Spooky Dean. I highlighted some of my favorite scenes. Yet, this whole darn thing is fantastic. I busted a rib or two detangling this lethal concoction cocktail served in a earn, ashes, brains and all. Although, I never knew you as a lover, LOl! I good sneak attack, but Dean got jacked! Now... I must investigate the noise in Dean's abstract carnivorous mind. Wow! I must read this horror several times to get the total impact from this... roasted brain episode of the weirdest kind. Don't you mind... Mikey: "Hold him down. Watch his claws, they're dipped in poison! I've got the syringe. Now, hold him still." Yes, through the ear canal. Right there, the horror center of the brain. I've got it. Now to inject it into mine. Ohhhhh. Yeah. Oh my! I can feel it already. Perhaps I'll remove a little sissiness from my brain for him to enjoy. Yes! How diabolically ironic. I'll be the horror master and he'll be the big panty-waist, girly-man that I once was. There ya go, Deano. Enjoy crying over Fried Green Tomatoes, see how you like it." The world is really a beautiful place. Even worthless Mikey here has his good points. He's ah, well... and his buddy, Wacky, he's a great ah... Crap! I wrote the most hideous, horrific, tale of woe and terror I've ever written and he still beat me. Where did I go wrong?
Wackydo: "Well, there'll be other contests, Mikey. Dean is hard to beat." You should have listened to me, Mikey. I told you, it isn't the subject matter you need from his brain, it's the talent. This is killer! And a chiller! Count your doubloon, as I read again, my friend. do loco
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Wow x a zillion. There are so many lines I favor. Lots of presents to unwrap in this demented, twisted, warped, epilogue of the Dean -- of Spooky Dean. I highlighted some of my favorite scenes. Yet, this whole darn thing is fantastic. I busted a rib or two detangling this lethal concoction cocktail served in a earn, ashes, brains and all. Although, I never knew you as a lover, LOl! I good sneak attack, but Dean got jacked! Now... I must investigate the noise in Dean's abstract carnivorous mind. Wow! I must read this horror several times to get the total impact from this... roasted brain episode of the weirdest kind. Don't you mind... Mikey: "Hold him down. Watch his claws, they're dipped in poison! I've got the syringe. Now, hold him still." Yes, through the ear canal. Right there, the horror center of the brain. I've got it. Now to inject it into mine. Ohhhhh. Yeah. Oh my! I can feel it already. Perhaps I'll remove a little sissiness from my brain for him to enjoy. Yes! How diabolically ironic. I'll be the horror master and he'll be the big panty-waist, girly-man that I once was. There ya go, Deano. Enjoy crying over Fried Green Tomatoes, see how you like it." The world is really a beautiful place. Even worthless Mikey here has his good points. He's ah, well... and his buddy, Wacky, he's a great ah... Crap! I wrote the most hideous, horrific, tale of woe and terror I've ever written and he still beat me. Where did I go wrong?
Wackydo: "Well, there'll be other contests, Mikey. Dean is hard to beat." You should have listened to me, Mikey. I told you, it isn't the subject matter you need from his brain, it's the talent. This is killer! And a chiller! Count your doubloon, as I read again, my friend. do loco
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Pleasant screams...talent and wisdom and humor are the keys of thinking outside the box. You guys are great and make me laugh and cry and bite my nails...opps, thinking poetry not prose. I can see the three of you take the youth to a camp site with eagle scouts. Then at night tap at the tent and scare these kids, then come in to tell stories all night long. During the day you guys go fishing, one is missing...
cooking the fish on the fire while everyone is looking...lots of ideas with you guys.
Merry Christmas! Joy to your world. flylikeaneagle
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Pleasant screams...talent and wisdom and humor are the keys of thinking outside the box. You guys are great and make me laugh and cry and bite my nails...opps, thinking poetry not prose. I can see the three of you take the youth to a camp site with eagle scouts. Then at night tap at the tent and scare these kids, then come in to tell stories all night long. During the day you guys go fishing, one is missing...
cooking the fish on the fire while everyone is looking...lots of ideas with you guys.
Merry Christmas! Joy to your world. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Bravo! Exactly the kind of story I was hoping for. You are either a very courageous or very foolish man to inject raw, unrefined Dean Kuch directly into your brain.
Fantastic story. I never knew you had such a dark side. Having Dean write tender loving poetry and still winning for horror is the scariest part of this story.
Remind me not to ever make you and Wackydo angry, you never know what you two might do.
Fantastic story.
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Bravo! Exactly the kind of story I was hoping for. You are either a very courageous or very foolish man to inject raw, unrefined Dean Kuch directly into your brain.
Fantastic story. I never knew you had such a dark side. Having Dean write tender loving poetry and still winning for horror is the scariest part of this story.
Remind me not to ever make you and Wackydo angry, you never know what you two might do.
Fantastic story.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from Sankey
Wow! This is a real giggle mate. Now I dunno if you really wanted reviewing and correction on here or just for us to split our sides or fill our britches, witches sindalating stitches laughing haha! Thinking about Rolf harris in his shadier I guess days now we know...and the Kourt of King Karakticus did you know that one?? I actually feel like this is a really big bitch about contests on FS ha. I have never really bothered.
Spags or? As you like...
I will have them for din(n)er. There was another one of these too ha.
"Well, the(re)(-y)'ll be other contests
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Wow! This is a real giggle mate. Now I dunno if you really wanted reviewing and correction on here or just for us to split our sides or fill our britches, witches sindalating stitches laughing haha! Thinking about Rolf harris in his shadier I guess days now we know...and the Kourt of King Karakticus did you know that one?? I actually feel like this is a really big bitch about contests on FS ha. I have never really bothered.
Spags or? As you like...
I will have them for din(n)er. There was another one of these too ha.
"Well, the(re)(-y)'ll be other contests
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
This was some funny stuff, Mikey. I think you bought the winning ticket.
Just one thing I don't think was intentional:
I will have them for diner. [for DINNER. >> Also misspelled in next sentence.]
BTW, you and I are probably the only two here on FS who remember the real beauty of candy apple red!
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This was some funny stuff, Mikey. I think you bought the winning ticket.
Just one thing I don't think was intentional:
I will have them for diner. [for DINNER. >> Also misspelled in next sentence.]
BTW, you and I are probably the only two here on FS who remember the real beauty of candy apple red!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Damn, maybe they're right, I am getting predictable. I should be writing about the joy and beauty in the world. The delicate petals of a red rose blushing like the cheeks of a freshly kissed young woman in love, impaled on a rusty spike, having dove from the precipice of captivity in the ghouls tower, preferring a grizzly death to a heinous life of degradation and horror... yes, that is much more uplifting and positive." --- Heh, heh, ya' know, I thought about it, Mikey, especially after I read this paragraph. But, nah-h-h-h-h, I think I'll stick with being as predictably horrific as I possibly can. That tree-hugger stuff is for pussies, LOL...
This was g-r-r-r-r-r-e-a-t fun, my friend, and I sincerely hope you meant every word. The scary thing is you were right about 99.2% of the time on what I'd say, given a similar circumstance. Especially the part about four-star reviews.
Cretins! heh-heh...
~Dean
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"Damn, maybe they're right, I am getting predictable. I should be writing about the joy and beauty in the world. The delicate petals of a red rose blushing like the cheeks of a freshly kissed young woman in love, impaled on a rusty spike, having dove from the precipice of captivity in the ghouls tower, preferring a grizzly death to a heinous life of degradation and horror... yes, that is much more uplifting and positive." --- Heh, heh, ya' know, I thought about it, Mikey, especially after I read this paragraph. But, nah-h-h-h-h, I think I'll stick with being as predictably horrific as I possibly can. That tree-hugger stuff is for pussies, LOL...
This was g-r-r-r-r-r-e-a-t fun, my friend, and I sincerely hope you meant every word. The scary thing is you were right about 99.2% of the time on what I'd say, given a similar circumstance. Especially the part about four-star reviews.
Cretins! heh-heh...
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
