He left His throne
God's odyssey80 total reviews
Comment from GE Parson
AMEN MY BROTHER!AMEN!
You poem reminded me of one of my favorite bible passages Philp. 2:5-11.
It just staggers the mine to dwell on the fact that God put on the work clothing of humanity and lived in this oil world
God bless you my good Brotrher,
Brother Jerry
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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AMEN MY BROTHER!AMEN!
You poem reminded me of one of my favorite bible passages Philp. 2:5-11.
It just staggers the mine to dwell on the fact that God put on the work clothing of humanity and lived in this oil world
God bless you my good Brotrher,
Brother Jerry
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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You're so right dear brother, I don't know how people can keep away, but we'll keep telling them till they turn, outstanding review and encouragement, you're such a blessing, Jerry, Roy.
Comment from Muffins
Each stanza stays on its own power illuminating the love the narrator has for God. The reader follows the path Jesus took for mankind. He did come off his throne even before he was a bump in Mary's stomach.
The best stanza in this poem, the one that I read several times because it spoke to me:"He had no place to lay His head
nor own the clothes He wore,
relying on His Father's hand
His trust placed in faith's store.
The last line represent faith without conditions or wait and see attachments. Beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Each stanza stays on its own power illuminating the love the narrator has for God. The reader follows the path Jesus took for mankind. He did come off his throne even before he was a bump in Mary's stomach.
The best stanza in this poem, the one that I read several times because it spoke to me:"He had no place to lay His head
nor own the clothes He wore,
relying on His Father's hand
His trust placed in faith's store.
The last line represent faith without conditions or wait and see attachments. Beautiful poem.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much for these outstanding words, review and stars, I am so encouraged by them, merry Christmas and God's blessing on you and yours, Roy.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Roy,
A lovely poetic telling of the Christmas tale from John 1. Probably the most magnificent description one can find of Christ's Godhead.
"And the light shined in the darkness, and the darkness overcame it not."
Patrick
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Hi Roy,
A lovely poetic telling of the Christmas tale from John 1. Probably the most magnificent description one can find of Christ's Godhead.
"And the light shined in the darkness, and the darkness overcame it not."
Patrick
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Very encouraging comments Patrick, my friend, it's the hope that we have, that darkness can never overcome light, inspirational review and stars, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Neonewman
Just outstanding the artwork you have chosen to compliment this well-crafted piece of brilliance. I will share this story with pride and Jesus is my Savior.
Thank you for sharing this most uplifting piece.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Just outstanding the artwork you have chosen to compliment this well-crafted piece of brilliance. I will share this story with pride and Jesus is my Savior.
Thank you for sharing this most uplifting piece.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thank you Steve, for this most encouraging review, outstanding review and very generous stars, merry Christmas to you and yours, blessings, my friend, Roy.
Comment from Ekim777
Was not all Jerusalem, his throne and maybe all the world. That he surrendered his all for all of us; that is a pregnant phrase. Surely we too must surrender all. We must seek our own salvation. The uncanny question remains. How was he the son of God and was he not also just a man. As a person of another faith, I ask how did he differ from Job?
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Was not all Jerusalem, his throne and maybe all the world. That he surrendered his all for all of us; that is a pregnant phrase. Surely we too must surrender all. We must seek our own salvation. The uncanny question remains. How was he the son of God and was he not also just a man. As a person of another faith, I ask how did he differ from Job?
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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The crucifixion! nobody carried the sin, the degradation, the poverty, the sickness, name me one religion that pays that price, my friend, "for all have sinned and fall short of the Glory of God" who pays for the sins? no matter how many good things we do, we cannot escape judgement, except a perfect man (Christ)pays the price, do you not yet understand? Thanks for the great review! Blessings Roy.
Comment from chasennov
God's odyssey "He left His throne" This is again a strong message you're sending out to the deaf world, Roy. I say deaf because people only hear what they want to hear. Keep going strong. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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God's odyssey "He left His throne" This is again a strong message you're sending out to the deaf world, Roy. I say deaf because people only hear what they want to hear. Keep going strong. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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You're right my friend, it's my job to speak, it's God's job to save, great review and words, my friend, may God bless you this Christmas and beyond, Roy.
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Thank you, Roy. You are most welcome.
Comment from bhogg
I enjoyed your post Appropriate for this time of year or any other. I'm glad we're still able to write about and share our faith. Well written and beautifully presented. Bill
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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I enjoyed your post Appropriate for this time of year or any other. I'm glad we're still able to write about and share our faith. Well written and beautifully presented. Bill
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thanks Bill for these lovely words and great review and encouragement, blessing for Christmas and into the new for you and yours, Roy.
Comment from kiwijenny
He did not own a sailing boat
Or beach house by the shore,
He rose each day to heal the sick,
To save the rich or poor.
I love where these verses led me. To praise Him over again. Thank you so much Roy for your Godly writing.
God bless...I have no sixes left:o(
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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He did not own a sailing boat
Or beach house by the shore,
He rose each day to heal the sick,
To save the rich or poor.
I love where these verses led me. To praise Him over again. Thank you so much Roy for your Godly writing.
God bless...I have no sixes left:o(
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thank you Jenny, your blessing is enough, and your fellowship in Christ's sufferings, and thank you for it, plus the lovely comments, and great review, merry Christmas to you and yours, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Chikara
I much enjoy this piece for what it's saying. Strong flow and imagery; powerful statements. However, I have suggestions for change:
"For some said He's the Son of God "
Some say He's the Son of God
"but I say He's my saviour Lord"
but I call Him 'Saviour; Lord'!
Tightened it up; added some emotion for impact.
I would change the 5th stanza's place with the 4th because those cohesively paint an image of Christ, and this way, it is unbroken by the relatively unrelated lines. They better suit and set up your ending as well.
For that reason, I reworded the first line just a bit to better match transition.
"who died my sin to ban. "
This feels really awkwardly worded to me. I understand the idea. I think this could tie in better with something like this:
"Who proved, with God: Yes! I can!
This illustrates, that by copying Christ, we can do what all think impossible - live a life without sin, as Jesus did. It is the true objective of Christians; while it defers from the beloved sacrifice, this lends more energy and emotion as well as reads more cleanly.
It also builds up your finale perfectly, which already leads into Christ's example of faith in the Eternal, the Father.
"His trust placed in faith's store."
His trust placed within faith's store.
You're missing a syllable here; adding one more keeps the flow constant.
"How could I ever run from Him
or find another way,
He's captured every part of me
my soul, my heart, my day. "
How could I run away from Him
or find another way?
He's captured every part of me
My heart! My soul! Everyday!
You asked a question, yet ended with a period. I tweaked the first line to better illustrate the choice to run from Christ, as opposed to running away from a Christ that's chasing us.
The last line is changed for maximum energy and punch, ending your piece with vigor.
Hopefully you find these to be helpful; again, this is a very strong piece, it just needs a bit more for that awesome impact you are going for.
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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I much enjoy this piece for what it's saying. Strong flow and imagery; powerful statements. However, I have suggestions for change:
"For some said He's the Son of God "
Some say He's the Son of God
"but I say He's my saviour Lord"
but I call Him 'Saviour; Lord'!
Tightened it up; added some emotion for impact.
I would change the 5th stanza's place with the 4th because those cohesively paint an image of Christ, and this way, it is unbroken by the relatively unrelated lines. They better suit and set up your ending as well.
For that reason, I reworded the first line just a bit to better match transition.
"who died my sin to ban. "
This feels really awkwardly worded to me. I understand the idea. I think this could tie in better with something like this:
"Who proved, with God: Yes! I can!
This illustrates, that by copying Christ, we can do what all think impossible - live a life without sin, as Jesus did. It is the true objective of Christians; while it defers from the beloved sacrifice, this lends more energy and emotion as well as reads more cleanly.
It also builds up your finale perfectly, which already leads into Christ's example of faith in the Eternal, the Father.
"His trust placed in faith's store."
His trust placed within faith's store.
You're missing a syllable here; adding one more keeps the flow constant.
"How could I ever run from Him
or find another way,
He's captured every part of me
my soul, my heart, my day. "
How could I run away from Him
or find another way?
He's captured every part of me
My heart! My soul! Everyday!
You asked a question, yet ended with a period. I tweaked the first line to better illustrate the choice to run from Christ, as opposed to running away from a Christ that's chasing us.
The last line is changed for maximum energy and punch, ending your piece with vigor.
Hopefully you find these to be helpful; again, this is a very strong piece, it just needs a bit more for that awesome impact you are going for.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thank you, not for me!
Comment from tfawcus
'To heal the sin-worn rift' is a telling phrase. Mankind has a way of distancing itself from the love of God, and we continue to do so in so many ways. It is well to remember that Jesus is always there to heal the rifts we cause, and not just now in the Christmas season.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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'To heal the sin-worn rift' is a telling phrase. Mankind has a way of distancing itself from the love of God, and we continue to do so in so many ways. It is well to remember that Jesus is always there to heal the rifts we cause, and not just now in the Christmas season.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thanks Tony for this lovely review and comments, merry Christmas to you and yours, blessings, Roy.
