The House
If these old walls could talk50 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Nostalgia takes many forms and is often bound up in the places of our past. Not all the memories are happy ones and the time comes when it is best to move on. Nonetheless, the rose-tinted specs are precious, too!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
Nostalgia takes many forms and is often bound up in the places of our past. Not all the memories are happy ones and the time comes when it is best to move on. Nonetheless, the rose-tinted specs are precious, too!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Patti R.
A beautiful poem, Janet. There are many such abandoned houses on these prairies. I always spend a few minutes wondering at the stories that were born inside the slanting walls. The rhyme is strong and the meter very good.
I'm so sorry to hear that your niece's health has deteriorated. I know you were so hopeful a little while back. How can you not be reminded of this sadness? It will affect the holidays for all those who love her.
Patti
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
A beautiful poem, Janet. There are many such abandoned houses on these prairies. I always spend a few minutes wondering at the stories that were born inside the slanting walls. The rhyme is strong and the meter very good.
I'm so sorry to hear that your niece's health has deteriorated. I know you were so hopeful a little while back. How can you not be reminded of this sadness? It will affect the holidays for all those who love her.
Patti
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thank you Patti for your thoughtful and sincere review. I'm always fascinated by old houses and cabins as I wonder about the people who lived in them.
Thank you too for your thoughts about my niece. Since her last trip to the Mayo Clinic, she is able to control her pain better which is making it easier on her family. Hoping to enjoy this Christmas with her.
Thinking of you and your family at this holiday time. My prayers are with you.
Merry Christmas
Janet
Comment from Pullmanspb
I have often thought, when passing by abandoned homes, what is the story of that home? who used to live there? who were they?
You captured that idea and mental image quite well.
Merry Christmas
Steven
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
I have often thought, when passing by abandoned homes, what is the story of that home? who used to live there? who were they?
You captured that idea and mental image quite well.
Merry Christmas
Steven
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you Steven for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings and 'erry Christmas.
Janet
Comment from kateabb
I love the photo and the landscape. The verses evoke the imagery. It makes me wonder what became of the family that called the house a home and why now no one lives there.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
I love the photo and the landscape. The verses evoke the imagery. It makes me wonder what became of the family that called the house a home and why now no one lives there.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging reiview.
Blessings and Merry Christmas.
Janet
Comment from TAB_that's me
A great poem Janet of memories of your past. I am so sorry though about your niece. Wishing you a great holiday season.
Teresa
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
A great poem Janet of memories of your past. I am so sorry though about your niece. Wishing you a great holiday season.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you Teresa for for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings and Merry Christmas
Janet
Comment from Just2Write
This is such a touching and quiet poem, Janet. I love the nostalgia in it. Old homes all are filled with stories of families. Hopefully, their memories are good ones.
I'm so sorry to learn of your niece and her struggles this Christmas. I hope she is able to take in some joy.
Rose.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
This is such a touching and quiet poem, Janet. I love the nostalgia in it. Old homes all are filled with stories of families. Hopefully, their memories are good ones.
I'm so sorry to learn of your niece and her struggles this Christmas. I hope she is able to take in some joy.
Rose.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for your sympathy for my family. She did enjoy Christmas and we hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from Eric1
Hi Janet, this is a most beautiful yet haunting poem my friend, your wonderful words have an eeriness about them yet they are lovely to read, Ghosts of the past often come back and become subjects of our poetry, I sincerely hope that your niece pulls through, I lost my 24 year old daughter last December, so I know what you are feeling, God Bless.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
Hi Janet, this is a most beautiful yet haunting poem my friend, your wonderful words have an eeriness about them yet they are lovely to read, Ghosts of the past often come back and become subjects of our poetry, I sincerely hope that your niece pulls through, I lost my 24 year old daughter last December, so I know what you are feeling, God Bless.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for your sympathy for my family. She did enjoy Christmas and we hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
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You are most welcome Janet, I hope all is well.
Comment from Dean Kuch
You've created a wonderful write here, Janet, one that speaks to that well-known phrase, "If these walls could talk"
An old, abandoned house is a lot like a ghost in may ways. They hold and store memories, those whispered musings of bygone days, lost loved ones, and times past. A house is just a structure made up of mortar, brick, wood, and a few nails, and such. It takes a family living in it to make it a home. Once that family leaves or moves away, if it's never re-inhabited then any new memories cease, and the old ones are trapped inside forever. At least as long as the house is still standing.
Again, beautifully done, Janet, and Merry Christmas to you & yours. ~Dean
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
You've created a wonderful write here, Janet, one that speaks to that well-known phrase, "If these walls could talk"
An old, abandoned house is a lot like a ghost in may ways. They hold and store memories, those whispered musings of bygone days, lost loved ones, and times past. A house is just a structure made up of mortar, brick, wood, and a few nails, and such. It takes a family living in it to make it a home. Once that family leaves or moves away, if it's never re-inhabited then any new memories cease, and the old ones are trapped inside forever. At least as long as the house is still standing.
Again, beautifully done, Janet, and Merry Christmas to you & yours. ~Dean
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you Dean for a thoughtful and encouraging review. Truly, a house is just a structure of mortar, brick, wood and a few nails - will a lot of nails in our house but without a family - it is just that - a structure and not a home.
Happy New Year
Janet
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The pleasure was all mine. :)
Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, the striking feature of your post is the sudden change of mood as you contrast the house in its glory days with its present state of neglect. I too, as a child, lived in a house which was left empty after our family moved and i recognise the sadness that seeing/recalling the old place brings.
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
Yes, the striking feature of your post is the sudden change of mood as you contrast the house in its glory days with its present state of neglect. I too, as a child, lived in a house which was left empty after our family moved and i recognise the sadness that seeing/recalling the old place brings.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you Steve for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from Ekim777
Even when an old home is abandoned it inherits the personalities of those who once lived in it. This comes out clearly and succinctly in the poem. I would suggest you cut some of the adjectives like; 'the golden sun' which is like dead wood and is not paying its dues. Indeed all adjectives are an indulgence in the frame work of poetry. Best wishes. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
Even when an old home is abandoned it inherits the personalities of those who once lived in it. This comes out clearly and succinctly in the poem. I would suggest you cut some of the adjectives like; 'the golden sun' which is like dead wood and is not paying its dues. Indeed all adjectives are an indulgence in the frame work of poetry. Best wishes. -Ekim777
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Happy New Year
Janet