The House
If these old walls could talk50 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
A lovely poem about the changing view of 'home'
This is a very reflective, personal write about a place where childhood was a warm affectionate experience. It is a place to remember the stately nature of the abode, the warmth of family, especially the mother's cooking. The poem moves to later times when abandoned, its shabby state giving rise to feelings of nostalgia. Your voice reflects on 'stories to be told if these old walls could talk', but then moves on recognising that this moment marks 'letting go'. Nicely penned and emotionally resonant.
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A lovely poem about the changing view of 'home'
This is a very reflective, personal write about a place where childhood was a warm affectionate experience. It is a place to remember the stately nature of the abode, the warmth of family, especially the mother's cooking. The poem moves to later times when abandoned, its shabby state giving rise to feelings of nostalgia. Your voice reflects on 'stories to be told if these old walls could talk', but then moves on recognising that this moment marks 'letting go'. Nicely penned and emotionally resonant.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Janet. That is a really nice piece of poetry and I enjoyed it very much. Then I read your notes. I am so sorry about your niece mate, I feel for you and her. Cheers and God Bless.
Fez
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G'day Janet. That is a really nice piece of poetry and I enjoyed it very much. Then I read your notes. I am so sorry about your niece mate, I feel for you and her. Cheers and God Bless.
Fez
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and encouraging review and for your sympathy for my family. We had a good Christmas with her and hope for a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from Quoiky
Your poem was very lovely. Sad, but lovely. You captured great descriptions with every detail. It had excellent rhyme and tempo, and I found myself wishing there was more. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas, and I hope your niece finds a miracle. Many hugs!!
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Your poem was very lovely. Sad, but lovely. You captured great descriptions with every detail. It had excellent rhyme and tempo, and I found myself wishing there was more. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas, and I hope your niece finds a miracle. Many hugs!!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and encouraging review and for concern for my niece. We had a great Christmas with her and hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from LIJ Red
my community has been swept with death and sickness in 2014 and I see where you're coming from. Very acceptable quatrains here.
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my community has been swept with death and sickness in 2014 and I see where you're coming from. Very acceptable quatrains here.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you LIJ for a thoughtful review. I hope 2015 brings health and happiness to you and your community.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from pattipac
Your lovely description of your abandoned home place flows like the loving memories you share within your well penned poem. I am lifting a prayer for your niece and your entire family. Sorry, I am out of sixes, or you would get one.
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Your lovely description of your abandoned home place flows like the loving memories you share within your well penned poem. I am lifting a prayer for your niece and your entire family. Sorry, I am out of sixes, or you would get one.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and encouraging review. Virtual sixes are always a plus.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh your poor niece. I will be praying for her and your family
I have often wondered what it would be like if houses could talk.
The stories they would tell.
God bless
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Oh your poor niece. I will be praying for her and your family
I have often wondered what it would be like if houses could talk.
The stories they would tell.
God bless
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and encouraging review and for your concern for my niece. We had a great Christmas with her and hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from acerisestory
Your poem is beautiful, Jmf. It's full of beautiful memories of times past. Your last stanza was a bit of a letdown, but I suppose it's really the cycle of life.
Your abcb rhyming is well done, and you've made good use of alliteration with stately/stood; shutters/sill; biscuits/blueberry; 'round/rafters; and home/here.
I send my best wishes for your niece. Such a sad Christmas for you and her family. Take good care. Alana
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Your poem is beautiful, Jmf. It's full of beautiful memories of times past. Your last stanza was a bit of a letdown, but I suppose it's really the cycle of life.
Your abcb rhyming is well done, and you've made good use of alliteration with stately/stood; shutters/sill; biscuits/blueberry; 'round/rafters; and home/here.
I send my best wishes for your niece. Such a sad Christmas for you and her family. Take good care. Alana
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you Alana for a thoughtful and encouraging review and for your concern for my niece. We had a great Christmas with her and hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from c_lucas
A house is a home for a few short years, the at the time of death, it becomes a house again. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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A house is a home for a few short years, the at the time of death, it becomes a house again. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and encouraging review.
Happy New Year
Janet
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You're welcome, Janet. Charlie
Comment from Nosha17
It is good to reminisce about old times, but suddenly we may woken up to the reality of the present. How sad about your niece, I will say a prayer for her. Excellent rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Most enjoyable. Faye
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It is good to reminisce about old times, but suddenly we may woken up to the reality of the present. How sad about your niece, I will say a prayer for her. Excellent rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you Faye for a thoughtful and encouraging review and for your concern for my niece. We had a great Christmas with her and hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Hi - Your photograph of the old house grabbed my attention. It looks so forlorn and lonely. Your words describe what was once a vibrant time in the old house and how sad it is that is now abandoned. I can also understand your reference to your niece in the last verse, and the significance of leaving this world. A nice flowing poem
regards
Annette
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Hi - Your photograph of the old house grabbed my attention. It looks so forlorn and lonely. Your words describe what was once a vibrant time in the old house and how sad it is that is now abandoned. I can also understand your reference to your niece in the last verse, and the significance of leaving this world. A nice flowing poem
regards
Annette
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2014
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Thank you Annette for a thoughtful and encouraging review and for your concern for my niece. We had a great Christmas with her and hope to have her a while longer.
Happy New Year
Janet
