From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "I learn."Mostly romance.
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Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
That is a beautiful write, my friend. So much of your warm soul is speaking out through the words. Just a wonderful read this night. Thanks for sharing such a special poem.
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That is a beautiful write, my friend. So much of your warm soul is speaking out through the words. Just a wonderful read this night. Thanks for sharing such a special poem.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2005
Comment from suneagle
A loving and generous tribute to your mother, Pili. Judging by you, she must have been a wonderful woman. :)
penetrate
(In my opinion, that would flow better as:
to penetrate )
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A loving and generous tribute to your mother, Pili. Judging by you, she must have been a wonderful woman. :)
penetrate
(In my opinion, that would flow better as:
to penetrate )
Comment Written 23-Sep-2005
Comment from AngelicScribe
I really liked your sentiments and imagery. You choice of color scheme and image are great. The message carries resonance.
Keep writing!
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I really liked your sentiments and imagery. You choice of color scheme and image are great. The message carries resonance.
Keep writing!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from sengwriter
A nice tribute of respect and love to your Mother. An excellent commemoration for her by her predeccesor in right spirit.
Nature, I believe, is a sort of panacea for all our pain and darkness. And that's what here I find you getting every lessons for the Mother Nature and keeping you in right track to tackle every day life and the experience gathered therefrom.
To love deeply and from the heart free of dread,
with strength abiding loss as part of life,
some day will come the time to say adios.
- painful but a hard reality.
ch.
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A nice tribute of respect and love to your Mother. An excellent commemoration for her by her predeccesor in right spirit.
Nature, I believe, is a sort of panacea for all our pain and darkness. And that's what here I find you getting every lessons for the Mother Nature and keeping you in right track to tackle every day life and the experience gathered therefrom.
To love deeply and from the heart free of dread,
with strength abiding loss as part of life,
some day will come the time to say adios.
- painful but a hard reality.
ch.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Writergirl30
This is excellent; mothers are the most amazing teachers. I'm so sorry for your loss. The only thing I might alter about this is the end, where you say Adios to her...I'd make the last word more personal. Did you have a nickname, like Mama, or Mommy, or whatever that you called her? It would envoke a more emotional image than the word "Mother", which is cold and distant. Anyway good job with this. I'm sorry.
CC
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This is excellent; mothers are the most amazing teachers. I'm so sorry for your loss. The only thing I might alter about this is the end, where you say Adios to her...I'd make the last word more personal. Did you have a nickname, like Mama, or Mommy, or whatever that you called her? It would envoke a more emotional image than the word "Mother", which is cold and distant. Anyway good job with this. I'm sorry.
CC
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Ritsal
This is a beautiful tribute to your mother. Your emotions come through clearly as one who was very close with this special person in your life. It is always nice to get the memories down and then cherish them in your heart.
Best wishes,
Rita
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This is a beautiful tribute to your mother. Your emotions come through clearly as one who was very close with this special person in your life. It is always nice to get the memories down and then cherish them in your heart.
Best wishes,
Rita
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from amaranthblue
My dear friend (hug) I am so sorry about the loss of your mother, she must have been such a lovely lady who had given so much to you... Your outlook on life and how you experience things, what you take from even the challenging ones... This was lovingly and beautifully written, you have both been so very blessed...
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My dear friend (hug) I am so sorry about the loss of your mother, she must have been such a lovely lady who had given so much to you... Your outlook on life and how you experience things, what you take from even the challenging ones... This was lovingly and beautifully written, you have both been so very blessed...
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Bryana
I know those sweet words came from your heart.
Your mother must be very proud of you and smiling
from heaven. I can tell she did a fantastic job with
her daughter. I also know she's guiding that hand
of yours to write your lovely poems.
I'm so sorry about your lose, I lost my mother 15 years
ago, it was very painful.
Un abrazo mi amiga, Ana
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I know those sweet words came from your heart.
Your mother must be very proud of you and smiling
from heaven. I can tell she did a fantastic job with
her daughter. I also know she's guiding that hand
of yours to write your lovely poems.
I'm so sorry about your lose, I lost my mother 15 years
ago, it was very painful.
Un abrazo mi amiga, Ana
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from desb
Great sentiments Pili. You always use delightful words to express your emotions which adds so much for the reader, because I can feel your love leaping off the page. I also like the way you format your poems to me it makes them kind of choppy hitting me with small bursts of emotion. Another great read. Des
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Great sentiments Pili. You always use delightful words to express your emotions which adds so much for the reader, because I can feel your love leaping off the page. I also like the way you format your poems to me it makes them kind of choppy hitting me with small bursts of emotion. Another great read. Des
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Black Wren
From you
mother
learn
much
of what I am
today,
(a little confusing. From you, Mother, I learned much of what I know today.)
forever
will () remember
the sparkle
of your
eyes.
(I)
Adios() (mother).
(comma)(Mother)
I am such a nitpick. A good poem and I love the way you speak of your mother.
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From you
mother
learn
much
of what I am
today,
(a little confusing. From you, Mother, I learned much of what I know today.)
forever
will () remember
the sparkle
of your
eyes.
(I)
Adios() (mother).
(comma)(Mother)
I am such a nitpick. A good poem and I love the way you speak of your mother.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
