Kiss This
Likely the most fun I've ever had with a writing prompt! ;)11 total reviews
Comment from granny goes viral
Five Kisses for you. No kissed for what the cat dragged in.
Too funny. Not much else to say. Good luck if this is a contest.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Five Kisses for you. No kissed for what the cat dragged in.
Too funny. Not much else to say. Good luck if this is a contest.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much!! I have so much reading to catch up on - but these girls have been giving me more than just a run for my money lately. Ugh. :(
Comment from MelB
I can definitely feel her pain. This person wounded her pretty bad. She is not willing to let that person wound her again. I hope she has forgiven him or can someday, just so she doesn't end up bitter! Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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I can definitely feel her pain. This person wounded her pretty bad. She is not willing to let that person wound her again. I hope she has forgiven him or can someday, just so she doesn't end up bitter! Well done!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the review!! PS- She was bitter when she met him - and she didn't love herself either. However, she isn't anymore. ;)
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So glad to hear that!
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So glad to hear that!
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahahaha! COP THAT! Great work mate, I loved it. I could feel the passion behind every word of it. I actually started laughing while I read it. Good luck in the contest. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Hahahahaha! COP THAT! Great work mate, I loved it. I could feel the passion behind every word of it. I actually started laughing while I read it. Good luck in the contest. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 20-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much!! I start laughing every time I read it too!!! :)
Comment from flylikeaneagle
I like the photo and the vivid red lines. Yes, I agree, with your words of this ex-lover. Gone is gone is gone. My daughter dated a guy for two years. Oh, how he loves her (but cheated on her with several, many, too many) others. Now, three are in counseling sessions...He is NOT worth the pain. I relate. Have a blessed Christmas and fun in the contest. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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I like the photo and the vivid red lines. Yes, I agree, with your words of this ex-lover. Gone is gone is gone. My daughter dated a guy for two years. Oh, how he loves her (but cheated on her with several, many, too many) others. Now, three are in counseling sessions...He is NOT worth the pain. I relate. Have a blessed Christmas and fun in the contest. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the review & for Christmas - I hope she dumps his
ass (pardon my French!)!! Or, just as good but a little more (but only temporarily!) painful - he dumps hers!!! ;)
Comment from Quoiky
Good read. A polite way to keep an 'X' in his place. You didn't melt under the sensuous pressure of his kiss, you just pointed out what he'll be missing.
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Good read. A polite way to keep an 'X' in his place. You didn't melt under the sensuous pressure of his kiss, you just pointed out what he'll be missing.
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the review - much appreciated!!
Curious about the 4 - did you see anything you thought I might need to change or ??
Comment from Domino 2
This sure tells that rotter what he's missing for his lack of attention and real love.
'Kiss my ass, you slime-bag'. - Love it! :-)
Mind you, I hope you didn't let him, as he may have enjoyed it. LOL!
Great fun post that I really enjoyed.
'Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned' - or something like that. :-)
Good luck in the contest, and best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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This sure tells that rotter what he's missing for his lack of attention and real love.
'Kiss my ass, you slime-bag'. - Love it! :-)
Mind you, I hope you didn't let him, as he may have enjoyed it. LOL!
Great fun post that I really enjoyed.
'Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned' - or something like that. :-)
Good luck in the contest, and best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned is right! SO RIGHT!! ;)
He was quite the puke turned out. Went to
Highschool with him, lost touch & wounded up at a bar he tended 5 years later. He also sang & played guitar (did in high school too).
However, as fast as it went uphill from there, it went downhill even faster. I was CRUSHED. How could I ever go on, right?!
Well, I did - turns out much better than he did too, Quite the easy revenge if you ask me. ;)
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LOL. I love a happy ending. :-) xx
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I know, right? Lol!! ;)
Comment from Kingsland
These are some rather negative connotations you have written here in poetic form. The thoughts seem to flow well and are written in a good format. I enjoyed partaking of this well delivered piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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These are some rather negative connotations you have written here in poetic form. The thoughts seem to flow well and are written in a good format. I enjoyed partaking of this well delivered piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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So.. Not used to negativity in poetic form, or was that just an observation? ;)
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Just an observation...
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It's perfect!!! :)
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Oh.. Lol. That was my assumption but.. Yes, yes it is rather on the negative side. Lol!!! ;)
Comment from Nosha17
That's telling him, he must have been a bad boy! Written with conviction, good use of rhyming and imagery. I can quite imagine he's been up to no good. Good humour and most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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That's telling him, he must have been a bad boy! Written with conviction, good use of rhyming and imagery. I can quite imagine he's been up to no good. Good humour and most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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He was something else alright!! ;) Thanks for the review - much appreciated!!!
Comment from ravim
Wow! I love this one. You've got it messaged right on spot. I thought however (one word, ok?) this is anti-romantic fun and nice on the hook. Bravo!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Wow! I love this one. You've got it messaged right on spot. I thought however (one word, ok?) this is anti-romantic fun and nice on the hook. Bravo!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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A. Thanks for the review - much appreciated!! B. I want to be sure I follow you, but I'm lacking sleep, so I need to clarify on your "however" (it's hard to offend me as an FYI for future reference & you certainly aren't trying obviously so no worries regardless!).....
Now, when you mention that it's "anti-romantic", did you perhaps note that due to the description in the writing prompt? 'Cause if you did, you have a very good point - which makes me wonder yet again if the prompt was written/posted incorrectly - being it says "could be" vs. HAS TO BE a "romantic" or "light-hearted" poem (I actually found myself reading it over & again before posting this in fact!).
On the other hand, you could be meaning something completely irrelevant to what I just said above, and I could very likely sound bonkers right now. I have not a clue though, thus the reason I just had to ask!! LOL!!! :)
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Bullshit, sorry, cat shit the rules. Your poem is great! Does that sound nicer? Oh, I found a what you call typo - how ever - as two different words. Not romatic at all :)
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OMG?! Am I going crazy - or are you going crazy?!? I can't tell!!! LOLOLOL!!!
Seriously though - I'm uber lost now!!!!! :O
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'm glad you had fun with this prompt. That is what writing should be about:) Great entry - good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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I'm glad you had fun with this prompt. That is what writing should be about:) Great entry - good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the review!! :)
