It Only Takes One--Yes
Short Story22 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
This was really put together well. It had a nice complexity with strong characters. The ending was an enigma. Are we happy for the lucky break or pissed for the undeserved fortune dropped on the lazy cop??
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This was really put together well. It had a nice complexity with strong characters. The ending was an enigma. Are we happy for the lucky break or pissed for the undeserved fortune dropped on the lazy cop??
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from Joe_P
I like your unique story. It is realistic, too, and it has the flavor of Old New York like it used to be many years ago. The city has many stories like this. They just need to be told, and you're the one to do it.
Joe_P
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I like your unique story. It is realistic, too, and it has the flavor of Old New York like it used to be many years ago. The city has many stories like this. They just need to be told, and you're the one to do it.
Joe_P
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think that would be my luck, coming too late. Oh, how awful that would be. Shame there weren't many entries, this one would have done well. Come to that, yours all would do well. I loved the interaction between the postie and Mr Longfodder! A great story! xsx Sandra.
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I think that would be my luck, coming too late. Oh, how awful that would be. Shame there weren't many entries, this one would have done well. Come to that, yours all would do well. I loved the interaction between the postie and Mr Longfodder! A great story! xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Heh-heh...is it wrong of me to see the dark humor in this, Mikey? I mean, after all, Fuddnecker...er-r-r, Longfellow...u-h-m-m-m... Longsflutter did jump to his death after all, and there's hardly anything funny about a man doing that. Is there?
It seems as if some good has come from this tragedy of events, however, especially for that beat cop, Barney. I'm not too sure why Funrucker would want to jump after receiving ten thousand dollars, but at least it's nice to know that it isn't going to go to waste.
This story is kinda' mean-spirited and decadently wicked, Mikey. I like that. :)
~Dean
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Heh-heh...is it wrong of me to see the dark humor in this, Mikey? I mean, after all, Fuddnecker...er-r-r, Longfellow...u-h-m-m-m... Longsflutter did jump to his death after all, and there's hardly anything funny about a man doing that. Is there?
It seems as if some good has come from this tragedy of events, however, especially for that beat cop, Barney. I'm not too sure why Funrucker would want to jump after receiving ten thousand dollars, but at least it's nice to know that it isn't going to go to waste.
This story is kinda' mean-spirited and decadently wicked, Mikey. I like that. :)
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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He probably thought the check wouldn't clear after 38 years! I would've signed the contract and deposited the check. You caught Longfellow! Yep. Hahaha. Thank you, mikey
Comment from Michaelk
I can't even imagine. I probably would've jumped too. I'm actually surprised that you didn't have one of your characters do that, read the letter, shake his head and say, 'i would've jumped too'. I did like that the cop was a writer who was trying to get published. Is this a way of saying the cycle never ends?
What makes it even worse is that he might've ended up as a partner at Doubleday.
I liked your poem within the story. Quite profound, I'm surprised you didn't put that out in the poetry category and reference it in the letter. Just to see how many readers made the connection. :)
Good story, well done.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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I can't even imagine. I probably would've jumped too. I'm actually surprised that you didn't have one of your characters do that, read the letter, shake his head and say, 'i would've jumped too'. I did like that the cop was a writer who was trying to get published. Is this a way of saying the cycle never ends?
What makes it even worse is that he might've ended up as a partner at Doubleday.
I liked your poem within the story. Quite profound, I'm surprised you didn't put that out in the poetry category and reference it in the letter. Just to see how many readers made the connection. :)
Good story, well done.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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That's a good idea. I didn't want to draw anymore attention to the cop with the letter than I did. We actually can't post anything twice, so I couldn't post it as a poem and put it in the story both. I have all kinds of poetry in my stories. I have an auto biographical thing that is about 75 chapters and there's about two hundred poems in it. "The Never Starting Story". It's a bunch of observations on different events and subjects with my views as whatever age I happened to be. The Cuban Missle Crisis, the 60s, 50s, Beatles, Vietnam, my crazy mother, McDonalds, everything...
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Is this posted? Is it called 'The never starting story'? I'd be curious to read some of that.
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Yes. You may have to type that in search. Most of the chapters are stand alone pieces. very mikey off the top of his head stuff.
Comment from Linda Engel
I loved this story with its intrigue out of the box from the beginning. Terrific story line and twist of events. The cop's "other life" was a cool twist. What a snake! And the poor grocery boy! "Splatt" , good sound effects. The imagery is awesome and I can see this happening. (damn post office).
Just my luck that this would happen to me. Fate and karma have a way of kicking butt and laughing about it. Good one, Mike. enjoyed it a lot.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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I loved this story with its intrigue out of the box from the beginning. Terrific story line and twist of events. The cop's "other life" was a cool twist. What a snake! And the poor grocery boy! "Splatt" , good sound effects. The imagery is awesome and I can see this happening. (damn post office).
Just my luck that this would happen to me. Fate and karma have a way of kicking butt and laughing about it. Good one, Mike. enjoyed it a lot.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much. I am truly pleased you enjoyed it so much. This is somewhat my natural style when I'm not plotting and trying to write the story of the year etc. So, it is encouraging to have this well received! Big smiles, mikey
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow the master at work again. I enjoyyour endings and the way your writings progress from start to twisted ending. I say that with all admiration. Great one
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Oh wow the master at work again. I enjoyyour endings and the way your writings progress from start to twisted ending. I say that with all admiration. Great one
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
Comment from LIJ Red
The letter being registered does relieve you of the prompt requirement for no return address? Otherwise it looks like a great contest entry-if you do contests.
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The letter being registered does relieve you of the prompt requirement for no return address? Otherwise it looks like a great contest entry-if you do contests.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
Comment from robina1978
Nice story that complements your story very well. Things like this happen, post going missing and turning up many years later. The old man dies because of it or died anyway. No mistakes found.
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Nice story that complements your story very well. Things like this happen, post going missing and turning up many years later. The old man dies because of it or died anyway. No mistakes found.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Now, that's the kind of letter anyone would like to receive. I'm not sure if I would jump though! Well-written story, great dialogue and very unexpected ending- I liked the poem, too. Most enjoyable apart from the gruesome bit at the end which I skipped over! Wishing you and your family a very Merry Xmas. Faye
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Now, that's the kind of letter anyone would like to receive. I'm not sure if I would jump though! Well-written story, great dialogue and very unexpected ending- I liked the poem, too. Most enjoyable apart from the gruesome bit at the end which I skipped over! Wishing you and your family a very Merry Xmas. Faye
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
