Wilderness Encounter
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "20"A love story of two loners who meet by accident
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Comment from c_lucas
If you want to practice your shooting skills, paint balls will do the trick. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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If you want to practice your shooting skills, paint balls will do the trick. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your very kind words. Do stop by again.
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You're welcome, Catherin. Charlie
Comment from Adri7enne
Pretty good flow, Cat, and the story seems solid enough. However, you do some head hoping in this chapter. It's hard to know who is the protagonist. We read along thinking this is all from Bo-Peep's perspective, and then you show us what Pebbles is thinking. That's not considered good form in novel writing. I suggest you read some posts on POV- perhaps browse through Nor's portfolio, or pick up a book on writing. It's not enough to have talent. You also have to learn the rules of the craft. Good luck with it all.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Pretty good flow, Cat, and the story seems solid enough. However, you do some head hoping in this chapter. It's hard to know who is the protagonist. We read along thinking this is all from Bo-Peep's perspective, and then you show us what Pebbles is thinking. That's not considered good form in novel writing. I suggest you read some posts on POV- perhaps browse through Nor's portfolio, or pick up a book on writing. It's not enough to have talent. You also have to learn the rules of the craft. Good luck with it all.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thank you for your constructive review. I consider the suggestions made. I am always looking to improve my work. Thank you. Do stop by again.
