Sweet Refrain
Sonnet10 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Just sat down and read this little beauty of a Sonnet, or is that a Sonata in this case as you are moonlighting as a poet. Clever as always, love the turn and the ending, slow refrain. You have done it again and produced a noteworthy piece. - Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Just sat down and read this little beauty of a Sonnet, or is that a Sonata in this case as you are moonlighting as a poet. Clever as always, love the turn and the ending, slow refrain. You have done it again and produced a noteworthy piece. - Wendy
Comment Written 18-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Wendy - done in a big rush, but I was happy with the way the elements came together.
Ugh! Is this the new reply to reviews format - can't they give us a bigger box - I can only see about two words at a time!
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
love the alliterative verbs in blaze/burn/beat
congratulations on your sonnet win :-)
great rhymes, iambic meter, turn - all the good sonnet stuff
and I love the humor in your using a sonnet to celebrate your skill in sonnet writing lol :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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love the alliterative verbs in blaze/burn/beat
congratulations on your sonnet win :-)
great rhymes, iambic meter, turn - all the good sonnet stuff
and I love the humor in your using a sonnet to celebrate your skill in sonnet writing lol :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Brooke.
Threw this together in under an hour, but I was quite pleased with the way the elements all came together.
Steve
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent. This sonnet is is perfect form. Each stanza's descriptions are done in perfect rhyme and rhythm. The turn is well placed and the love ending is excellent. Great piece of work!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Excellent. This sonnet is is perfect form. Each stanza's descriptions are done in perfect rhyme and rhythm. The turn is well placed and the love ending is excellent. Great piece of work!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the great review and the six shiny stars.
Steve
Comment from Domino 2
Extremely clever and original to portray the requirements OF a sonnet IN a sonnet, and in doing so, obeying them all to the letter - or should I say, 'the note'. :-)
Very entertaining TOP sonnet, and you sure have proved you 'can write a sonnet, sure enough'.
This definitely deserves to contend.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Extremely clever and original to portray the requirements OF a sonnet IN a sonnet, and in doing so, obeying them all to the letter - or should I say, 'the note'. :-)
Very entertaining TOP sonnet, and you sure have proved you 'can write a sonnet, sure enough'.
This definitely deserves to contend.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Ray - just managed to sneak a win over Mikey who had a similar idea.
Steve
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I noticed, Steve.
His entry was excellent, too, but I think yours deserved the win.
Cheers, Ray
Comment from patcelaw
This brought a smile to my face. I suppose it is a Beethoven of poetic sonnets. The movement grew nicely as you the conductor used your pen like a baton. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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This brought a smile to my face. I suppose it is a Beethoven of poetic sonnets. The movement grew nicely as you the conductor used your pen like a baton. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thank you!
Yes, the musical element took over the poem as I wrote - not that I have a musical bone in my body.
Steve
Comment from DragonSkulls
Lol. I was actually thinking of entering this contest with the same idea but I was going to go more from the angle how most of the entries didn't adhere to strict rules of the sonnet. Haha. You did a fantastic job on this piece. You clearly get my vote. Best of luck. Excellent write.
DS
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Lol. I was actually thinking of entering this contest with the same idea but I was going to go more from the angle how most of the entries didn't adhere to strict rules of the sonnet. Haha. You did a fantastic job on this piece. You clearly get my vote. Best of luck. Excellent write.
DS
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Yep, you've got to wonder about people's ability to follow instructions sometimes!
Thanks for the review and the vote!
Steve
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi!
As might guess from my screen name, I'm a professional songwriter. Thus, I was instantly drawn to this particular sonnet. The graphic was the first indicator and when I read the first line, I knew I was going to enjoy this ... and I did.
Very nicely done! The analogy of the composite parts of a song to the complicated machinations of love was skillfully accomplished! This was a real treat! I enjoyed it very much!
Wishing you a wonderful Christmas ...
Alan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Hi!
As might guess from my screen name, I'm a professional songwriter. Thus, I was instantly drawn to this particular sonnet. The graphic was the first indicator and when I read the first line, I knew I was going to enjoy this ... and I did.
Very nicely done! The analogy of the composite parts of a song to the complicated machinations of love was skillfully accomplished! This was a real treat! I enjoyed it very much!
Wishing you a wonderful Christmas ...
Alan
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thanks for the review and the Christmas wishes - same coming back to you!
The nearest I've ever got to being musical was marrying a clarinettist! Not the first time I've sneaked that instrument into one of my poems...
Steve
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Hi Steve ...
Well, I've never tried to pay the clarinet. I play 4 or 5 different instruments but that's not one of them.
And you are welcome for the review ... my pleasure.
Alan
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi
This is a fun take on the prompt by writing a sonnet about how to write a sonnet. Most creative, as well the artwork simplistic but mot effective.
Nicely penned and presented. Good luck in the contest.
*Happy Holiday*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*;*)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Hi
This is a fun take on the prompt by writing a sonnet about how to write a sonnet. Most creative, as well the artwork simplistic but mot effective.
Nicely penned and presented. Good luck in the contest.
*Happy Holiday*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*;*)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Jax.
I was quite pleased with the way this ended up weaving in sonnet how-to's with the musical metaphor and the lovey dovey bits.
Steve
Comment from CR Delport
I know nothing of the inner workings of poetry. Just whether I like what I read or not :) This, I like. It flows nicely. As far as I can tell you adhered to the prompt, but then again, what do I know :) Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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I know nothing of the inner workings of poetry. Just whether I like what I read or not :) This, I like. It flows nicely. As far as I can tell you adhered to the prompt, but then again, what do I know :) Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much for the kind words. Liking it is hat it comes down to in the end.
Steve
Comment from mfowler
A spoof on a sonnet? Or an instruction guide for sonneteering?
These are the questions that emerge from reading your well crafted verses. You admit that you know just what to do as you write, but I felt that your cynical analysis, shows you may have written one of those love sonnets too many. Don't get me wrong, I think this is really clever and nails the format and the themes usually explored to the tee.
'My rhymes will mark the beat, I know my stuff;
Shall I compare thee to a singing heart?' Here you steal a little from Shakespeare to make a point and it hits home.
A novel approach to a sonnet, by a writer who clearly knows the structure, rhythm, and emotional content of a regular effort. I wish you well in the vote.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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A spoof on a sonnet? Or an instruction guide for sonneteering?
These are the questions that emerge from reading your well crafted verses. You admit that you know just what to do as you write, but I felt that your cynical analysis, shows you may have written one of those love sonnets too many. Don't get me wrong, I think this is really clever and nails the format and the themes usually explored to the tee.
'My rhymes will mark the beat, I know my stuff;
Shall I compare thee to a singing heart?' Here you steal a little from Shakespeare to make a point and it hits home.
A novel approach to a sonnet, by a writer who clearly knows the structure, rhythm, and emotional content of a regular effort. I wish you well in the vote.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Mark
I actually started with the intention of being more cynical, but then the opportunity to weave in a love poem and the musical metaphor took over. Under time pressure as well - I posted with one minute to spare!
Steve
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I knew it was you as soon as I had finished it. A sonneteer, who likes the silly. Only Mikey Cahill would attempt it and his formatting was dead give away. Congratulations on the win. Maybe time pressure brings out the best.
