Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "CHAPTER DIEZ; PART TRES"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from adewpearl
Excellent expression of emotion in your dialogue
strong verb choices
good use of non-verbal communication, and I'm noticing how you're not repeating the same phrases!! :-)
Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Excellent expression of emotion in your dialogue
strong verb choices
good use of non-verbal communication, and I'm noticing how you're not repeating the same phrases!! :-)
Brooke
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the encouragement. I have the list of my favorite repeating words taped to my computer screen.
Comment from emrpoems
Well written with smooth flow of words thta make reading easy and enjoyable.
Good use of dialogue
God interaction between characters
Nice story well developed
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Well written with smooth flow of words thta make reading easy and enjoyable.
Good use of dialogue
God interaction between characters
Nice story well developed
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind poem.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I really liked this chapter because it pointed out very strongly Jim's feelings for Soni are growing. It is a strong chapter and I am looking forward very much to the next one, Giddy
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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I really liked this chapter because it pointed out very strongly Jim's feelings for Soni are growing. It is a strong chapter and I am looking forward very much to the next one, Giddy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and continuous support.
Comment from Curly Girly
Tatiana is refusing to give Alex marital relations until the safe return of Jim.
Your chapter headings appear to be in Spanish. Is this intentional? Or is it displaying wrong?
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Tatiana is refusing to give Alex marital relations until the safe return of Jim.
Your chapter headings appear to be in Spanish. Is this intentional? Or is it displaying wrong?
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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The Spanish is intentional . I have run out of ways that EE will except them. I may have to start using German. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Okay, but what's EE?
Clueless!
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Evil Eddie, the one or ones that won't let us do certain things on FS.
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Oh! Lol!
Comment from rmj09
The focus Jim joining Soni. The storyline development Jim is preparing to go after Soni who saw Midnight during her fly-over. Alex said he wouldn't go since she didn't wait for him, Tatiana says he can sleep on the couch until she is safe back at home. Alex asks Gus why didn't Soni wait for him. Earlier it was said Soni was reacting to her emotions he must have missed the statement.
The dialogue is clear and shows more of each characters personality. The narration shows the action all the guns Alex had taken from Jim he is returning.
The emotion I felt surprise that Alex didn't go.
The hook will Jim find Soni?
The suspense continues to grow through-out.
Keep on writing.
Barbara, I'm enjoying this so much I hate when the chapter ends.:)Rita
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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The focus Jim joining Soni. The storyline development Jim is preparing to go after Soni who saw Midnight during her fly-over. Alex said he wouldn't go since she didn't wait for him, Tatiana says he can sleep on the couch until she is safe back at home. Alex asks Gus why didn't Soni wait for him. Earlier it was said Soni was reacting to her emotions he must have missed the statement.
The dialogue is clear and shows more of each characters personality. The narration shows the action all the guns Alex had taken from Jim he is returning.
The emotion I felt surprise that Alex didn't go.
The hook will Jim find Soni?
The suspense continues to grow through-out.
Keep on writing.
Barbara, I'm enjoying this so much I hate when the chapter ends.:)Rita
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Genya
Another good chapter. Still not too sure why Alex didn't go though. Can see why his wife is upset with him.....still...Jim is on his way now. Love these characters and I feel I know them all so well. Genya
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Another good chapter. Still not too sure why Alex didn't go though. Can see why his wife is upset with him.....still...Jim is on his way now. Love these characters and I feel I know them all so well. Genya
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from arnie47
Very good continuation of this story. One thing, was Jim going to find Soni or invade Canada? My God he took a lot of weaponry with him. I thought he might need a pack horse or did he have one? But this is very nice writing and characterization.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Very good continuation of this story. One thing, was Jim going to find Soni or invade Canada? My God he took a lot of weaponry with him. I thought he might need a pack horse or did he have one? But this is very nice writing and characterization.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. Jim is into over kill.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent writing so far. Seen no mistakes.
AFTER ALEX HANDED HIM ADDITIONAL CLIPS, JIM PLACED THEM INSIDE THE POCKETS OF HIS BLACK TACTICAL VEST. HE HELD THE M 249 SQAUD AUTOMATIC WEAPON ( SAW ),"I SURE HOPE I WON'T NEED THIS," AND HANDED IT TO ALEX.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Excellent writing so far. Seen no mistakes.
AFTER ALEX HANDED HIM ADDITIONAL CLIPS, JIM PLACED THEM INSIDE THE POCKETS OF HIS BLACK TACTICAL VEST. HE HELD THE M 249 SQAUD AUTOMATIC WEAPON ( SAW ),"I SURE HOPE I WON'T NEED THIS," AND HANDED IT TO ALEX.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
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THANK YOU! MERRY CHRISTMAS!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, Barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where jim arms himself and goes after sonny while alex is kicked from the kitchen and the bedroom by his wife. lol
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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this is an excellent write, Barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where jim arms himself and goes after sonny while alex is kicked from the kitchen and the bedroom by his wife. lol
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and continuous support.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Whups. I reckon Alex has just talked himself into one whole heap of bad trouble from his wife. If he's any sense, he'll get in the saddle and head out pronto.
Good chapter, loved the tension between the characters.
Patrick
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Hi Barbara,
Whups. I reckon Alex has just talked himself into one whole heap of bad trouble from his wife. If he's any sense, he'll get in the saddle and head out pronto.
Good chapter, loved the tension between the characters.
Patrick
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and continuous support.
