~My Solemn Oath ~
She's gone, but not forgotten...65 total reviews
Comment from amada
No, give a rest to the horror and write a little more romance for your wife. This Rondeau on undying love is very beautiful. My fave line "My solemn oath to thee."
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No, give a rest to the horror and write a little more romance for your wife. This Rondeau on undying love is very beautiful. My fave line "My solemn oath to thee."
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from flamingstar
Well, I don't know what it looked like before your revisions but I enjoyed it very much. A sweet departure from your usual contributions! I kept staring at the woman as I expected her to turn into a vampire or something.
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Well, I don't know what it looked like before your revisions but I enjoyed it very much. A sweet departure from your usual contributions! I kept staring at the woman as I expected her to turn into a vampire or something.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from mikemagine
Well, I dunno, Dean. I think this is very good. True, it's not typical Dean Kuch, but I really like this. I think this is a beautiful poem of love and devotion.
"Undying love shall never stop, as spring rains breathe fresh autumn's crop." That line alone is awesome, Dean!
Cheers!
Mike
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Well, I dunno, Dean. I think this is very good. True, it's not typical Dean Kuch, but I really like this. I think this is a beautiful poem of love and devotion.
"Undying love shall never stop, as spring rains breathe fresh autumn's crop." That line alone is awesome, Dean!
Cheers!
Mike
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from Eternal Muse
Stunning, Dean. I love the Rondeau form, its melodical French essence, and you did this form justice. Great rhymes and cadence. A phenomenal presentation.
Best of luck in the contest with this striking piece.
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Stunning, Dean. I love the Rondeau form, its melodical French essence, and you did this form justice. Great rhymes and cadence. A phenomenal presentation.
Best of luck in the contest with this striking piece.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Dean, You did a wonderful job on this poem. I don't know the rules of the prompt but knowing your situation I think you wrote this with your heart. The presentation is very good and
I don't see a thing wrong with it. Very touching,Very well done. :<) Nancy
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Dean, You did a wonderful job on this poem. I don't know the rules of the prompt but knowing your situation I think you wrote this with your heart. The presentation is very good and
I don't see a thing wrong with it. Very touching,Very well done. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from camaria
Reminded me a bit of Edgar Allen Poe. I really liked the bit about only her hair remaining on the pillow. Classically penned, very polished. Perhaps you should try new forms more often! Nothing I could find that I'd change. Thanks for sharing.
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Reminded me a bit of Edgar Allen Poe. I really liked the bit about only her hair remaining on the pillow. Classically penned, very polished. Perhaps you should try new forms more often! Nothing I could find that I'd change. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from Joan E.
I admire your stretching your wings with new forms. Your presentation is remarkable. Your taking on the poignant persona is very effective and supported well by your elevated language. Cheers- Joan
P.S. Congratulations on your recent contest win.
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I admire your stretching your wings with new forms. Your presentation is remarkable. Your taking on the poignant persona is very effective and supported well by your elevated language. Cheers- Joan
P.S. Congratulations on your recent contest win.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from amahra
Really stunning art work of the falling snow. It brings in the feeling of Christmas. Loved the words of the poem...very romantic.
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Really stunning art work of the falling snow. It brings in the feeling of Christmas. Loved the words of the poem...very romantic.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from thee-name
Excellent romantic poem. Lines rhymed good.
FAINT GHOSTS ADORN THY PILLOW TOP,
THEY CATCH MY GAZE, MIND HEART DOTH DROP;
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Excellent romantic poem. Lines rhymed good.
FAINT GHOSTS ADORN THY PILLOW TOP,
THEY CATCH MY GAZE, MIND HEART DOTH DROP;
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
I enjoyed this poem, you certainly have the talent, no matter the fact it isn't your 'normal' genre.
Very good effort, it captures nicely the sense of loss following the death of someone you love.
Patrick
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Hi Dean Kuch,
I enjoyed this poem, you certainly have the talent, no matter the fact it isn't your 'normal' genre.
Very good effort, it captures nicely the sense of loss following the death of someone you love.
Patrick
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
