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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The next day"The story about three women who need to make money
7 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am glad Laura is feeling better, I know the feeling of losing your husband and getting all those sympathy looks. I turned into a recluse for a while after Brian died, but I had my boys to make me get on with my life. Loved this part. Seems like the other two need more than a few hours more sleep. LOL xsx :)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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I am glad Laura is feeling better, I know the feeling of losing your husband and getting all those sympathy looks. I turned into a recluse for a while after Brian died, but I had my boys to make me get on with my life. Loved this part. Seems like the other two need more than a few hours more sleep. LOL xsx :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Me too, which made this part easy to write. I don't think anyone appreciates how ghastly it is if they've never experienced it. It took me a year to stop crying every day, and another year to start going out again. Like you, my children were wonderful, and I don't know how I would have survived without them.
Comment from rwilliam
You did a great job of painting the 'morning after'. I was feeling for these poor ladies!!
The peeing in the bushes was hilarious.
Great writing.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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You did a great job of painting the 'morning after'. I was feeling for these poor ladies!!
The peeing in the bushes was hilarious.
Great writing.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Your reviews are so encouraging--THANK YOU! Alexis xxx
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Alexis - I think that night would have killed me for sure. One sip of wine and I'm done! This is rather the ugly side of indulgence yet necessary for your plot development of women overloaded in alcohol. "Depends" might be in order for that kind of partying and bladder control.- yuck!
There is a line about her lifting her head off the pillow with difficulty, I can't find the line now - ugh - anyway it sounded weird reading it - look at it again if you can.
Otherwise onward we go to the next chapter. I sure hope the excitement starts soon, I could do with some of that ya know:)
Thanks for sharing and Merry Christmas.
Moreen
XXX
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Dear Alexis - I think that night would have killed me for sure. One sip of wine and I'm done! This is rather the ugly side of indulgence yet necessary for your plot development of women overloaded in alcohol. "Depends" might be in order for that kind of partying and bladder control.- yuck!
There is a line about her lifting her head off the pillow with difficulty, I can't find the line now - ugh - anyway it sounded weird reading it - look at it again if you can.
Otherwise onward we go to the next chapter. I sure hope the excitement starts soon, I could do with some of that ya know:)
Thanks for sharing and Merry Christmas.
Moreen
XXX
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Thank you WC! I'll probably leave it till the New Year until I continue because I'm sure all Fanstorians are pretty busy for the next couple of weeks. I hope you're feeling better and you have a wonderful Christmas. Alexis xxx
Comment from Curly Girly
Well, that's a pretty disgusting situation to be in as an adult -- to become incontinent due to alcohol overload.
One unnecessary word here:
her head was throbbing in a way that made it painful to lift it off the pillow.
Suggest:
her head was throbbing in a way that made it painful to lift off the pillow.
Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Well, that's a pretty disgusting situation to be in as an adult -- to become incontinent due to alcohol overload.
One unnecessary word here:
her head was throbbing in a way that made it painful to lift it off the pillow.
Suggest:
her head was throbbing in a way that made it painful to lift off the pillow.
Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2014
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Yes, but it really helps the story line. Great suggestion, which I've used. Thank you! Alexis xxx
Comment from Annette Gulliver
This is the first time I have seen your work and although it is up to chapter 3, I enjoyed the very visual descriptions. Sounds like something I would relate to sometimes. I would be interested in seeing where the story leads.....Annette
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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This is the first time I have seen your work and although it is up to chapter 3, I enjoyed the very visual descriptions. Sounds like something I would relate to sometimes. I would be interested in seeing where the story leads.....Annette
Comment Written 15-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow, They had to be sick. Mixing so many different kinds of alcohol? I am surprised they could even wake up. Laura was smart to call it a night when she did. It was a step forward for her. I hope it was for the other two as well. :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2014
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Wow, They had to be sick. Mixing so many different kinds of alcohol? I am surprised they could even wake up. Laura was smart to call it a night when she did. It was a step forward for her. I hope it was for the other two as well. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2014
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Brandy, whiskey and wine. Yes, it was guaranteed to give them the hangover from hell! Thank you, Nancy. XXX
Comment from mommerry
Although I don't know a lot about how the effects of drinking affect a body, this all sounded like it could be real and it was well written. No SPAG.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2014
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Although I don't know a lot about how the effects of drinking affect a body, this all sounded like it could be real and it was well written. No SPAG.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2014
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I have to confess, this part chapter was based on a true story, so easy to write. Thank you so much for your review.
