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Orchid-(Haiku)

A beautiful flower

7 total reviews 
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

An impressive Haiku and so suited to the topic choice.
Each word and line is perfectly connected and complemented by the image choice.
Perfection.
:-) Shirley

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2014

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Comment from sgalletti
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Lovely image of the delicate petals being caressed by the summer breeze. Definitely evokes the idea of the aroma of love, which can be quite thought provoking. Best of luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2014

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Comment from l.raven
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how beautiful this is magic dragon...they are truly delicate flowers...so elegant...I love your poem...and your picture and colors are beautiful...luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2014

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reply by l.raven on 13-Dec-2014
    smiling...welcome....xxoo
Comment from Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest

your syllable count spot on

your few words portray the perfume of love on a gentle breeze

good visual
good use "M" "S" consonance
good use "e assonance

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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Comment from Eternal Muse
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A very beautiful haiku which gives this exquisite flower justice. A stunning picture chosen to accentuate your words. I especially loved your second line.

There is one problem, at least to me.

"Butterfly petals" is a metaphor, and metaphors are not allowed in this contest.

Otherwise, quite exquisite.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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    I think I will have to change the 1st line?
Comment from el twelve
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very nicely written, haikus are interesting in that with such few words the meanings come out clearly, the picture very complimentary

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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Comment from giraffmang
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I like this haiku.

I am not overly familiar with the form but this seems to have hit the mark from my perspective. I enjoyed the descriptiveness and the feeling it engendered.

If I am to completely honest though, I found the accompanying artwork too busy and distracting - sorry. probably just me!

Nicely done

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
    Thank you for your review-This is not my choice of picture-The organiser of the competition Yeltel chose it and I do not know how to change it. I would have preferred to use my own choice of picture?
reply by giraffmang on 12-Dec-2014
    If you go to your poem you should be able to edit it. Go into edit and the artwork choice should be at the top. You should be able to remove what is there or click on an option to use one of your own. Hope this is helpful!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
    Thank you so much- It worked. Now I have the picture of choice.
reply by giraffmang on 12-Dec-2014
    That is so much better!! Perfect for your work. good luck