Comment from Fridayauthor

Excellent

An interesting turn of events.

This change keeps the story line moving ahead very nicely and as usual, your dialog is well done.

"Seb. How cute. What's his nickname for you? (This line sounds like she's used the nick-name for the first time but that's not so. She did so in an earlier chapter.)

Very nice posting.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

Thank you for reading all that! Yes, she had called him Seb earlier, but NOW, Blaze jumps on it as a way to poke fun at her, since now they are not in friend mode. :)

Comment from Louise Michelle

Exceptional

Oh, Phyllis, you do me proud. Only a twisted mind could come up with all these weird twists in the relationship between Blaze and Lorna. I'm totally cracking up.

What a great chapter this is. Lots of cursing and fighting. Blaze smacking a wet one on her was a terrific idea and led to another surprising turn of events. Great entertainment! Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

Thank you so much, Lou. I'm honored that such a twisted mind would recognize my own twisted mind. Nothing like a good cat fight to liven up a day, I always say. I'll take you on any time, Lou... mud pit of your choice. First, we have to find a reason to fight. Do something really rude, quick! :)

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Well, this has the potential to be a very strange version of that hit 70's show, Three's Company. Blaze's confrontation with Lorna, her cold methods, remind us that Blaze is still a demon after all.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

LOL! That's what my hubby said, too.

Thanks, Ed. Yes, Blaze is a demon thru and thru. She just learned in the academy how to "fit in" with appropriate polite small talk, etc. They must have added human psych to the courses too, since Ginger! LOL! :)

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Ha! Knew it. This has taken a great dramatic turn. I didn't envision garnering any sympathy for Lorna. I should've known you wouldn't have her as a one dimensional psycho future rival to Satan!! The door opens, come in, oops, trap door ... got ya!!! Terrorist writing, taking hostages. Great stuff. Can't wait. I guess I'll get back to November's reviews now... mikey

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

Thank you so verrry much, my dear Mikey. Really glad you're still here, with Wacky gone. Such a shame. He may have been right, but was it a reason to leave? I'll miss him. I've tried WC where he went. What a MESS that site is. I don't care for one of the women running it, either. What a b***h. LOL :)

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

A great action scene, "full of sound and fury". Interesting way to prove Lorna isn't gay. Blaze has to watch what she says-can't give away that she lives in Hell. LOL
Again, some more lessons on human behavior. A nice cliff-hangar.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

THanks so much, Shari. All of this plus the bill will come together at some point. :)

Comment from rmj09

Excellent

The focus what is in Lorna's past. The storyline development Blaze is forcing Lorna into telling the truth of her and Blake's past.
The dialogue is clear and shows us Lorna is in love with Blake but unable to have sex. The narration shows action Blaze flipping Lorna then standing on her arm with her spiked heel.
The hook what will the truth be?

Phyllis you can turn the sun back on.:)Rita

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Rita. But I DID turn the sun on... was shining all day against a bright blue sky. Sorry you missed it. :)

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Well, maybe Lorna is not a lesbian. Perhaps she is in love with her boss, Blake. She's about to reveal why she hates men.... Let's see what she has to say.

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Nicole. It's not that Lorna hates men--she hates men who take advantage of women/girls. Because of her horrible father, she is afraid of sex with a man. That can be cured with therapy and a gentle, supportive lover. Can BLake do it? Will he want to? Will he run for president? Will Blaze want to help him or stop him? Oh... getting ahead of things here. :)

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Okay, wasn't expecting that twist. Lorna not being gay yet hating sex with men. Must have some big baggage from her past. I am curious about the baggage and also why Blaze is so interested in it. Good one, Phyllis. 8)

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thank you so much. Blaze is really just testing her abilities and using what she learned at the Agent Academy, where, you might recall, she had the highest scores ever, giving Luke no choice but to put her on Earth duty, even tho he was mad at her and would have liked to punish her. He even gave her an "impossible" assignment, hoping that she'd fail and he could have an excuse to call her back. She succeeded, tho, thanks to Lorna. So Blaze owes Lorna something, and she may not be "good" but she does believe in rewarding those who help... it's jsut good business. :)

Comment from elgone

Excellent

You sure her name isn't Loreena Bobbit? LOL I didn't see any mistakes in this one. An interesting triangle or sorts. Blaze still has the hots of the senator but she is resisting the attraction to do her job.

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

LOL! GOod one, Elgon! LOL! Thanks for reading... and for the laugh. :)

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Engaging and energetic chapter. You helped redefine Lorna's character with the exchange. Good.

Blaze moved closer to Lorna, until she could smell her breath. [Just a eensy-teensy suggestion here. Suggest "Blaze moved SO close to Lorna..." The way you phrased it sounded like the reason she moved close to Lorna was to smell her breath.]

"I knew it. You're not gay. You're in love with Sebastian."
[Ah-ha! That was a brilliant test Blaze conducted. But you can't fool me. I know who Blazes author is! Good job, Phyllis.]

"You're out of your mind... and messed with the wrong person, bitch. [I know this is dialogue and probably the way people talk, but in case it wasn't intentional, did you know you mixed tenses in this sentence? Not even a suggestion, but an inquiry.]

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Jay. I appreciate the suggestions and will do a quick edit. :)