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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Laura's Humiliation"The story about three women who need to make money
5 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Now we get together. It is sad that people on low incomes have to feel guilty for having a treat once in a while. But, then again, when we need other things more, I suppose it is beyond a little treat. :) xsx
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Now we get together. It is sad that people on low incomes have to feel guilty for having a treat once in a while. But, then again, when we need other things more, I suppose it is beyond a little treat. :) xsx
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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So true. Laura and Karen both had very comfortable existences before fate dictated otherwise, so they are probably more affected by it than Jenny, who more or less brought her children up single handed. I got the idea for the vouchers when my son gave me three hundred pounds worth for my birthday last year ( earned them at the call centre he working for at the time) I decided to put them towards a new laptop from Argos, and felt totally humiliated when I had to count them out because they were mostly one pound vouchers. The cashier counted them out again so loudly (and slowly) there was a queue of people behind me craning their necks to see what they were. Cringe! x
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People can be so up their own backsides some times. (excuse the language!) I would have boasted that my son had worked hard to get them for my birthday present. Then they would have been jealous.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Counting our chickens before the hatch is unwise. It's a good thing she has friends she can (hopefully) count on. FS would not allow me to award another 6th star but know I think it's that good
Bear
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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Counting our chickens before the hatch is unwise. It's a good thing she has friends she can (hopefully) count on. FS would not allow me to award another 6th star but know I think it's that good
Bear
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2015
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It's the thought that counts! Thank you, my friend. Alexis xxx
Comment from rwilliam
I like how you write what situations that I can relate too. Buying things you really don't have the money for. Great job, again. I'm intrigued to see where it's going.
Good job, my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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I like how you write what situations that I can relate too. Buying things you really don't have the money for. Great job, again. I'm intrigued to see where it's going.
Good job, my friend.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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This is the serious bit but I promise there is lots of fun ahead! Thank you again for catching up - You couldn't pay me a greater compliment. Alexis x
Comment from Sloegin
I like the way you presented the scene. I think it could have moved along a little faster, (too much time at the cashier)
YOu kept me engrossed when the man started a conversation at the bus stop. I was disappointed when he was removed from the scene.
Try not to use the same word close together, "it STILL felt wrong when there were STILL pressing bills.
Over all a good read, keep writing,
sloegin
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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I like the way you presented the scene. I think it could have moved along a little faster, (too much time at the cashier)
YOu kept me engrossed when the man started a conversation at the bus stop. I was disappointed when he was removed from the scene.
Try not to use the same word close together, "it STILL felt wrong when there were STILL pressing bills.
Over all a good read, keep writing,
sloegin
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much for your review. As we both know, 'faster' isn't a word we think of when writing a novel that needs at least 75,000 words to get published, but yes, balancing it right can sometimes be hard. Glad to say, only one 'still' remains. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from c_lucas
Even if the vouchers were food vouchers, there is no need to be ashamed. Everyone reaches a low time in their life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014
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Even if the vouchers were food vouchers, there is no need to be ashamed. Everyone reaches a low time in their life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014
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So true! I was only using the vouchers to prove what a proud woman Laura is, and how much her life has changed. Here in Glasgow, there are hundreds of families who would starve without the food banks that have been set up (we don't have food vouchers here) Thank you so much for your review, Charlie. Alexis x
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You're welcome, Alex. Charlie
