From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Death of love."Mostly romance.
26 total reviews
Comment from Permelia
The pain of a relationship that has soured and ended is sometimes almost more than a person can handle. It is hard to put all memories on a shelf- your poem has a bittersweet air to it.
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The pain of a relationship that has soured and ended is sometimes almost more than a person can handle. It is hard to put all memories on a shelf- your poem has a bittersweet air to it.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2005
Comment from amaranthblue
Beautifully written, amazing images and emotions inside of this, yet painful with melancholy undertones wrapped inside of hope... A new word for me "Chimera" *S* an interesting choice(Greek mythology) " A fire breathing she monster " but I think you may have meant it as " A creation of the imagination; an impossible and foolish fancy" It is strange that the same word would have such different meanings. Then there is another one (biology)" An organism/ plant, containing tissue from at least 2 genetically distinct parents "...
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Beautifully written, amazing images and emotions inside of this, yet painful with melancholy undertones wrapped inside of hope... A new word for me "Chimera" *S* an interesting choice(Greek mythology) " A fire breathing she monster " but I think you may have meant it as " A creation of the imagination; an impossible and foolish fancy" It is strange that the same word would have such different meanings. Then there is another one (biology)" An organism/ plant, containing tissue from at least 2 genetically distinct parents "...
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Lainee
Pili this is beautiful, wistful and sad all combined to pull on the heart strings in a bittersweet way. The pain of a relationship ending and losing grip and what once was comes through in your words. Great flow of thoughts and emotional depth.
Goodluck always,
Lainee :O)
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Pili this is beautiful, wistful and sad all combined to pull on the heart strings in a bittersweet way. The pain of a relationship ending and losing grip and what once was comes through in your words. Great flow of thoughts and emotional depth.
Goodluck always,
Lainee :O)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from thehappypoet
Not my favorite of yours. The beginning seems contradictory because i don't understand how you can feel liberated when you can't detach. Also, i don't really get air inundating your chest or where the unfolding chimeras coes from. I do like the golden chains and orange horizon in the same stanza, very pretty. And your last stanza is the best and almost kind of saves the poem but doesn't quite do the trick cuz of the stuff i said before just not connecting to the end. I think the best thing you could do for this poem is to lose the beginning and stick with the end. If you could somehow ix the last two so that i can see the golden chains slipping off that great peaceful tone in the last stanza (which i think is your strength as a writer) i think this poem would be beautiful. Just think simpler!
Happy:)Poet
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Not my favorite of yours. The beginning seems contradictory because i don't understand how you can feel liberated when you can't detach. Also, i don't really get air inundating your chest or where the unfolding chimeras coes from. I do like the golden chains and orange horizon in the same stanza, very pretty. And your last stanza is the best and almost kind of saves the poem but doesn't quite do the trick cuz of the stuff i said before just not connecting to the end. I think the best thing you could do for this poem is to lose the beginning and stick with the end. If you could somehow ix the last two so that i can see the golden chains slipping off that great peaceful tone in the last stanza (which i think is your strength as a writer) i think this poem would be beautiful. Just think simpler!
Happy:)Poet
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Diny
ANd many times as we are going through the rough times we are not as intuned with ourselves
THis reads like you have learned from your past well and because of that
I believe Your future looks bright.
blessings
DI
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ANd many times as we are going through the rough times we are not as intuned with ourselves
THis reads like you have learned from your past well and because of that
I believe Your future looks bright.
blessings
DI
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from searchen
Pili Pubul - Hi. ahhhhhhh..to breathe. If only the (sometime) upset would relinquish its grip as easily, as soon. This was an excellent compilation of the gifts/rewards/pleasures we seem to reacquire for ourselves when we do in fact let it go.
just quiet
subtle
images
of what
has become
my past.
Very nice.
Happy writing,
searchen
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Pili Pubul - Hi. ahhhhhhh..to breathe. If only the (sometime) upset would relinquish its grip as easily, as soon. This was an excellent compilation of the gifts/rewards/pleasures we seem to reacquire for ourselves when we do in fact let it go.
just quiet
subtle
images
of what
has become
my past.
Very nice.
Happy writing,
searchen
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from CYRANOGATOR
What a special thing liberation is. We sometimes do not know how constrained we really are, until we do begin the process. Nice flow and easy read. Good job
Wally III
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What a special thing liberation is. We sometimes do not know how constrained we really are, until we do begin the process. Nice flow and easy read. Good job
Wally III
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from J. Grubbs
This is a very good poem, although I think I liked the third stanza the best. I believe it was the most descriptive. The picture goes very well with this poem. Thank you for sharing your work with me.
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This is a very good poem, although I think I liked the third stanza the best. I believe it was the most descriptive. The picture goes very well with this poem. Thank you for sharing your work with me.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from jkhudson
My calm
soul
welcomes
reflections,
free
from regrets,
just quiet
subtle
images
of what
has become
my past.
I'm not quite sure what you were trying to say, but you said it with beautiful words. Is it reflections of the past?
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My calm
soul
welcomes
reflections,
free
from regrets,
just quiet
subtle
images
of what
has become
my past.
I'm not quite sure what you were trying to say, but you said it with beautiful words. Is it reflections of the past?
Comment Written 22-Sep-2005
Comment from Bryana
Awesome poem about being free. I can feel
relief in your heart as everything is coming to an end
so that you can have a new beginning. Wonderful thoughts
Keep your possitive attitude and come visit me!
Un abrazo mi amiga,
Ana
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Awesome poem about being free. I can feel
relief in your heart as everything is coming to an end
so that you can have a new beginning. Wonderful thoughts
Keep your possitive attitude and come visit me!
Un abrazo mi amiga,
Ana
Comment Written 21-Sep-2005
