Comment from JanetRussek

Excellent

Wow, Bob. This is an intense chapter. As always I was held spellbound, beginning to end. Wonderful work. Loved the read.
Warm Regards,
Janet

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014

Janet,
I'm running out of expressions of gratitude. Every time I read a review of yours I feel both humbled and honoured.

You make me feel a writer and that fulfils my dream and for that I thank you yet again,

Best wishes
Bob

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Great chapter, Bob. Good pace throughout, particularly just prior to the explosion.

"What does all of this have to do [I know it's dialogue, but "What does all this..." seems more dialogue friendly. Only in the area of suggestion, to accept or reject.]

Judgement was measured in inches [Judgment was measured in inches >> unless this is the Australian spelling.]

An extremely well-written, tense ending to this chapter.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

I think we Aussies are deficient when it comes to spelling. And I will also change that dialogue.

Thank you again Jay

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a horrible ending,a child has been assassinated when I think it was supposed to be detective Paul. This is great change of pace with the story centring on Arthur Ash, detective Lyons! Well constructed story, Bob, interesting I'm glad I've been following it all the way through, well, you are maintaining the tension all through the series! Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thanks Roy. Your comments are always flattering.

Comment from Julia.

Good

Since I haven't read previous chapters, I can't say much about plot or character. This chapter did hold my interest all the way to the end, and I would be interested to read more of the book. However, I found the dialogue to be a bit stiff, a bit forced. The way Arthur spoke didn't seem completely natural.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

I often think a four star review is more valuable to a writer than a five or six star award as it usually pinpoints a error. As writers we are here to learn and constructive criticism ensures we do that. So again I thank you.

The one thing that would, in my opinion, make your comment more valuable would be if you could point out specific examples where you feel the work is weak.

Again I thank you for such a constructive comment

Comment from Edward J

Excellent

Great job. I think your use of dialogue does a great job of keeping your characters alive. This is an easy and enjoyable read. And your storyline is developing nicely. The viewpoint is good as well. Very entertaining.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thank you Edward for stopping by and reviewing my writing. Comments like yours really make the writing worthwhile

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Well written with god use of natural dialogue
Intense and riveting so that the reader wants to read uninterruptedly.
Good interaction between characters
Good story plan and development
Allowed the story to move at a good pace

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thank you for reading and offering such positive comments.