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Comment from Zue65
Wow what a stubborn yet a courageous woman Soni is. Her characterization made your story more exciting and interesting. The tension and conflict in this story bring the readers on edge. An excellent write.
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Wow what a stubborn yet a courageous woman Soni is. Her characterization made your story more exciting and interesting. The tension and conflict in this story bring the readers on edge. An excellent write.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
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Comment from emrpoems
Well written chapter
Good use of natural dialogue and interaction between the characters
Lots of action and suspense that keep the reader's attention right to the end
Interesting chapter well developed
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Well written chapter
Good use of natural dialogue and interaction between the characters
Lots of action and suspense that keep the reader's attention right to the end
Interesting chapter well developed
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Soni is an idiot in my book, but then stubborn people often are when it comes to taking sensible precautions. The new system seems to have made some interesting changes to the format -
"Ay, Dios mÃ???Ã??Ã?Âo! We don't need
and one small correction needed I think you need a comma -
"Best I can tell(,) to the Glass Mountains over by Panther Mesa." Tatiana dried a tear. "She wouldn't wait for you."
Patrick
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Hi Barbara,
Soni is an idiot in my book, but then stubborn people often are when it comes to taking sensible precautions. The new system seems to have made some interesting changes to the format -
"Ay, Dios mÃ???Ã??Ã?Âo! We don't need
and one small correction needed I think you need a comma -
"Best I can tell(,) to the Glass Mountains over by Panther Mesa." Tatiana dried a tear. "She wouldn't wait for you."
Patrick
Comment Written 11-Dec-2014
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Comment from suep
This is the first chapter I've read of this story and even though I didn't have the full background I still found it quite interesting. Good dialogue. The only one spot where I hesitated was where Tatiana says to Alex "She'll be over being angry. How will you feel is something happens to her?" I just wondered if it should be 'She'll get over being angry' instead of 'She'll be over...'.
I really liked that there were two scenes, one with Soni, and then once she left the one where Alex returns. An enjoyable read and one that piques the interest to want to know what happens next. Well written! :)
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This is the first chapter I've read of this story and even though I didn't have the full background I still found it quite interesting. Good dialogue. The only one spot where I hesitated was where Tatiana says to Alex "She'll be over being angry. How will you feel is something happens to her?" I just wondered if it should be 'She'll get over being angry' instead of 'She'll be over...'.
I really liked that there were two scenes, one with Soni, and then once she left the one where Alex returns. An enjoyable read and one that piques the interest to want to know what happens next. Well written! :)
Comment Written 10-Dec-2014
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Comment from JanetRussek
I enjoyed this chapter; action and suspense from beginning to end. Word choice is descriptive and dialog is natural. I enjoyed the read very much.
Warm Regards,
Janet
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I enjoyed this chapter; action and suspense from beginning to end. Word choice is descriptive and dialog is natural. I enjoyed the read very much.
Warm Regards,
Janet
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A well written chapter, my friend. Sounds like a dangerous situation she is in. I'm glad someone is going to catch up with her. Bet your ready for Christmas vacation. Somehow, this year, I'm just not in the mood. I'm looking forward to a better new year~Debbie
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A well written chapter, my friend. Sounds like a dangerous situation she is in. I'm glad someone is going to catch up with her. Bet your ready for Christmas vacation. Somehow, this year, I'm just not in the mood. I'm looking forward to a better new year~Debbie
Comment Written 10-Dec-2014
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Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Hey stranger, it's been a long time since I've read any of your work. I see you haven't lost any of your great talent. This is an excellent chapter, I love strong female characters and you have certainly developed toughie with Soni
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Hey stranger, it's been a long time since I've read any of your work. I see you haven't lost any of your great talent. This is an excellent chapter, I love strong female characters and you have certainly developed toughie with Soni
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Comment from Sloegin
As usual, not much to critique. You tell a good story with believable characters.
You make so few choices that aren't the best, it's tough to find one that doesn't ring true.
The only thing that made me stop my rhythmic read, is: "Gus gulped." It just doesn't seem to fit in with your usual descriptive choices.
Your dialogue is more than believeable, your descriptive work is, as usual, exceptional. You left me hanging with your last sentence. Is it leading to a fight between the two? Is Jim just trying to show Alex up? I could go on but you did a good job making me want to keep reading.
sloegin
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As usual, not much to critique. You tell a good story with believable characters.
You make so few choices that aren't the best, it's tough to find one that doesn't ring true.
The only thing that made me stop my rhythmic read, is: "Gus gulped." It just doesn't seem to fit in with your usual descriptive choices.
Your dialogue is more than believeable, your descriptive work is, as usual, exceptional. You left me hanging with your last sentence. Is it leading to a fight between the two? Is Jim just trying to show Alex up? I could go on but you did a good job making me want to keep reading.
sloegin
Comment Written 09-Dec-2014
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Comment from Sasha
Everyone is all riled up, and for good reason. Soni seems capable but not knowing what lies ahead, is scary to say the least. I am glad Alex and Jim are going after her. I do hope they get to her in time. Great work with this chapter. You kept me on the edge of my chair from beginning to end.
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Everyone is all riled up, and for good reason. Soni seems capable but not knowing what lies ahead, is scary to say the least. I am glad Alex and Jim are going after her. I do hope they get to her in time. Great work with this chapter. You kept me on the edge of my chair from beginning to end.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2014
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Comment from angelface2
Nicely written, Barbara. I didn't find any mistakes and the characters and conversation sound sensible. I hope Alex catches up with Soni. :>D Miss Sally
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Nicely written, Barbara. I didn't find any mistakes and the characters and conversation sound sensible. I hope Alex catches up with Soni. :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
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