Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I only seen one spag, nothing big. Catholics get a bad reputation because of this but it's such a big thing. The devil gets to everyone at some point and you have to find a way to resist temptation. Great job with this

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 Comment Written 10-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thanks for your review. I understand your concern about bashing Catholics but that is not my intention. The story takes you towards the spirituality in Jesus' teaching as the story develops; Catholic religion happens to be the one high up in discouraging the spiritual path as it is a firm believer of the Apostolic religious doctrines. The spag is due to spell check aspect of webpage provided by the FanStory.com I corrected that error in next chapters and will correct it in the chapter 1 which you read. I hope you will follow the story. Best regards. Arun

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This is wonderful. You take a nice patient pace with it. Father is a believable character. I found this to be a very enjoyable and well written story. Great job.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

Thanks for your encouraging words. I am uploading the second chapter. I was bit worried about how the story will be received by the readers,