Book Promo: Two Tattered Hearts
A story of a young mother's fight out of an abusive marriage47 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, I for one would read this gladly - it promises to be a very exciting and poignant read, judging from this promo. Nicely done, Barb - HERE'S WISHING YOU MUCH SUCCESS!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Well, I for one would read this gladly - it promises to be a very exciting and poignant read, judging from this promo. Nicely done, Barb - HERE'S WISHING YOU MUCH SUCCESS!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
I enjoyed reading this work and found no reason to suggest any changes. The story was well displayed and the description was easy to follow. Mary
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I enjoyed reading this work and found no reason to suggest any changes. The story was well displayed and the description was easy to follow. Mary
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dom G Robles
A beautiful story. The title caught my senses right away. And reading further made me feel eager to find what was going on. The cruelty of the husband was very real and distinct-- a true happening to all battered woman--a wife under the hands of a cruel husband. Barbara described pretty well the cruelty,and the wife could do nothing but plead for mercy. My sincerest congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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A beautiful story. The title caught my senses right away. And reading further made me feel eager to find what was going on. The cruelty of the husband was very real and distinct-- a true happening to all battered woman--a wife under the hands of a cruel husband. Barbara described pretty well the cruelty,and the wife could do nothing but plead for mercy. My sincerest congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, Barbara. Dom
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent promo Barbara, I remember reading the whole story and waiting each week for her to find happiness and the story of the indian paintbrush. I hope you do well with this book
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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this is an excellent promo Barbara, I remember reading the whole story and waiting each week for her to find happiness and the story of the indian paintbrush. I hope you do well with this book
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Congrats on your publishing contract and this is a very good book promo write up. The scene you included is dramatic and well penned.
One suggestion:
Troy's adoptive parents help him overcome his past,(NO COMMA NEEDED HERE) and willingly assist him as he helps Anna find a ray of hope in an otherwise black future.
One suggestion on transition--to switch the sentence order here:
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Anna had taken her ill infant to the doctor against Bobby's orders. The child has a double ear infection. The following is an extract from Chapter 2:
to:
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The following is an extract from Chapter 2.
Anna had taken her ill infant to the doctor against Bobby's orders. The child has a double ear infection.
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Two Tattered Hearts was published by G and J publishing and can be found in e-book format at Amazon.com or at Smashwords.com.
Two more suggestions on the last line (a cap on the title G and J Publishing), and the sentence structure is fine, but would be stronger if you avoid passive voicing and make it two sentences. Suggest:
G and J Publishing published Two Tattered Hearts. It can be found in e-book format at Amazon.com or at Smashwords.com.
Your new title is much better. Good job!
Best of luck with sales and promotions.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Congrats on your publishing contract and this is a very good book promo write up. The scene you included is dramatic and well penned.
One suggestion:
Troy's adoptive parents help him overcome his past,(NO COMMA NEEDED HERE) and willingly assist him as he helps Anna find a ray of hope in an otherwise black future.
One suggestion on transition--to switch the sentence order here:
*****
Anna had taken her ill infant to the doctor against Bobby's orders. The child has a double ear infection. The following is an extract from Chapter 2:
to:
*****
The following is an extract from Chapter 2.
Anna had taken her ill infant to the doctor against Bobby's orders. The child has a double ear infection.
*
Two Tattered Hearts was published by G and J publishing and can be found in e-book format at Amazon.com or at Smashwords.com.
Two more suggestions on the last line (a cap on the title G and J Publishing), and the sentence structure is fine, but would be stronger if you avoid passive voicing and make it two sentences. Suggest:
G and J Publishing published Two Tattered Hearts. It can be found in e-book format at Amazon.com or at Smashwords.com.
Your new title is much better. Good job!
Best of luck with sales and promotions.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and suggestions.
Comment from chasennov
Book Promo: Two Tattered Hearts.' I hope this work of yours is read by people who need it most; the abusers. But then, they can't read, can they? Well done, Barbara.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Book Promo: Two Tattered Hearts.' I hope this work of yours is read by people who need it most; the abusers. But then, they can't read, can they? Well done, Barbara.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. Nope they are ignorant ....
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You are always most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow Barbara this is a story that needs to be told ...if it makes even one woman get brave and leave the monster she is with
Yikes ...oh how hard.
God bless and thanks
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Wow Barbara this is a story that needs to be told ...if it makes even one woman get brave and leave the monster she is with
Yikes ...oh how hard.
God bless and thanks
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Barb,
Hot subject to tackle these days--it's so prevalent. Nice promo for your book.
Hope you do well with sells.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Hi, Barb,
Hot subject to tackle these days--it's so prevalent. Nice promo for your book.
Hope you do well with sells.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from country ranch writer
THERE IS NO REASON ON EARTH A MAN HAS TO BEAT UP HIS WIFE AND CHILDREN TO THE POINT OF HELPLESSNESS SO THEY END UP FEELING THEY DESERVED IT IN THE FIRST PLACE. WRONG! OH! SO WRONG INDEED.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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THERE IS NO REASON ON EARTH A MAN HAS TO BEAT UP HIS WIFE AND CHILDREN TO THE POINT OF HELPLESSNESS SO THEY END UP FEELING THEY DESERVED IT IN THE FIRST PLACE. WRONG! OH! SO WRONG INDEED.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Very true, but it happens very often. I have a friend living in that situation right now. No matter what we say she defends the jerk. Thank you for your kind review.
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SHE NEEDS TO REALIZE TWO THINGS THIS IS A LIFE AND DEATH SITUATION AND ITS NOT GOING TO GET BETTER. YOU NEED TO SET HER DOWN AND WORK ON A PLAN TO GET HER AWAY FROM THERE SAFELY WITHOUT ANYONE KNOWING THE PLANS.
Comment from Sefiros
I'm glad things are working out for you, but I have to say that your dialogue doesn't seem natural. It's all the things we'd expect from these kinds of scenarioes, but it feels like I'm reading a computer print-out screen: stiff and flat. Good luck with this and future endeavors.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I'm glad things are working out for you, but I have to say that your dialogue doesn't seem natural. It's all the things we'd expect from these kinds of scenarioes, but it feels like I'm reading a computer print-out screen: stiff and flat. Good luck with this and future endeavors.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the review.
