Life's Tableau
Tableau Poem36 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Pretty impressive, Mike. You took us from the womb to the grave in six stanzas. Skillful use of bookends as the first and last stanza are parallel in sentiments. Remindful of the rhythm of life.
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Pretty impressive, Mike. You took us from the womb to the grave in six stanzas. Skillful use of bookends as the first and last stanza are parallel in sentiments. Remindful of the rhythm of life.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--six stanzas of tableaux about an entire life. I admired your describing the progression from the infant to the elderly, dying man with the recurring clenching fists. Best wishes to us both in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Wow--six stanzas of tableaux about an entire life. I admired your describing the progression from the infant to the elderly, dying man with the recurring clenching fists. Best wishes to us both in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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What an encouraging review. Thank you so much. A lot of great entries. You never know in these things. I'm pleased you liked this. Good luck!! I liked yours quite a bit. I'll try to get a review in. I'm hopelessly buried and unorganized. Thank you!! mikey
Comment from patcelaw
This is sad, but a true commentary on life. The ups can be so good while the downs hurt. I have experienced most of what is in this poem, even the death of my spouse. Blessings, Patricia
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This is sad, but a true commentary on life. The ups can be so good while the downs hurt. I have experienced most of what is in this poem, even the death of my spouse. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 05-Dec-2014
Comment from RYME4U
This is so well written and so chronological from birth to death,What a thoughtful piece this is and so descriptive and insightful. Excellent job!
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This is so well written and so chronological from birth to death,What a thoughtful piece this is and so descriptive and insightful. Excellent job!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2014
Comment from royowen
A very clever collection of tableaus, each one possesses it's own imagery, they are articulate, with expressive, descriptive narratives, very imaginative, the imagery is great, this is most stanzas I've seen in one work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
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A very clever collection of tableaus, each one possesses it's own imagery, they are articulate, with expressive, descriptive narratives, very imaginative, the imagery is great, this is most stanzas I've seen in one work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2014
Comment from Walu Feral
WOW! That is a great piece mate. It made my head spin as i was reading it.
I know what you mean about candles hiding the cake, hahahaha.
Great effort and good luck with it.
Cheers Fez
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WOW! That is a great piece mate. It made my head spin as i was reading it.
I know what you mean about candles hiding the cake, hahahaha.
Great effort and good luck with it.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 05-Dec-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Cool, the never-ending cycle of life and death, played out in brilliant blue and pale grey, in true, tableau poetic form.
The thing I enjoy the most about these tableau poems is it forces the poet to keep on point, and not get overtly wordy. The thing I liked most about this particular tableau is that it tells an entire story of a man's life. It has a beginning and a definite ending, and pretty much brings us to the conclusion that, when all is said and done -- no matter how rich we are, how many girls we've slept with, or how many countries and places we've visited -- we all end up arriving at the same destination. The mortician's slab.
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Cool, the never-ending cycle of life and death, played out in brilliant blue and pale grey, in true, tableau poetic form.
The thing I enjoy the most about these tableau poems is it forces the poet to keep on point, and not get overtly wordy. The thing I liked most about this particular tableau is that it tells an entire story of a man's life. It has a beginning and a definite ending, and pretty much brings us to the conclusion that, when all is said and done -- no matter how rich we are, how many girls we've slept with, or how many countries and places we've visited -- we all end up arriving at the same destination. The mortician's slab.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Such a controlled leap through time. It really clicked for me with the leap from daughter to grandson. The repetition of images- birthday cake, fists anchors the reader to make the flow of time natural or the more things change, the more they stay the same. Excellent!
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Such a controlled leap through time. It really clicked for me with the leap from daughter to grandson. The repetition of images- birthday cake, fists anchors the reader to make the flow of time natural or the more things change, the more they stay the same. Excellent!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2014
Comment from Joe_P
This is a delightful poem that whizzes through a lifetime in seconds. It draws attention to the fact that life is short, that we humans are insignificant.
Joe_P
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This is a delightful poem that whizzes through a lifetime in seconds. It draws attention to the fact that life is short, that we humans are insignificant.
Joe_P
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a dramatic series of verses that cover the whole of life from birth to death. A brilliant touch: to begin and end with basically the same characters and words - screams, pacing, doctors, truth and lies, fingers, breathing - with only slight but vital changes between those that indicate birth and those that indicate death. This is well done. Jeanie Mercer
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This is a dramatic series of verses that cover the whole of life from birth to death. A brilliant touch: to begin and end with basically the same characters and words - screams, pacing, doctors, truth and lies, fingers, breathing - with only slight but vital changes between those that indicate birth and those that indicate death. This is well done. Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
