sane?
entry 1-6-112 total reviews
Comment from JPilcher
How ever did you manage to get your hands on that selfie of mine?!? LOL!!! Seriously - the picture drew me in, but it also completely creeped me out at that same time. When I saw the title though, I knew it was a MUST SEE!!! Well done. Not sure I could pull off a 1-6-1 but the way you all are managing to pull off these short pieces, it makes me at least THINK about trying it sometime!!! ;)
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How ever did you manage to get your hands on that selfie of mine?!? LOL!!! Seriously - the picture drew me in, but it also completely creeped me out at that same time. When I saw the title though, I knew it was a MUST SEE!!! Well done. Not sure I could pull off a 1-6-1 but the way you all are managing to pull off these short pieces, it makes me at least THINK about trying it sometime!!! ;)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ha-hah...looks like something I might write, Mikey. Cool artwork, a creepy, chilling topic -- suicide. Good choice of rhyming words to get the...point across.
Nicely done, spooky stuff!
~Dean :}
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Ha-hah...looks like something I might write, Mikey. Cool artwork, a creepy, chilling topic -- suicide. Good choice of rhyming words to get the...point across.
Nicely done, spooky stuff!
~Dean :}
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Stunning presentation
all requirements satisfied for the prompt
I think this refers to abuse
All requirements satisfied
Good luck in the prompt
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Stunning presentation
all requirements satisfied for the prompt
I think this refers to abuse
All requirements satisfied
Good luck in the prompt
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from rjpurdy
OOH! Very dark and brooding. Excellently done! No frills here just a poignant statement about death. Your poem is very contemplative giving the reader a lot to think about. Best wishes in the voting. rj
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OOH! Very dark and brooding. Excellently done! No frills here just a poignant statement about death. Your poem is very contemplative giving the reader a lot to think about. Best wishes in the voting. rj
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is a first. You have managed to write something powerful in what I consider a silly form. This is a wonderful thought provoking piece. Exceptioal.
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This is a first. You have managed to write something powerful in what I consider a silly form. This is a wonderful thought provoking piece. Exceptioal.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from BeasPeas
Ohhhh! What a way to open FS at 7:15 a.m. I think this refers to those who are so distressed they self-cut? In any case, how tragic.
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Ohhhh! What a way to open FS at 7:15 a.m. I think this refers to those who are so distressed they self-cut? In any case, how tragic.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from starkat
no pain after you're slain - insane to cut your vein (or maybe not), but not in vane - a crane could drop on your head, leaving you dead - no pain, no gain ... time for a walk through the rain while electricity reigns to shock your insanity into reality - so, it's more sane to cut your vein and ease the pain if there's a choice on how you're slain - watch blood drain and leave a stain-
I prefer getting hit by a train, but not hurting my brain.
great job rhyming 1-6-1 with this bloodless, yet heart warming story - a bit scary but the slain does return to room temperature
enjoyed your 'sane?' poem as I check my pulse
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no pain after you're slain - insane to cut your vein (or maybe not), but not in vane - a crane could drop on your head, leaving you dead - no pain, no gain ... time for a walk through the rain while electricity reigns to shock your insanity into reality - so, it's more sane to cut your vein and ease the pain if there's a choice on how you're slain - watch blood drain and leave a stain-
I prefer getting hit by a train, but not hurting my brain.
great job rhyming 1-6-1 with this bloodless, yet heart warming story - a bit scary but the slain does return to room temperature
enjoyed your 'sane?' poem as I check my pulse
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from robina1978
An original subject and it all rhymed. A beautiful photo complements it very well. Amazing how you can say so much in such a short poem. Best wishes for the prompt.
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An original subject and it all rhymed. A beautiful photo complements it very well. Amazing how you can say so much in such a short poem. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Wow! x ten thousand. This is an eye-popping gruesome image, my friend. the rymes are unique in themselves and couls stand alone without the picture, but it is better with this image. i seen images like this on Photo bucket. this is super duper -- killer Sir Mikey. i give you all I got. I real contender, i do promise you. Boo... wackydo
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Wow! x ten thousand. This is an eye-popping gruesome image, my friend. the rymes are unique in themselves and couls stand alone without the picture, but it is better with this image. i seen images like this on Photo bucket. this is super duper -- killer Sir Mikey. i give you all I got. I real contender, i do promise you. Boo... wackydo
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Good trick adding an extra rhyming word as the title.
You have managed to squeeze a small story into you eight allotted syllables. No mean feat.
Good luck.
Steve
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Good trick adding an extra rhyming word as the title.
You have managed to squeeze a small story into you eight allotted syllables. No mean feat.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
