The Winter is Approaching
a Shakespearean Sonnet130 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Very nice. A warm way to express something cold. Yes, there is beauty in this season. It seems to wash everything away and promises a new start. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Very nice. A warm way to express something cold. Yes, there is beauty in this season. It seems to wash everything away and promises a new start. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from st francis
Excellent. Shows the two sides of winter, the bitter sweet of.. "And yet, in spite of chilling cruelty,
it leaves a world of splendor in its wake." The comparisons you make are stunning because such adversity can create such beauty all at the same time. And most often, adversity is never welcomed but intrudes. Extends over into life's hardships. Quite often it is those who have suffered terribly that shine the brightest light. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful expression. Blessing, Miriam
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Excellent. Shows the two sides of winter, the bitter sweet of.. "And yet, in spite of chilling cruelty,
it leaves a world of splendor in its wake." The comparisons you make are stunning because such adversity can create such beauty all at the same time. And most often, adversity is never welcomed but intrudes. Extends over into life's hardships. Quite often it is those who have suffered terribly that shine the brightest light. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful expression. Blessing, Miriam
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Miriam, thank you so very much for your gracious review and generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
I think your style is masterful, ( I am not expert). But I know if I like it or not.
I read it aloud , and the music of the rhytmn is wonderful. Enjoy the winter
images you so poetically describe.. Brrrrrr... Pili
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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I think your style is masterful, ( I am not expert). But I know if I like it or not.
I read it aloud , and the music of the rhytmn is wonderful. Enjoy the winter
images you so poetically describe.. Brrrrrr... Pili
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You very welcome... ;:-) pili
Comment from Tatarka2
I must admit I don't understand your friend's concern. I did love this poem, though, especially with the picture of the blue jay. So perfect. You have captured the "feel" of winter here, and done so in such perfect rhyme. It seems to me you get better all the time; as you write more, I'm sure you gain in confidence and experience, Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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I must admit I don't understand your friend's concern. I did love this poem, though, especially with the picture of the blue jay. So perfect. You have captured the "feel" of winter here, and done so in such perfect rhyme. It seems to me you get better all the time; as you write more, I'm sure you gain in confidence and experience, Well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Tatarka :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
The repetition you speak of seems to fit naturally in this case. The shift from an emphatic "cannot" to a less strongly stressed "can't" provides a clever nuance. The break in iambic rhythm with "Relentless, towards my home" has the happy effect of making the first word stand out with increased emphasis. Such variations help to break the monotony of the de-dum rhythm when they are intentional and serve a useful purpose.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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The repetition you speak of seems to fit naturally in this case. The shift from an emphatic "cannot" to a less strongly stressed "can't" provides a clever nuance. The break in iambic rhythm with "Relentless, towards my home" has the happy effect of making the first word stand out with increased emphasis. Such variations help to break the monotony of the de-dum rhythm when they are intentional and serve a useful purpose.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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thank you so much, Tony, for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
When you are number one, People will try anything to bring you
you down. The blue jay is hiding underneath the two dummies in the blue jay outfit. Good poem and image.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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When you are number one, People will try anything to bring you
you down. The blue jay is hiding underneath the two dummies in the blue jay outfit. Good poem and image.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brook. Charlie
Comment from nomi338
This is a very wise approach. Since we cannot stop or even slowdown the ravages of Old Man Winter, we just mat as well learn to live with it and try to find some kind of positive in it. Another marvelous effort from a gifted writer.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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This is a very wise approach. Since we cannot stop or even slowdown the ravages of Old Man Winter, we just mat as well learn to live with it and try to find some kind of positive in it. Another marvelous effort from a gifted writer.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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nomi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, this Shakespearean Sonnet writing prompt entry
fulfills the elements of the contest with powerful word choice to describe the paradox of winter. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Brooke, this Shakespearean Sonnet writing prompt entry
fulfills the elements of the contest with powerful word choice to describe the paradox of winter. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Gracie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This poem is so very true. I can feel the winter biting into my bones as I read this poem and write this review. I am in the warmth at the minute, but I will have to brave the elements tomorrow yet again.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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This poem is so very true. I can feel the winter biting into my bones as I read this poem and write this review. I am in the warmth at the minute, but I will have to brave the elements tomorrow yet again.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
There is nothing wrong with this Shakespearean Sonnet, I have read many of his works. I do like this style too, and I like the theme you have chosen, it works beautifully. The first flakes of winter snow are lovely. Good luck in the contest, Brooke! xsx sandra
We have seen on the television how some parts of America are under tons of snow, I hope you are miles away from it.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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There is nothing wrong with this Shakespearean Sonnet, I have read many of his works. I do like this style too, and I like the theme you have chosen, it works beautifully. The first flakes of winter snow are lovely. Good luck in the contest, Brooke! xsx sandra
We have seen on the television how some parts of America are under tons of snow, I hope you are miles away from it.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Sandra, thank you so much. I am receiving snow right now, but it doesn't look like it's going to be more than an inch or two - I feel so bad for the people in Buffalo who had 7 feet!!! Brooke
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We saw it on the TV, those poor people!
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Last winter we had a miserable winter with a total 68 inches, the second worst winter in Philly ever - these people got over 80 inches at one time!
