Hooked
My author friend, Clayton E. Fisher's book35 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
To Ben Colder,
I was genuinely intrigued about all your memorable and happy times you had if Clayton Fisher.
A friendship like you had with Mr. Fisher can only come once in a lifetime.
The sincerity and honesty of your words can be greatly resonate in oneself.
Even the Lord will appreciate and award Mr. Fisher for his valiant efforts at his age. As the Lord always is standing close by to anoint those that never give up.
And I'm sure you also, will follow in his works and walk in the pathway that he has laid out for you and others.
This was a lovely tribute.
Charlene
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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To Ben Colder,
I was genuinely intrigued about all your memorable and happy times you had if Clayton Fisher.
A friendship like you had with Mr. Fisher can only come once in a lifetime.
The sincerity and honesty of your words can be greatly resonate in oneself.
Even the Lord will appreciate and award Mr. Fisher for his valiant efforts at his age. As the Lord always is standing close by to anoint those that never give up.
And I'm sure you also, will follow in his works and walk in the pathway that he has laid out for you and others.
This was a lovely tribute.
Charlene
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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I am deeply honored with this review. My blessings to you. Fisher was a blessing and his book as well.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A very interesting story Ben! I am sorry you lost your friend. He was truly a WWII War Hero. It shows how close we can really get to the friends we meet in our correspondence. Thank you for sharing this with us. xx Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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A very interesting story Ben! I am sorry you lost your friend. He was truly a WWII War Hero. It shows how close we can really get to the friends we meet in our correspondence. Thank you for sharing this with us. xx Nancy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Clayton Fisher was an inspiration more than he really knew. Thank you much, Nancy. Have a wonderful Thanksgiving.
Comment from Nosha17
That was a lovely story about your hero's life and writings. Someone who has experienced such adventure and heroism in his life is bound to write about it, so the public can learn more. Well narrated with sincerity and I loved the anecdote about your dog. Faye
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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That was a lovely story about your hero's life and writings. Someone who has experienced such adventure and heroism in his life is bound to write about it, so the public can learn more. Well narrated with sincerity and I loved the anecdote about your dog. Faye
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Fisher was indeed a hero, I appreciate the short time we were friends. Thank you for reviewing. My blessings to you. Yep, I WENT OVERBOARD WITH THE FIRE AND DOG BIT.
Comment from TOMORAL
An engrossing story about a true American hero. I am sure your relationship with this man has enriched and inspired your life very much. The fact that he was in his nineties and still writing gives me hope. It will take me at least that long to write something invaluable, if ever.
This is truly an award winning story. I hope the judges will take notice. Very well done.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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An engrossing story about a true American hero. I am sure your relationship with this man has enriched and inspired your life very much. The fact that he was in his nineties and still writing gives me hope. It will take me at least that long to write something invaluable, if ever.
This is truly an award winning story. I hope the judges will take notice. Very well done.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Appreciate you much and things will be OK. Blessing to you.
Comment from c_lucas
I see you are far ahead of me with your book signings and email contacts. Your review does justice to an American Hero. It is well worth the sixer. happy Thanksgiving, Ben. Charlie
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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I see you are far ahead of me with your book signings and email contacts. Your review does justice to an American Hero. It is well worth the sixer. happy Thanksgiving, Ben. Charlie
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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I thought it may inspire many of us old dogs who think we are through might have a good one still stored inside somewhere.Never know about things. Thanks, Charlie, you've been a friend.
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You're welcome, Ben. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
out maneuver - outmaneuver
good attention-grabbing in media res opening
a moving story of befriending this fellow author and the relationship that ensued
I like the dramatic section about the writer's close call
and the poignant closing to your essay
Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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out maneuver - outmaneuver
good attention-grabbing in media res opening
a moving story of befriending this fellow author and the relationship that ensued
I like the dramatic section about the writer's close call
and the poignant closing to your essay
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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As I sit here in my library and see his book, I feel honored to have known him and connected as well as we did. I have known many well known authors and celebrities and even invited to Ronnie and Nancy's Presidential Cermonies, but Fisher and I had a military bond only a GI would understand. Thank you for a kind review. Appreciate it much. My blessings to you.
Comment from jpduck
Your deep connection with Commander Fisher comes across clearly in this piece which also fits exactly with the requirements of the contest.
I suspect that everything from the opening to 'behind my armored seat.' is a direct quote from Fisher's book. If so, the whole of it should be enclosed within single quotatiion marks. In any event, there should be a blank line inserted after 'out maneuver it.' to mark the new paragraph.
If that section is not direct quotation, then 'out maneuver' should be 'outmaneuver', in the same way that out do should be outdo and out ran should be outran.
Also if it is not a direct quotation then in 'I positioned the plane where as my gunner could stop ...' the 'as' should be deleted.
A few other SPAGs and typos.
'when closing, Commander Clayton E. Fisher's, USN (RET) book, "Hooked".' (Delete the comma after 'closing').
After 'It was an email from a C. Fisher.' insert a blank line to mark the new paragraph.
'every time he turn on the ignition of his flying machine.' (Change 'turn' to 'turned').
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Your deep connection with Commander Fisher comes across clearly in this piece which also fits exactly with the requirements of the contest.
I suspect that everything from the opening to 'behind my armored seat.' is a direct quote from Fisher's book. If so, the whole of it should be enclosed within single quotatiion marks. In any event, there should be a blank line inserted after 'out maneuver it.' to mark the new paragraph.
If that section is not direct quotation, then 'out maneuver' should be 'outmaneuver', in the same way that out do should be outdo and out ran should be outran.
Also if it is not a direct quotation then in 'I positioned the plane where as my gunner could stop ...' the 'as' should be deleted.
A few other SPAGs and typos.
'when closing, Commander Clayton E. Fisher's, USN (RET) book, "Hooked".' (Delete the comma after 'closing').
After 'It was an email from a C. Fisher.' insert a blank line to mark the new paragraph.
'every time he turn on the ignition of his flying machine.' (Change 'turn' to 'turned').
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from GracieAnn
Ben, this Non-Fiction Writing Contest entry brings history alive for the reader with interest and helps those not of that generation to understand what war was like at that time. Well written and is a nice honor to Mr. Fisher. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Ben, this Non-Fiction Writing Contest entry brings history alive for the reader with interest and helps those not of that generation to understand what war was like at that time. Well written and is a nice honor to Mr. Fisher. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Just a change a pace. Appreciate you Gracie. Blessings to you. Happy Thanksgiving.
Comment from Joan E.
Your opening paragraph describes incredible good luck during the bad luck of war. Thank you for sharing your correspondence with the Commander, who is now in the Wide Blue Wonder," and your respective book promoting experiences. The tidbit about Tikki and the old photograph add to the appeal of this non-fictional piece. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Your opening paragraph describes incredible good luck during the bad luck of war. Thank you for sharing your correspondence with the Commander, who is now in the Wide Blue Wonder," and your respective book promoting experiences. The tidbit about Tikki and the old photograph add to the appeal of this non-fictional piece. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Change of pace. Appreciate you Joan. Blessings to you, Happy Thanksgiving.
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Many thanks for the Thanksgiving blessings. My best wishes to you and yours- Joan
Comment from rmj09
I found this chapter very interesting. I have found the older I get the more friends and family members.
The focus Comm. Clayton Fisher. The storyline development how the two had similar goals of promoting their books. Their jobs during the wars, and some of the silly things that can go wrong.
The narrative shows the action trying to fly from the enemy in a nose-dive. Tikki waking him while he burned a dishcloth.
The emotion I felt fear during the dive and all the bullets. Joy that they got away and Tikki waking him up.
It is hard to loss someone we depend on for their view and knowledge. But we can always be thankful they entered our lives.
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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I found this chapter very interesting. I have found the older I get the more friends and family members.
The focus Comm. Clayton Fisher. The storyline development how the two had similar goals of promoting their books. Their jobs during the wars, and some of the silly things that can go wrong.
The narrative shows the action trying to fly from the enemy in a nose-dive. Tikki waking him while he burned a dishcloth.
The emotion I felt fear during the dive and all the bullets. Joy that they got away and Tikki waking him up.
It is hard to loss someone we depend on for their view and knowledge. But we can always be thankful they entered our lives.
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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It is always a pleasure to receive a good review from someone who knows how. I appreciate you much. My blessings to you.
