Servant Words
Shakespearean Sonnet25 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh this is very good...your words are servant minions....and yet straight talk not flowery is more ....er power-y..I agree! I am married to a most un romantic man but he is the best.
Well done Steve
God bless
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Oh this is very good...your words are servant minions....and yet straight talk not flowery is more ....er power-y..I agree! I am married to a most un romantic man but he is the best.
Well done Steve
God bless
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Jenny.
Steve
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good Shakespearean sonnet in true English sonnet style. Perfect iambic pentameter - assuming you have given poesy 3 syllables ie. po-e-sy, Good abab rhyme as it should be. Could turn in stanza 3 and I like your rhyming couplet. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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A good Shakespearean sonnet in true English sonnet style. Perfect iambic pentameter - assuming you have given poesy 3 syllables ie. po-e-sy, Good abab rhyme as it should be. Could turn in stanza 3 and I like your rhyming couplet. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Dorothy.
Couldn't quite make it to the top in this one,,,
Steve
Comment from emrpoems
Reading this took me back to the old time days when we had to read Shakespeare for literature. You did a god job with this one
They coax, cajole, control and weave a spell,loved this line
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Reading this took me back to the old time days when we had to read Shakespeare for literature. You did a god job with this one
They coax, cajole, control and weave a spell,loved this line
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, this certainly had the ole Shakespearean flair about it, that's for sure. Unrequited love is never easy.
Sonnets are not easy to write -- not for me, anyway -- and you've done a bang-up job composing this one. Oh, how poets do so love to weave words, spinning them endlessly like spider's silk, trying to capture the essence of this, or the ambiance of that. This rejected poet seems to be having a difficult go at making his work for his purposes.
Alls the more the pity...
Well done, and best of luck to you in the contest! :}
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Well, this certainly had the ole Shakespearean flair about it, that's for sure. Unrequited love is never easy.
Sonnets are not easy to write -- not for me, anyway -- and you've done a bang-up job composing this one. Oh, how poets do so love to weave words, spinning them endlessly like spider's silk, trying to capture the essence of this, or the ambiance of that. This rejected poet seems to be having a difficult go at making his work for his purposes.
Alls the more the pity...
Well done, and best of luck to you in the contest! :}
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Dean.
No luck with this one - watch out for next time.
Steve
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi author. I enjoyed your sonnet written in Shakespearean style very much. It certainly has an archaic feel to it. They coax, cajole, control and weave a spell, Excellent alliteration in this line. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hi author. I enjoyed your sonnet written in Shakespearean style very much. It certainly has an archaic feel to it. They coax, cajole, control and weave a spell, Excellent alliteration in this line. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from butterfly4265
This is incredibly witty and clever. The best sonnet contest entry I have seen so far! I love the style and content. Very good rhyming and flow. What a shame the sweet words are rejected - ungrateful wench! Very well done indeed, and the best of luck in the contest :-)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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This is incredibly witty and clever. The best sonnet contest entry I have seen so far! I love the style and content. Very good rhyming and flow. What a shame the sweet words are rejected - ungrateful wench! Very well done indeed, and the best of luck in the contest :-)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Ben Colder
A troop of willing words all serve me well,
Arrayed in livery of verse and line.
They coax, cajole, control and weave a spell,
Sweet poesy designed to make you mine.
Strong wording.
Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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A troop of willing words all serve me well,
Arrayed in livery of verse and line.
They coax, cajole, control and weave a spell,
Sweet poesy designed to make you mine.
Strong wording.
Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Ben.
Steve
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. Kudos for making it this far without disqualification since many entries seem to have fallen to the wayside LOL. This is well penned and a thoroughly enjoyable read. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. Kudos for making it this far without disqualification since many entries seem to have fallen to the wayside LOL. This is well penned and a thoroughly enjoyable read. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you.
Yep, only half the entries made it into the booth - amazing!
Still couldn't quite make it....
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
When your words of love falls upon deaf ears, find you a new set, they may be more receptacle. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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When your words of love falls upon deaf ears, find you a new set, they may be more receptacle. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
excellent rhyming in good English sonnet rhyming pattern
good assonance in win a kiss
good alliteration in help's at hand
and willing words and others
good alliteration and assonance in coax/control/cajole and strong verbs
effective use of steady iambic meter and enjambment
effective turn in the third quatrain
strong expression of emotion
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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excellent rhyming in good English sonnet rhyming pattern
good assonance in win a kiss
good alliteration in help's at hand
and willing words and others
good alliteration and assonance in coax/control/cajole and strong verbs
effective use of steady iambic meter and enjambment
effective turn in the third quatrain
strong expression of emotion
Brooke
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Brooke
Couldn't quite bring it home this time.
Steve
