House Just Bought
Please read notes...and well the poem too....49 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
You have so much invested in this gamble, haven't you? And yet, you know that by some force you will stumble/bumble through. A house, like a tree, a sacred mountain, an address, is the symbol of belonging that humans crave beacuse it simply means you are something, somewhere, and somehow the the logic (although illogical) stills resonates as truth. Your MacBeth allusion is most apt, but you haven't really traded a kingdom, nor have you got a horse. That would be a dumb move, methinks. You've got a home, a project, a bond, and maybe, even an income. Of course, you haven't got a kingdom to trade, but you've got moer than a horse. HaHa. Great free verse, full of energy and feeling; feelings that you've shared with me for a while. And I have followed with interest and good wishes to you both.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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You have so much invested in this gamble, haven't you? And yet, you know that by some force you will stumble/bumble through. A house, like a tree, a sacred mountain, an address, is the symbol of belonging that humans crave beacuse it simply means you are something, somewhere, and somehow the the logic (although illogical) stills resonates as truth. Your MacBeth allusion is most apt, but you haven't really traded a kingdom, nor have you got a horse. That would be a dumb move, methinks. You've got a home, a project, a bond, and maybe, even an income. Of course, you haven't got a kingdom to trade, but you've got moer than a horse. HaHa. Great free verse, full of energy and feeling; feelings that you've shared with me for a while. And I have followed with interest and good wishes to you both.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hey Mark. Thanks for the reviewI am happy you picked up on the old richard 111 line...it felt right somehow to me...sort of reminded me to see things in perspective..
Mom is now in the clinic and under better care than we can give her. Hopefully she will come out in a couple months.
So...you have been along for much ofg this ride...thanks for handing me fresh horses when mine were flagging:-)
padumachitta
Comment from kiwisteveh
What a lot of yourself you have poured into this poem. Of course a property purchase is the biggest 'transaction' in most people's lives and consequently the most complex, the most nerve-racking with the potential for much to go wrong - much of this is conveyed in the tension of your poem.
I enjoyed the bookending allusions to the famous Shakespeare speech - given your own twist.
Let us hope that the old house does indeed become a kingdom - it certainly deserves to with all those wonderful aspirations for it!
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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What a lot of yourself you have poured into this poem. Of course a property purchase is the biggest 'transaction' in most people's lives and consequently the most complex, the most nerve-racking with the potential for much to go wrong - much of this is conveyed in the tension of your poem.
I enjoyed the bookending allusions to the famous Shakespeare speech - given your own twist.
Let us hope that the old house does indeed become a kingdom - it certainly deserves to with all those wonderful aspirations for it!
Steve
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hey Steve Thanks for the review and I am glad you liked the twist on good ole Billy:-) padumachitta
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Padumachitta,
firstly congratulations on your purchase... hey the house was calling you... you'd better listen... the universe has a subtle way of making dreams comes true... it's just the timing that doesn't always add up... I'm hoping, praying, meditating and any other positive way I can bring the money needed for your worthy, inspirational dreams... just keep putting your intentions out there, believe and help will come... I believe... so in the mean-time... hug each other a lot, prop up each others fears, hug again and start to chopping that fire wood... it may be a cold winter.
Thanks for sharing your life and dreams with us... seriously, I'm sending you good intentions with everything I can muster.
With our thoughts we create,
a projection of intention,
James xx
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hi Padumachitta,
firstly congratulations on your purchase... hey the house was calling you... you'd better listen... the universe has a subtle way of making dreams comes true... it's just the timing that doesn't always add up... I'm hoping, praying, meditating and any other positive way I can bring the money needed for your worthy, inspirational dreams... just keep putting your intentions out there, believe and help will come... I believe... so in the mean-time... hug each other a lot, prop up each others fears, hug again and start to chopping that fire wood... it may be a cold winter.
Thanks for sharing your life and dreams with us... seriously, I'm sending you good intentions with everything I can muster.
With our thoughts we create,
a projection of intention,
James xx
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hey James. Thanks for the review and good wishes. Your words made me smile, I figure what ever happens, well, I gotta go with it:-)
padumachitta
Comment from chasennov
sonnet contest The Most Important Choice of All.' Rather you than me. Renovation is harder than starting the building from scratch, any day. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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sonnet contest The Most Important Choice of All.' Rather you than me. Renovation is harder than starting the building from scratch, any day. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank for your review...not a sonnet though.. padumachitta
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You are most welcome, Padumachitta.
Comment from Spitfire
I feel your excitement and frustration. Great use of repetition, spacing, parallel structure and playing with word forms: Calling and Big. You must be young to have this kind of energy and hope for the future. Yeap, age has jaded me. Or maybe it's just the demands of being a caregiver. I love that the house talks to you. The house will be your son, daughter, and grounder. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I feel your excitement and frustration. Great use of repetition, spacing, parallel structure and playing with word forms: Calling and Big. You must be young to have this kind of energy and hope for the future. Yeap, age has jaded me. Or maybe it's just the demands of being a caregiver. I love that the house talks to you. The house will be your son, daughter, and grounder. Best of luck.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hey ..Thanks for the golden star...I needed that:-) I am so happy you liked the structure. I wanted it to be like the old house, full of nooks and crannies and hidden stuff behind the walls:-)
I am 55 , my partner 45 and we share a Mom who has bi polar. Mom goes back into the clinic today, so it is a sad and hard time. Parrt of the dream of the house is to have a small suite for her to come to. We are her care givers.
I have chronic phyical stuff...my partner as well...but, it has not stopped me or her...so far.
Part of it for us...Mom does not live with us...that is a whole other kettle of stress and needed energy...
What you do everyday would 'try' the saints...for me, you are an inpsiration. I hope that I can be a supportive and warm and witty as you are under pressure.
padumachitta
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Thanks for sharing your personal life for me. How long have you and your partner been together? A lot or most of the physical stuff is caused by stress. Having to worry about your mother is just that. I'd have a hard time surviving if it weren't for FS--my outlet for writing and for making new friends.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment from l.raven
Hi Padumachitta, I will truly pray for you...and so sorry your mother is still ill..I will pray for you and your home...your poem is very well written...and I love your picture...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hi Padumachitta, I will truly pray for you...and so sorry your mother is still ill..I will pray for you and your home...your poem is very well written...and I love your picture...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hello Linda. Thank you for your review and prayers. Today my Mom goes into a Clinic. It is a hard time for us, she is very, very depressed and anxious. One day she will live with us...part of the stroy of the house.
padumachitta
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you are so very welcome....I will keep her in my prayers...luff
Comment from jmdg1954
padumachitta, not sure which I enjoyed more, your poem or the story reflected in your author notes. After reading your notes, the poem made much more sense as to your references.
Good luck with your home of homes! John
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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padumachitta, not sure which I enjoyed more, your poem or the story reflected in your author notes. After reading your notes, the poem made much more sense as to your references.
Good luck with your home of homes! John
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hi John. Thank you for your review and comments. padumachitta
Comment from bob cullen
I admire people who take on challenges and it would appear you have done just that.
In some senses I guess it's like writing. You don't always know where you're going but my goodness there is a sense of achievement when the task is completed.
Your poem is well written. While I'm a fan of traditional poetry with rhyme and balance, I liked how this was constructed
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I admire people who take on challenges and it would appear you have done just that.
In some senses I guess it's like writing. You don't always know where you're going but my goodness there is a sense of achievement when the task is completed.
Your poem is well written. While I'm a fan of traditional poetry with rhyme and balance, I liked how this was constructed
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hey BobThank you for your review and comments. Yeah, the poem is constructed the way and old house is...nooks and crannies and surprises behind the walls:-) padumachitta
Comment from Ronni
With the gutsy kind of attitude taken regarding this 100
year old house that you yet envision as your Kingdom
and Retreat resource, no doubt you will persevere and
make it a reality yet.
True, you have many ominous obstacles and challenges,
what you are using for your own innate tools are...Will,
determination, reality of risks involved, and assuming
all the sacrifices it will take! With each day passing
using these tools to chip away at the money walled tradesmen
to give you a break, and some surely yet to arrive, hardy
and healthy volunteers to pitch in, all together will
yet bring it to dream and quest come true.
I commend your efforts and immense task, will remember
you in my prayers, and I trust between all laboring here
below, the Divine One surely will lend His Hand from above.
Good bless, and thank you for sharing your venture.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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With the gutsy kind of attitude taken regarding this 100
year old house that you yet envision as your Kingdom
and Retreat resource, no doubt you will persevere and
make it a reality yet.
True, you have many ominous obstacles and challenges,
what you are using for your own innate tools are...Will,
determination, reality of risks involved, and assuming
all the sacrifices it will take! With each day passing
using these tools to chip away at the money walled tradesmen
to give you a break, and some surely yet to arrive, hardy
and healthy volunteers to pitch in, all together will
yet bring it to dream and quest come true.
I commend your efforts and immense task, will remember
you in my prayers, and I trust between all laboring here
below, the Divine One surely will lend His Hand from above.
Good bless, and thank you for sharing your venture.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hello Ronni. Thank you for your review and kind, supportive words. It will be hard work, but in the end a safe and quiet place for people to rest.
padumachitta
Comment from c_lucas
Most old homes have a nick name, "The Money Pit." This is very well written and shows what you are up against. Good luck in achieving your dream.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Most old homes have a nick name, "The Money Pit." This is very well written and shows what you are up against. Good luck in achieving your dream.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hey.Thank you for your review and comments. Well, renting is just giving away money...and right now our mortgage is cheaper than our one room apartment.... padumachitta
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You're welcome.Padumachitta. Charlie
