Be Still
A sonnet61 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That sky! I can see why you were overwhelmed and wrote this lovely Shakespearean Sonnet. I think this style is the nicest. I like the delicate wording and your poem, the warm subtleties in each line. It is a wonderful contest entry and I wish you Good luck! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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That sky! I can see why you were overwhelmed and wrote this lovely Shakespearean Sonnet. I think this style is the nicest. I like the delicate wording and your poem, the warm subtleties in each line. It is a wonderful contest entry and I wish you Good luck! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Sandra for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from LIJ Red
I'm meter deaf. Is this really iambic pentameter every syllable of the way? No matter, you got the rhymes and the but in the right place.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I'm meter deaf. Is this really iambic pentameter every syllable of the way? No matter, you got the rhymes and the but in the right place.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you LIJ for your generous and encouraging review.
Comment from bhogg
A very pleasant read, well written and beautifully presented. So many people cannot see no appreciate the glory that is all around them. Good luck in your contest. Bill
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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A very pleasant read, well written and beautifully presented. So many people cannot see no appreciate the glory that is all around them. Good luck in your contest. Bill
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Bill for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderful entry for this Shakespearean sonnet competition, your sonnet is excellent with a good turn on the ninth line, great rhyming, great use of imagery and beautiful description, good luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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This is a wonderful entry for this Shakespearean sonnet competition, your sonnet is excellent with a good turn on the ninth line, great rhyming, great use of imagery and beautiful description, good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Eric for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
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It was my pleasure my friend
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
This is such a beautiful sonnet. It's more dynamic in its simplicity by the harmonious artwork paired with it. Reading it gives the reader a feeling of calm.
Nicely done, and a great entry. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hi,
This is such a beautiful sonnet. It's more dynamic in its simplicity by the harmonious artwork paired with it. Reading it gives the reader a feeling of calm.
Nicely done, and a great entry. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Jax for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from Tatarka2
That is one of my very favorite Scripture verses. The picture and poem enhance this Scripture so perfectly. My suggestion would be that some of the lines seem too long to flow smoothly with the rest of the poem. For instance, what if you took out the words, "mellow," "gentle" and "whole?" I think the meaning would stay the same but the lines wouldn't be as long, and the poem would still be beautifully descriptive. Just a suggestion.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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That is one of my very favorite Scripture verses. The picture and poem enhance this Scripture so perfectly. My suggestion would be that some of the lines seem too long to flow smoothly with the rest of the poem. For instance, what if you took out the words, "mellow," "gentle" and "whole?" I think the meaning would stay the same but the lines wouldn't be as long, and the poem would still be beautifully descriptive. Just a suggestion.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your generous and encouraging review and suggestions. Great appreciate it.
Comment from acerisestory
This is a beautiful sonnet, Mystery Writer! Your words have a lovely flow, and there's a quiet mellowness to your words.
Your rhyming is perfect, and your meter is right on. You've made great use of alliteration with stillness/sky' lingering/leaves; fall/float; sounds/sand.
I particularly like your last stanza:
"Tonight I'll pray for those who cannot see
the beauty that is ours eternally."
Well done and a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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This is a beautiful sonnet, Mystery Writer! Your words have a lovely flow, and there's a quiet mellowness to your words.
Your rhyming is perfect, and your meter is right on. You've made great use of alliteration with stillness/sky' lingering/leaves; fall/float; sounds/sand.
I particularly like your last stanza:
"Tonight I'll pray for those who cannot see
the beauty that is ours eternally."
Well done and a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from Pullmanspb
I'm uncertain how I can put into words how I liked this poem. It's gentle, confident, in awe of the world, lovely to hear (both in my head and aloud).
Nice, nice job.
Steven
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I'm uncertain how I can put into words how I liked this poem. It's gentle, confident, in awe of the world, lovely to hear (both in my head and aloud).
Nice, nice job.
Steven
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you Steven for your generous and encouraging six star review and good wishes.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Phenomenal. A masterpiece. Your picturw took my breath away, one of mist stunning images of the evening sky.
Your metaphors were asrounding. The use of that psalm was very effective. Excellent turn in the ninth line.
I have only one question: in your sixth line you use "lingering" [leaves]. Isn't "lingering" 3 syllables! If it is, the iambics is off and the line becomes 11 syllables.
The last line of the couplet, at least to me, sounded less original than the rest of your stunning sonnet, but that is just an ibservation. The work is a perfect diamond regardless.
A real jewel in the crown of this contest (smile).
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Phenomenal. A masterpiece. Your picturw took my breath away, one of mist stunning images of the evening sky.
Your metaphors were asrounding. The use of that psalm was very effective. Excellent turn in the ninth line.
I have only one question: in your sixth line you use "lingering" [leaves]. Isn't "lingering" 3 syllables! If it is, the iambics is off and the line becomes 11 syllables.
The last line of the couplet, at least to me, sounded less original than the rest of your stunning sonnet, but that is just an ibservation. The work is a perfect diamond regardless.
A real jewel in the crown of this contest (smile).
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you yeltel for your generous and encouraging six star review.
Comment from JPilcher
Overall presentation is absolutely beautiful. The the illustration, it compliments the title & piece perfectly. The background color makes the image and piece pop even more.
The ending was very cool by the way:
"Tonight I'll pray for those who cannot see
the beauty that is ours eternally."
Well done!! :) Jill P.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Overall presentation is absolutely beautiful. The the illustration, it compliments the title & piece perfectly. The background color makes the image and piece pop even more.
The ending was very cool by the way:
"Tonight I'll pray for those who cannot see
the beauty that is ours eternally."
Well done!! :) Jill P.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you Jill for your generous and encouraging review.
