Be Still
A sonnet61 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Writer
The title drew me into this one. Then the glorious sunset ... then the beauty of your calming words. It is a pity so many miss the beauty in life ... even in times of challenge when being this aware could make such a difference and give something to look forward to when dark weather clears. Though not always as easy done as said. I love the sentiments in your lovely poem and generosity to those who cannot 'be still'. I've enjoyed the elegance of your imagery and the great rhyme. I'm afraid I'm hopeless at meter ... but it seems to me, you have this spot on. :) I expect this to be a contender for the win. I wish you the best of luck. So simple and elegant. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hi Mystery Writer
The title drew me into this one. Then the glorious sunset ... then the beauty of your calming words. It is a pity so many miss the beauty in life ... even in times of challenge when being this aware could make such a difference and give something to look forward to when dark weather clears. Though not always as easy done as said. I love the sentiments in your lovely poem and generosity to those who cannot 'be still'. I've enjoyed the elegance of your imagery and the great rhyme. I'm afraid I'm hopeless at meter ... but it seems to me, you have this spot on. :) I expect this to be a contender for the win. I wish you the best of luck. So simple and elegant. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Lovinia for your generous and encouraging six star review and good wishes. I'm so pleased that you liked this one.
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My pleasure. There were some fine entries ... this one really appealed to me. Good luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
Comment from kiwisteveh
A lovely gentle sonnet depicting the peaceful scene on a fall day, descending into night.
Sonnet structure, rhyme and meter are all good.
Perhaps the theme of the closing couplet is a little 'tacked on', but this remains a strong entry for the contest.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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A lovely gentle sonnet depicting the peaceful scene on a fall day, descending into night.
Sonnet structure, rhyme and meter are all good.
Perhaps the theme of the closing couplet is a little 'tacked on', but this remains a strong entry for the contest.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Steve for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Be Still". This poem is beautiful and so well written. The color combination and the photo art enhance it, which also makes it an outstanding piece of work. Very nice. Carole
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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To the author of "Be Still". This poem is beautiful and so well written. The color combination and the photo art enhance it, which also makes it an outstanding piece of work. Very nice. Carole
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Carole for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a very lovely sonnet from the title to the peripeteia in the third stanza and the closing couplet. The red background is very hard on old eyes though! Good luck in the contest! Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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This is a very lovely sonnet from the title to the peripeteia in the third stanza and the closing couplet. The red background is very hard on old eyes though! Good luck in the contest! Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Nancy for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
Comment from artisart4u
Your poem is beautifully written about being overwhelmed about the beauty of the setting sun.
This definitely is a poem about the beauty of nature.
You can find things to write from sun up to sunset.
Even birds squabbling in a tree while you sit on the park bench reading (humor).
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Your poem is beautifully written about being overwhelmed about the beauty of the setting sun.
This definitely is a poem about the beauty of nature.
You can find things to write from sun up to sunset.
Even birds squabbling in a tree while you sit on the park bench reading (humor).
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your generous and encouraging six star review and good wishes. Sometimes, especially the squabbling birds. haha
Comment from c_lucas
It is a good thing to relax and take in the beauty of God's Cathedral, aka "The Great Outdoors." This is very well written with a smooth flow of wordsm making for a good read.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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It is a good thing to relax and take in the beauty of God's Cathedral, aka "The Great Outdoors." This is very well written with a smooth flow of wordsm making for a good read.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
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You're welcome, JM. Charlie
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel if one takes time there is beauty all around us it is finding the gift of each moment
good imagery
good enjambment through sentences allows flow
good rhyme through verses not forced
good meter
good use "L" "S" "N" consonance
good use "E" assonance
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel if one takes time there is beauty all around us it is finding the gift of each moment
good imagery
good enjambment through sentences allows flow
good rhyme through verses not forced
good meter
good use "L" "S" "N" consonance
good use "E" assonance
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your generous and encouraging review and good wishes.
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most welcome ..SC
Comment from Glasstruth
Twilight is so beautiful, which you've captured in your honesty that's breathtaking. My favorite lines:
"it permeates my soul with each new sigh
like Juliet awaiting Romeo."
Great write! Les
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Twilight is so beautiful, which you've captured in your honesty that's breathtaking. My favorite lines:
"it permeates my soul with each new sigh
like Juliet awaiting Romeo."
Great write! Les
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Les for your generous and encouraging review. Thank you for sharing your favorite lines.
Comment from Charlene0513
Very good description of the night as you ponder what the new dawn of a new day lies in store. Read very smoothly.
Nice simile:the far-off sounds of day become like sand
Charlene
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Very good description of the night as you ponder what the new dawn of a new day lies in store. Read very smoothly.
Nice simile:the far-off sounds of day become like sand
Charlene
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Charlene for your generous and encouraging review.
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is a well written sonnet. I really do like the theme used, but I am wondering about the enjambment throughout. I didn't think this was a characteristic of a sonnet. It almost reads like a free verse, though with excellent rhythm and flow. Nice work!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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This is a well written sonnet. I really do like the theme used, but I am wondering about the enjambment throughout. I didn't think this was a characteristic of a sonnet. It almost reads like a free verse, though with excellent rhythm and flow. Nice work!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you Drew for your generous and encouraging review.
