A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
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Comment from Domino 2
Very interesting and philosophical quote in your notes, Deano.
LOVE the eerie (pretending to be cute) music and masterful artistic presentation.
2nd stanza typo ('monters'), and maybe also consider an alternative rather than repeating 'monsters' from 1st line.
8th line reverse syntax to create the rhyme could perhaps be re-written.
Sorry I'm in such a picky mood this morning - I must have had some bad dreams. ;-)
Really enjoyed the read, my friend.
Cheers, Ray
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Very interesting and philosophical quote in your notes, Deano.
LOVE the eerie (pretending to be cute) music and masterful artistic presentation.
2nd stanza typo ('monters'), and maybe also consider an alternative rather than repeating 'monsters' from 1st line.
8th line reverse syntax to create the rhyme could perhaps be re-written.
Sorry I'm in such a picky mood this morning - I must have had some bad dreams. ;-)
Really enjoyed the read, my friend.
Cheers, Ray
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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No worries, Ray. I'm happy to hear from you, just the same. Hope you get in a better mood later on, LOL.
Thanks again!
~DeanO
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No probs, Deano. 'Demons' works great in place of 'monsters'. Cheers, Ray
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I meant in place of SECOND, 'monsters', as I suggested.
