haiku (ocean currents)
contest entry (4-6-3)14 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, you did it again, Mikey - congratulations (and I can certainly see why - this is fabulous!) I especially loved the horror of that satori - too true!!!
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Wow, you did it again, Mikey - congratulations (and I can certainly see why - this is fabulous!) I especially loved the horror of that satori - too true!!!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your haiku makes a powerful statement. The picture is great. Your few words sum up so much about our current state of affairs in the world. Good job. Congrats on your win.
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Your haiku makes a powerful statement. The picture is great. Your few words sum up so much about our current state of affairs in the world. Good job. Congrats on your win.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
Comment from Lovinia
Congratulations Mikey
A great social statement in so few words. Excellent 'e' assonance and 'r' consonance. -- gives a stronger cadence to your poem when read aloud. Please you enjoyed a win ... even though you had to share the dollars with June. :)))
Warm Regards - Lovi xoxox
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Congratulations Mikey
A great social statement in so few words. Excellent 'e' assonance and 'r' consonance. -- gives a stronger cadence to your poem when read aloud. Please you enjoyed a win ... even though you had to share the dollars with June. :)))
Warm Regards - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
Comment from amada
The line "man's red tide" just blew me away...such wonderful imagery and deep description. Ocean currents, underneath it all, takes such a deadly term.
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The line "man's red tide" just blew me away...such wonderful imagery and deep description. Ocean currents, underneath it all, takes such a deadly term.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
Comment from seaglass
This haiku paints a picture on a deeper level. Man is the most dangerous pestilence of all. And there's is no end to the storms, all blowing in war.
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This haiku paints a picture on a deeper level. Man is the most dangerous pestilence of all. And there's is no end to the storms, all blowing in war.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from Ben Colder
I think this poem will float. Good photo and good wording. Meets the requirements and probably will win. Well done. Shalom.
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I think this poem will float. Good photo and good wording. Meets the requirements and probably will win. Well done. Shalom.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
That's an angry tide and I'd be pooping myself if I was on that boat so it's a good thing I'm not. Great job and good luck in the contest
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That's an angry tide and I'd be pooping myself if I was on that boat so it's a good thing I'm not. Great job and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from Patti R.
What a spectacular painting you've chosen. It really enhances the theme of the haiku. However, the poem does stand alone very well. Good satori.
Good luck.
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What a spectacular painting you've chosen. It really enhances the theme of the haiku. However, the poem does stand alone very well. Good satori.
Good luck.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Wonderful haiku form in perfect count. Allelements present. Exceptional imagery and depth of meaning. Truth put forth conicingly with great force. The winner in my book.
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Wonderful haiku form in perfect count. Allelements present. Exceptional imagery and depth of meaning. Truth put forth conicingly with great force. The winner in my book.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
Comment from rjpurdy
An excellent haiku mystery writer. Your strong descriptors support an excellent satori. "war/red tide" gives the reader an excellent image. Best wishes in the voting. rj
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An excellent haiku mystery writer. Your strong descriptors support an excellent satori. "war/red tide" gives the reader an excellent image. Best wishes in the voting. rj
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
