Long-Armed Band
Rhyming Quatrains13 total reviews
Comment from JW
Ok. This is different.
Though well written, I could not help but wonder what's it's purpose. Is it a prelude to a new story?
Perhaps I need a cup of coffee in order to see it clearer. :-)
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Ok. This is different.
Though well written, I could not help but wonder what's it's purpose. Is it a prelude to a new story?
Perhaps I need a cup of coffee in order to see it clearer. :-)
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Ahh, just a different way of pleading for a peaceful resolution to the conflicts in the world. Take care my friend. Hope you at least holding your own in the war against fleas~Debbie
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Thanks for your concern.
I do have good news. The flea problem is at least 95% gone. Ironically though, because it last for so long - the situation left an unexpected psychological effect that I am having to work on.
I'll PM you a little later about that. :-)
I hope you're having a great day - and smile, even if inside you don't feel like it.
It helps.
JW
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
a wonderful message all wrapped up in a fun way to teach the young and possibly some with their heads stuck in the sand about gun control, the miss-use and the ramification of bad choices where using anything that may harm another human being... fun characters with good messages and very nicely constructed into a learning poem... thank you for sharing this one friend.
With our thoughts we create,
common sense,
James xx
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Hi Debbie,
a wonderful message all wrapped up in a fun way to teach the young and possibly some with their heads stuck in the sand about gun control, the miss-use and the ramification of bad choices where using anything that may harm another human being... fun characters with good messages and very nicely constructed into a learning poem... thank you for sharing this one friend.
With our thoughts we create,
common sense,
James xx
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Dear James just a different way of pleading for a peaceful resolution to the conflicts in the world. Having been involved in a violent crime, I am struggling to realize such crime is real. Take care my friend. Love you, dear friend~Debbie xx
Comment from GracieAnn
Debbie, this is such a fun a a b b rhymed write. It has the western ambiance needed for the continuity. It relays an important message inside a simple package. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Debbie, this is such a fun a a b b rhymed write. It has the western ambiance needed for the continuity. It relays an important message inside a simple package. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Just a different way of pleading for a peaceful resolution to the conflicts in the world. Take care my friend. Hugs, Debbie
Comment from Nosha17
Yes, about time we started telling school age children of the dangers of guns. Cute rhyme which is an effective way to get through to kids and get them the message. Good use of rhyming and cute picture. Enjoyable read, Faye
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Yes, about time we started telling school age children of the dangers of guns. Cute rhyme which is an effective way to get through to kids and get them the message. Good use of rhyming and cute picture. Enjoyable read, Faye
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Just a different way of pleading for a peaceful resolution to the conflicts in the world. Take care my friend. Hugs, Debbie
Comment from mikemagine
Very neat and powerful statement about gun control. Though I tend to lean toward the conservative side, I DO believe that guns need to be tightly controlled. Obv. they're quite dangerous and I don't like the idea of a scene where someone gets drunk, screws around with a gun...shoots and kills someone!
Mike
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Very neat and powerful statement about gun control. Though I tend to lean toward the conservative side, I DO believe that guns need to be tightly controlled. Obv. they're quite dangerous and I don't like the idea of a scene where someone gets drunk, screws around with a gun...shoots and kills someone!
Mike
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Just a different way of pleading for a peaceful resolution to the conflicts in the world. Take care my friend. Hugs, Debbie
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God bless and Happy Holidays, Debbie!
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is really cute. I was teaching a lesson to my first graders about respect and being a good citizen. I mentioned being at a stop light and hearing somebody's music. I asked if that was being respectful of others? They agreed it was not, but one of my little girls said, "But I don't like country music." I wondered about that statement. LOL
You did a great job with your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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This is really cute. I was teaching a lesson to my first graders about respect and being a good citizen. I mentioned being at a stop light and hearing somebody's music. I asked if that was being respectful of others? They agreed it was not, but one of my little girls said, "But I don't like country music." I wondered about that statement. LOL
You did a great job with your poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you, my friend. In light of recent events, I think we need to start an anti-gun message with children~Debbie
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
I love the characters, their names and their descriptions
and I like that you deliver your anti-violence/gun message in an entertaining way :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets
I love the characters, their names and their descriptions
and I like that you deliver your anti-violence/gun message in an entertaining way :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you, my friend. In light of recent events, I think we need to start an anti-gun message with children~Debbie
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Guns would frighten the life out of me. They are illegal in the UK, you won't find gun shops any where here. I think farmers can have them for pest control, but they need a licence and even then the laws make having pretty hard to get. We have gun clubs, but again, I think the guns are kept at the club. Your poem is brilliant to give children the idea it is not clever or big to own a gun. Well done, Debbie. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Guns would frighten the life out of me. They are illegal in the UK, you won't find gun shops any where here. I think farmers can have them for pest control, but they need a licence and even then the laws make having pretty hard to get. We have gun clubs, but again, I think the guns are kept at the club. Your poem is brilliant to give children the idea it is not clever or big to own a gun. Well done, Debbie. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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In my state, pretty much anyone can have a gun and carry it anywhere. Thank you, my friend. In light of recent events, I think we need to start an anti-gun message with children~Debbie
Comment from NurseBarb
Darling little poem, Debbie, a child would be pleased to read and understand with good rhyming and flow and cute image to accompany it. Thank you for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Darling little poem, Debbie, a child would be pleased to read and understand with good rhyming and flow and cute image to accompany it. Thank you for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you, my friend. In light of recent events, I think we need to start an anti-gun message with children~Debbie
Comment from krys123
Debbie;
I truly love you are children's poem is so diverse and well written for a child. It preaches nonviolence and shows the difference between people who do not like guns.
It's rhyming is neither forced nor labored and the words used are very effective in the rhyming. Even the rhyming helps with the rhythmic flow which seems to flow smoothly throughout the writing. The imagery is quite clear and distinct and very expressive and descriptive throughout. Thank you so much for sharing thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Debbie.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Debbie;
I truly love you are children's poem is so diverse and well written for a child. It preaches nonviolence and shows the difference between people who do not like guns.
It's rhyming is neither forced nor labored and the words used are very effective in the rhyming. Even the rhyming helps with the rhythmic flow which seems to flow smoothly throughout the writing. The imagery is quite clear and distinct and very expressive and descriptive throughout. Thank you so much for sharing thank you so much for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Debbie.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you. Given recent events, I am much more harsh on my thinking about guns. And adults are hard to change--children much easier. Have a blessed day~Debbie
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Debbie, yes, children are more influential when it comes to guns and it starts from an early age to change their thinking about them. And you are so sincerely welcome.
Alex
