Lost in Winter's Grey
losing a loved one when your in the winter of life30 total reviews
Comment from krys123
TK;
certainly a sincerely true and clear imagination that's creative and inventive, excellent rhyming(that's neither forced nor labored), outstanding picture that represents and complements the poem, positive descriptive and expressive Imagery (" two rocking chairs on the porch/Covered by a killing frost/They sit in silent empathy/As if they know what I have lost".). These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your poem. In this great imagery you mentioned a loss of a person and make a concrete reference to the seasons to identify with this loss. Excellent concept.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always TK.
Alex
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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TK;
certainly a sincerely true and clear imagination that's creative and inventive, excellent rhyming(that's neither forced nor labored), outstanding picture that represents and complements the poem, positive descriptive and expressive Imagery (" two rocking chairs on the porch/Covered by a killing frost/They sit in silent empathy/As if they know what I have lost".). These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your poem. In this great imagery you mentioned a loss of a person and make a concrete reference to the seasons to identify with this loss. Excellent concept.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always TK.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much Alex. Sorry late in reply but the flu bug has bit us pretty bad and this is first time I have been able to even stand the sound of the keyboard keys clicking
TK
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Below be feeling better TK and you are so sincerely welcome.
Alex
Comment from judiverse
This sad but sweet. Reflections on one's loved ones who've passed on. Excellent title "Lost in Winter's Grey." You do g great job of connecting the passing years with the passing seasons. The two rocking chairs suggest moments shared in the past. Now they're silent, covered with frost. A memorable word picture. Your ABCB rhyme works well throughout. The thought that the loved one may be in a better place really isn't all that comforting sometimes. judi
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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This sad but sweet. Reflections on one's loved ones who've passed on. Excellent title "Lost in Winter's Grey." You do g great job of connecting the passing years with the passing seasons. The two rocking chairs suggest moments shared in the past. Now they're silent, covered with frost. A memorable word picture. Your ABCB rhyme works well throughout. The thought that the loved one may be in a better place really isn't all that comforting sometimes. judi
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks Judi Been down with flu for nearly a week and this is first time been on line to answers my reviews Sorry for the delay
TK
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You're welcome, and hope you're feeling better. No problem about the delay. I'm running behind myself. judi
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh TK That is just beautiful. You should have waited to post tomorrow. I have no six today! This poem touches me because I lost the love of my life as you probably know. Very nice poem. Great imagery. Nancy
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Oh TK That is just beautiful. You should have waited to post tomorrow. I have no six today! This poem touches me because I lost the love of my life as you probably know. Very nice poem. Great imagery. Nancy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much Nancy Sorry the whole house has been down with the nasty flu that is why so long on my reply..
TK
Comment from patcelaw
Autumn is almost over for me and I must face the winter of my life, I don't fear winter coming my way, as a matter of fact it excites me that i am just a few short days, months or years before I will cross into my eternal spring.
Blessings Pat
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Autumn is almost over for me and I must face the winter of my life, I don't fear winter coming my way, as a matter of fact it excites me that i am just a few short days, months or years before I will cross into my eternal spring.
Blessings Pat
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank yOu very much Pat It took longer than norm for my reply as our house has had a visitor called my Flu and he was not welcomed but decided to stay anyway lol
TK
Comment from mommerry
Your poem has met the criteria for a good poem - a message that leads the reader to similar thoughts. I especially liked the reference to the two empty rockers sitting in silent empathy.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Your poem has met the criteria for a good poem - a message that leads the reader to similar thoughts. I especially liked the reference to the two empty rockers sitting in silent empathy.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much mommery..It tool longer than norm for my reply as our house has had a visitor called my Flu and he was not welcomed but decided to stay anyway lol Way to long at that!!
TK
Comment from Pili Pubul
Excellent poem you created , very meaningful images
of chilling winter , sad and grey , reflecting how we feel
when loosing someone we deeply love. Pili
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Excellent poem you created , very meaningful images
of chilling winter , sad and grey , reflecting how we feel
when loosing someone we deeply love. Pili
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
Thank you Pili
It tool longer than norm for my reply as our house has had a visitor called my Flu and he was not welcomed but decided to stay anyway lol
TK
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So sorry to hear about your visitor... You are very welcome, take care.. Pili
Comment from Genya
So much sadness when we lose a loved one. Your poem shows emotion and sadness. Two rocking chairs on the porch.... so visual, I could feel the person sat on the other rocker feeling the sadness and loss of her loved one. What I really know for sure My heart truly misses you. I could feel the tears coming in my eyes when I read this. So sorry I don't have a six left. This really deserved more stars. Genya
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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So much sadness when we lose a loved one. Your poem shows emotion and sadness. Two rocking chairs on the porch.... so visual, I could feel the person sat on the other rocker feeling the sadness and loss of her loved one. What I really know for sure My heart truly misses you. I could feel the tears coming in my eyes when I read this. So sorry I don't have a six left. This really deserved more stars. Genya
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you Genya
It tool longer than norm for my reply as our house has had a visitor called Mr Flu and he was not welcomed but decided to stay anyway lol
TK
Comment from angelface2
Are taking their final bow... Better sentence.
A fear I can not wrought.. incorrect sentence. Wrought is past tense.. meaning formed or made. A fear that I have wrought??
Your poem makes good sense, but leaves something to be desired in the rhythm. LOL. I hope this helps, at least a little bit. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Are taking their final bow... Better sentence.
A fear I can not wrought.. incorrect sentence. Wrought is past tense.. meaning formed or made. A fear that I have wrought??
Your poem makes good sense, but leaves something to be desired in the rhythm. LOL. I hope this helps, at least a little bit. Miss Sally
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Ms Sally I do appreciate you input . The final Bow part I wrote it as One may never see another summer That is why the "perhaps" started the sentence . The wrought part I did have my doubts about Will go over later and see what I can do with it ..Again thank you very much for even taking the time to read and comment.
TK
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You are welcome, TK. Miss Sally
Comment from Wendyanne
Oh how sad this poem makes me feel. Your vividly descriptive imagery certainly made me feel cold. Winter is closing in
I shiver at the thought
Brrrrr!
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Oh how sad this poem makes me feel. Your vividly descriptive imagery certainly made me feel cold. Winter is closing in
I shiver at the thought
Brrrrr!
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much Wendyanne It tool longer than norm for my reply as our house has had a visitor called Mr Flu and he was not welcomed but decided to stay anyway lol Way too long at that
TK
Comment from TAB_that's me
Yes, I suppose that losing the one you are closest too, your love, would be like a grey dark winter. Well said:)
~~teresa~~
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Yes, I suppose that losing the one you are closest too, your love, would be like a grey dark winter. Well said:)
~~teresa~~
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
Thank you so much Teresa It tool longer than norm for my reply as our house has had a visitor called Mr Flu and he was not welcomed but decided to stay anyway lol Way too long at that
TK
