Lost in Winter's Grey
losing a loved one when your in the winter of life30 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
I hope that the summer of our lives exists in constant repetition once we leave this veil of tears at winter's end. To those memories!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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I hope that the summer of our lives exists in constant repetition once we leave this veil of tears at winter's end. To those memories!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you Bill I agree 100% with you on that
TK
Comment from boxergirl
Great job, TK, with this beautifully penned poem about losing a loved one after spending many seasons together. Abcb rhyme scheme is perfect and the imagery of the two empty rocking chairs touches my heart. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Great job, TK, with this beautifully penned poem about losing a loved one after spending many seasons together. Abcb rhyme scheme is perfect and the imagery of the two empty rocking chairs touches my heart. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much BG The big greenie is so appreciated as well..Next one maybe will have a bit more humor with it. No Kleenex needed lol
TK
Comment from rjpurdy
Truly a set of nostalgic quatrains. Nicely done my friend. You have a poem that conjures up so many bitter sweet memories for me. Nice rhythm and cadence. Lovely. rj
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Truly a set of nostalgic quatrains. Nicely done my friend. You have a poem that conjures up so many bitter sweet memories for me. Nice rhythm and cadence. Lovely. rj
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much my friend Many have said same about the conjure aspect of this. Next one will hopefully put a simile where now there is a tear.
TK
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very moving poem with good abcb rhyme throughout. May be biographical or not but it is well written with empathy. It is sad that this is reality. One member of a couple at some time loses the other. It is not an easy pill to swallow - enjoyed the read of a poem that makes us think. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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A very moving poem with good abcb rhyme throughout. May be biographical or not but it is well written with empathy. It is sad that this is reality. One member of a couple at some time loses the other. It is not an easy pill to swallow - enjoyed the read of a poem that makes us think. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much Dorothy for your kind words. This was not a personal reality for me but have seen so many that it has been. So this was written for all those have lost one they loved.
TK
Comment from kanimozhi T
It's a very powerful poem that depicts mortality. The picture is suitable. I like it so much. Especially, the the fist four lines. The image flows with out interruption. Nice comparitions. Thanks for sharing:)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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It's a very powerful poem that depicts mortality. The picture is suitable. I like it so much. Especially, the the fist four lines. The image flows with out interruption. Nice comparitions. Thanks for sharing:)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read this as well as your comments. Though I have never experience that type of lose I have seen many who have So this was for them
TK
Comment from Glasstruth
Written so elegantly with a sorrowful touch. Winter seems like a lonely season, and the two rocking chairs in the 3rd verse spells this out so well:
"Two rocking chairs on the porch
Covered by a chilling frost
They sit in silent empathy
As if they know what I have lost"
Nice rhyming and great flow throughout. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Written so elegantly with a sorrowful touch. Winter seems like a lonely season, and the two rocking chairs in the 3rd verse spells this out so well:
"Two rocking chairs on the porch
Covered by a chilling frost
They sit in silent empathy
As if they know what I have lost"
Nice rhyming and great flow throughout. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much Les. After seeing two empty rocking chairs on a porch could not help myself to write something with them included. They were the inspiration to write this.
TK
Comment from scd41
Your poem is full of poignancy for the loneliness with the passing away of the loved one. Winter is the time when everything turns frigid cold not sparing even the mind. The warmth from the past love can fight out the cold as you have nicely narrated.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Your poem is full of poignancy for the loneliness with the passing away of the loved one. Winter is the time when everything turns frigid cold not sparing even the mind. The warmth from the past love can fight out the cold as you have nicely narrated.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I live in Hawaii now so those cold winters are not as frigid as they used to be.
TK
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh I so needed this when I lost my sons. It is a soothing piece and one of hope and love no matter what person is gone. Absoltely wonderful to read. Easy flow
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Oh I so needed this when I lost my sons. It is a soothing piece and one of hope and love no matter what person is gone. Absoltely wonderful to read. Easy flow
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Barb and I do hope it soothed a bit of your pain.
TK
Comment from kentuckywoman53
This is a truly remarkable composition. It reads smoothly both silently and out loud. The words will tug at the heart strings of everyone who reads it. Those of us who have lost our partner will most likely shed tears for you and for us.
great writing.
Millie
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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This is a truly remarkable composition. It reads smoothly both silently and out loud. The words will tug at the heart strings of everyone who reads it. Those of us who have lost our partner will most likely shed tears for you and for us.
great writing.
Millie
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Millie I thank you so very much for your kind words and for the number 6 you have given me. It inspires me to write more thats for sure.
TK
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You earned the stars. You better not stop writing!!!!!
Comment from nancyjam
This is a poignant poem of loss.
The metaphor of seasons works well
to convey the emotions.
Strong rhyme and even flow.
A beautifully expressed poem. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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This is a poignant poem of loss.
The metaphor of seasons works well
to convey the emotions.
Strong rhyme and even flow.
A beautifully expressed poem. Nancy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Nancy Sometimes writing about what others have been through you find out just how many of those out there had/have the same pain.
TK
