Whisper
spiritual free verse75 total reviews
Comment from amada
This is very beautiful...I love the implication that we can hear God in the song of a bird and the flight of a butterfly. Wonderful expressions.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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This is very beautiful...I love the implication that we can hear God in the song of a bird and the flight of a butterfly. Wonderful expressions.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much:)
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Comment from Eternal Muse
An uplifting and soothing spiritual piece. Loved the artistic presentation and picture. Your repeating lines work very wgfectively to create the mood.
A delightful poem.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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An uplifting and soothing spiritual piece. Loved the artistic presentation and picture. Your repeating lines work very wgfectively to create the mood.
A delightful poem.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
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Thank you very much:)
Comment from bob cullen
I love reading the different ways people on Fanstory offer praise to the Almighty.
It really is moving to witness such reverent expressions of Faith.
In regard to this poem I could find no flaws, great work
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I love reading the different ways people on Fanstory offer praise to the Almighty.
It really is moving to witness such reverent expressions of Faith.
In regard to this poem I could find no flaws, great work
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
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Thanks so much bob:)
Comment from ravim
This is a very sweet poem. Sweet in the sense that you take the Lord as someone very loving and close to you. That "tell, me, tell me" gives that effect. I don't know the purpose of Lord, Lord repetition. And the last line should have been 'Lord, I am yours'.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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This is a very sweet poem. Sweet in the sense that you take the Lord as someone very loving and close to you. That "tell, me, tell me" gives that effect. I don't know the purpose of Lord, Lord repetition. And the last line should have been 'Lord, I am yours'.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
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Thank you for the positive review and suggestions:)
Comment from Lulube
What a lovely heartfelt poemly prayer. You can tell that you really have expressed it from your thoughts and heart. I'm sure that your prayers have/will be heard.
the first verse has a rhyme in it but not the following ones. so some suggestions if you'd like to keep the format going
or the flight of a butterfly
To hear your message I'd like to try
or in a cloud you will show
it is you I long to know
soften my heart, ignite my mind
I am yours, dear Lord, my divine
lulube
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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What a lovely heartfelt poemly prayer. You can tell that you really have expressed it from your thoughts and heart. I'm sure that your prayers have/will be heard.
the first verse has a rhyme in it but not the following ones. so some suggestions if you'd like to keep the format going
or the flight of a butterfly
To hear your message I'd like to try
or in a cloud you will show
it is you I long to know
soften my heart, ignite my mind
I am yours, dear Lord, my divine
lulube
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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I prefer free verse instead of rhyme. Free verse allows more writer creativity and can have some occasional rhyme. Thanks though for the review and suggestions:)
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welcome, couldn't help but suggest.
lulube
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Just to let you know that I got about 10 of this reply from you.
It's happened before but you may want to do a clean on your computer for viruses and such.
lulube
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I thought the repetitive words in your review pulled the piece together like a conversation. It sounded like a love story until the end where it became obvious you were chatting with God. This one made me think. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I thought the repetitive words in your review pulled the piece together like a conversation. It sounded like a love story until the end where it became obvious you were chatting with God. This one made me think. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
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Thank you Kiwi:)
Comment from LIJ Red
I'm sleepy. Been listening to the Ferguson show. Sorry, your free verse is excellent, and right now, I can't see a thing I'd change...
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I'm sleepy. Been listening to the Ferguson show. Sorry, your free verse is excellent, and right now, I can't see a thing I'd change...
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
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Thanks so much:)
Comment from Malerie
I really like this piece, it is so heartfelt and evokes emotions of peace and joy. I like the title and the last stanza:
"Open my eyes, wake up my ears
soften my heart, ignite my mind.
I am yours Lord "
This is beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I really like this piece, it is so heartfelt and evokes emotions of peace and joy. I like the title and the last stanza:
"Open my eyes, wake up my ears
soften my heart, ignite my mind.
I am yours Lord "
This is beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Starlight's Edge
Beautiful poem,
It flows very smoothly, beautiful words and with a message that is filled with faith, where you expose your soul and the need to heal through God.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Beautiful poem,
It flows very smoothly, beautiful words and with a message that is filled with faith, where you expose your soul and the need to heal through God.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the great review:)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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You're welcome. I've received 6 replies from you :)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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Thanks for the great review:)
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I sent one reply. It happens to me too. Getting several replies or message from one person. Must be a FS glitch.
Comment from DR DIP
TAB IS YOU
TAB_ THAT's ME
FAB IS YOU
THAT'S HOW IT BE
lol I actually like the poem I like the repeat of TELL ME TELL ME I am not a religious person but I still appreciate and respect one's beliefs
thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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TAB IS YOU
TAB_ THAT's ME
FAB IS YOU
THAT'S HOW IT BE
lol I actually like the poem I like the repeat of TELL ME TELL ME I am not a religious person but I still appreciate and respect one's beliefs
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
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Thank you for your respective review:)
