Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

strong use of rhyming couplets in your quatrain poem
intense expression of soulful emotion
good assonance in no hope
and in broken/grown
strong emotional appeal with a message that I'm sure many readers can relate to
Brooke

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Well I can tell you for a fact, a lot of people on FS have already told me how much they can relate to this piece, so I couldn't agree with you more on that front!! ;) Thanks for the review!! Much appreciated!!!

Comment from crzypnter

Exceptional

I think you did a wonderful job of explaining the daily issues of mental illness, The struggle within to continue or not. To be brave enough to conquer something that most do not have even have a clue because of the false face that has to be put on in society so your not labeled. Once that happens you will always have that label follow you. Really like the last stanza. August

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Thank you!!! This means ALOT!!!!! <3

reply by crzypnter on 21-Nov-2014

Any time I am glad that your saving yourself ever need someone to talk to you know where im at August :)<3

Comment from gypsymoth

Excellent

That's the most important thing to realize one can be
saved only if they want to save themself. You summed it up well. Good luck in the contest.

Gypsymoth

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Thanks!! Much appreciated!!

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Jill this is a beautiful poem in a sad way, but spells out how much alike our lives have been. I just think we were meant to meet here Blessing my dear friend, blessings. Patricia

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 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Thanks Pat!! That's exactly what my gut told me too!! ;) <3 Jill