Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

A horror acrostic; who knew? A very chilling write, especially with the creepy dripping in the background. "Although I'll always stay a child." I'm assuming this is figurative, not literal. The thought of a child vampyre is almost too much! Loved your choice of spelling; so New Age! :D

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Thanks, Green Lake Girl, and you're free to interpret this any way you like, as far as the being a child part goes, if it will help, LOL...

Glad you liked the overall presentation.

Thanks a bunch.:}

reply by Green Lake Girl on 21-Nov-2014

I'm sticking with the figurative, I can live with that. LOL

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

It's probably best, heh-heh... ;)

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Looking very scary, this one, d.
The image set-up is brilliant.
Love the way you've turned a damned acrostic into a palatable pool of poetry
Wonderful exposition of a Vampire's life in verse. I wonder how reliable the data is on those particular lives LOL
Your language is wonderfully evocative of scenario and time. Loved the last two lines
One small problem; the font is very difficult to decipher in some parts. I have good eyesight.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Thank you very much, Mark, I have made a few changes. I hope it is much easier now to read, my friend.

I appreciate you making me aware of that. If it is hard to read for you, than it most probably is for others as well.

Thanks again!

reply by mfowler on 21-Nov-2014

A lot better. You should scare the old folk a little more easily now.

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Ha-hah! Let's hope so...:}

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I started to criticize the spelling of "vampyre" in the acrostic, but I looked it up and found that it can be spelled both ways. I do notice, though, that it's spelled one way in the title and another in the acrostic and think probably it should be consistent. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

You're right of course, Jeanie. This misspelling in the title was an oversight on my part. It has been corrected now, and thanks for pointing that out to me.

I sincerely appreciate your review. :)

reply by Jeanie Mercer on 21-Nov-2014

'Scuse me for nagging, but it's still spelled "vampire" in the first line of the poem. (Old Eagle Eye here.)

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

I can't understand that, Jeanie. I've corrected it twice already.

Oh man, dang computers sometimes!!!

reply by Jeanie Mercer on 21-Nov-2014

Sometimes after I edit I forget to click on "save." Dang these literal-minded computers!

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

:}

Well the good news is that it is corrected now.

I'm not so sure there's any bad news...

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a brilliant entry! the imagery is powerful and vivid. the background enhances the eerie atmosphere of the poem. the rhythm and rhyme are both spot on.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thank you, Rebekka, I'm really happy that you enjoyed this. Thanks for the excellent R&R and the five, blood-red stars! :}

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

This looks like familiar work that I quite enjoy.

Great formatting and presentation for this great poem, depicting a vampire at his best! (*,*)

Cool piece of work all around, right down the dripping blood as the end.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thanx, Jax. Glad you liked it. :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

There's only one person clever enough for this creation, brilliant acrostic, in Rhyme no less, a difficult project to say the least, you are limited to the initial letter! I think this has to be a contender in this difficult to win contest, you win a few of these, but good luck in the comp. This worthy entry is a good chance, great rhyming, eloquent language, well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thanks, Roy, I'm very happy you think so, my friend. As always, your reviews and comments are very encouraging, and I appreciate them most sincerely.

Thanks again! :}

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

gorgeous presentation of your poem
I like the old spelling :-)
strong use of rhyme
good alliteration in survival at stake
Yolks placed on this heart - Yokes
I like the proximate rhyme of assuage/graves
great mood-creating word choices - eerie stuff
Brooke

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thanks, Brooke, I made the quick switch between yolk/yoke. I'm happy you liked the presentation. I've had this one written (with "yolk", unfortunately, LOL) for about a month now. I thought this would be as good a time as any to show it.

Thanks again. Much obliged. :}

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I like this old fashioned spelling....Yolks? Strange choice of words....

Vermin ...one who's most reviled....favorite line

Well done.....

God bless

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 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thanks, kiwijenny. I took care of the yolk/yoke thing, LOL...

I appreciate your review, as always. :)

Comment from simplyteresa

Excellent

This is a very unique and creative Acrostic Poem. I'm not a huge vampire fan of sorts, but I can truly appreciate your work. It is very original, especially the use of the older spelling. I'm very interested to see after the contest who you are, as I would like to read more.

I can tell you took great care in the entire art of your work, the presentation was as creative and artistic as your words.

I wish you the best in the contest.

Teresa

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 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Teresa, and I'm glad you enjoyed the presentation. The poem I've had written for over a month now, so I felt this was as good a place as any to get some feedback on it.

Again, thanks for your complimentary & encouraging review.:}