Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Being a knight in shining armour can be an exhausting business! How real the imagination of a child can be and how well your poem captures that reality. There is always room for more crusading Knights in this world to slay our monsters.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Tony, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from JPilcher

Exceptional

"For he was tucked in bed." - BRILLIANT!! The pic to me was adorable as it was, but I knew it still had to be tied in with Dragons somehow. That was the fun part, waiting to see just how, and you totally nailed this perfectly with a grand ending!! Nice work!!! <3 Jill

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Jill, thank you so much, my encouraging friend :-) Brooke

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Ha, ha, this was really cute. I think this is the imagenery world of every little boy, or it was mine. Your poem reall ycaptures that wonderful fantasy world of a child. The rhymes are perfect and they really exspell all the thrill of childhood dreams, and the ending was so funny and so typical. Great stuff there, Brooke.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

sibhus, thank you so much for your kind review :-) I'm glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke

Comment from Chrisfiore

Exceptional

Greetings adewpearl,

This is an exceptional little write and a perfect bedtime story. I love the picture that accompanies it. You have weaved a wonderful tale that sets ones fancy to the Neverlands. A pleasure to read and critique. ;) Chrisfiore

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Chrisfiore, thank you so much for this generous and thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

I must say Brooke..I certainly got into the perfect rhythm of this one... The knight certainly wasn't little Jackie Paper that's for sure!! lol

THE QUEEN OF ABCB rhyme scheme strikes again!
Just a question? Is Sawyer you only grandchild..or is he just your favourite?(english spelling not American pseudo spelling) YOUR Spell check is a joke lol.

Nice use of proximate rhyme with 'steps' and 'depths'
yep definitely a keeper for your kiddies book of adewpearlers!!

dip

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

LOL - he is the only one. Even if I had a favorite among several I would never write ALL my poems about one kid and never about the others. That would just be cruel! :-) Thanks so much, dip, for your thoughtful response to this poem. I'm glad the cadence works for you :-) Brooke

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

My second son, Jeff always slept with his butt in the air. He would fall asleep with me rubbing it. He's also my stinker, even at 34 years old. I still love him. LOL. I enjoyed reading your poem.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Barbara, I know from relatives that I slept that way as did Sawyer's mom and Uncle Eric - wonder if it's genetic LOL
Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from Deniz22

Exceptional

Even heroes have to get their sleep when and where they can. Having slayed a few dragons I can relate to Sawyer, especially in this nap business...great job, per usual. Dennis

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Dennis, for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

HAHAHAHAHA!!! <<(this for the picture - my nephew used to sleep like that too.)

Now for that stupendous, adventurous poem: WOW!!!! LOVED it! :0)

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Every kid in my family has slept that way, including me LOL Thanks so much for your generous rating and encouraging comments, Dawn :-) Brooke

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Every kid in my family has slept that way, including me LOL Thanks so much for your generous rating and encouraging comments, Dawn :-) Brooke

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

LOL. Love the ending. It was quite a surprise, but then he needed his rest. Nice storytelling. Another great poem for children. Wonder if you've read any of your poems to Sawyer? Great job! Les

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Les :-) I'm going to try reading some of them to him next month when I visit him. Brooke :-)

reply by Glasstruth on 22-Nov-2014

Let me know if he enjoys it?

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Young Lancelot slaying Dragon's in his sleep. I really like how you saved the reveal until the end though we knew what was going on due to the photo. My son used to sleep butt in the air. I think it might have to do with slaying dragons with their own, personal napalm lol.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, ravenblack - glad it brings back good memories :-) Brooke