Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To adewpearl,
This would have been a great example of how dragons and monsters collide on Hallowe'en night. The tenacity and brute force are mighty indeed.
A few areas of alliteration: eg.silver swords
Charlene

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Charlene :-) Brooke

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

And then from the depths of the ocean
Came a startling appealing commotion
For though most fiery dragons were tough
There emerged a sweet one name Puff.

Puff came to the knight in his sleep
Counting dragons instead of white sheep
And though his survival was chancy,
He tickled the young knight's fancy.

The sleeping night woke up with a start
And found Puff ensconced in his heart
Most love at first sight isn't true
But Puff and the knight's only grew.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Pyrrho, thank so much for your thoughtful poetic response to my poem. I'm honored :-) Brooke

Comment from ravim

Excellent

More like a nursery rhyme, this flows like a child's fantasy. The photo is stunning and complements your story very well. I enjoyed this light poem very much.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thank you so much, ravim :-) Brooke

Comment from tdragonfly

Excellent

But of course it is a position fitting for a knight who has been fighting dragons. The poem reminds us of the imagination of that of little knights. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

tdragonfly, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I like the contrast in the heroic dreams of the little dragon slayer with the charming photo while he sleeps. And I love the picture - that's the position my children often slept in. Before I had children, I pictured babies as sleeping angelically on their backs with covers tucked neatly their chins, but the rump in the air was reality. Love, Jeanie

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Yeah, kids come into the world and disabuse us of all those silly fantasies. ;-) Brooke

Comment from marijmd

Excellent

Sleeping butt up, too funny.
All that hard work made the knight awful tired - good thing he managed to accomplish so much before nap time.
:) Maria

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Maria - yep, he's cute even when sound asleep :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Oh my, only the Cute Little One can manage to sleep like that :) Oh, and my one dog :) By the way, I love dragons. I plan a series of books based on dragons :) This is well written as always.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

What a laughable sleep position. Another delightful read-aloud. Love the visuals of circles of waves and flame, the knight with silver swords forcing them to flee. I'd be exhausted too. :-)

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014

Spitfire, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Brooke, this is another great story for the children's book. You have a wonderful imagination. I love the little 'butt' picture. It reminds me of my Jayme. He fell asleep on the bottom step on the way to his bed with his pacifier in his mouth, when he was about two years old. You just gotta love those grandkids!! Very cute. Carole

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Carole, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

This is the photo our hero will hold against you when he grows up! LOL I enjoyed your charming story, alliteration and rhymes--it's what dreams are made of no doubt! Hugs- Joan

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014

Thank you, Joan, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke