When Dragons Sailed the Skyways
a story poem in 7/6/8/6 meter142 total reviews
Comment from evilynne
A delightful childhood fantasy at our heroes bedtime. The picture of Sawyer is delightful. I am sure he is slaying dragons in his dreams.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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A delightful childhood fantasy at our heroes bedtime. The picture of Sawyer is delightful. I am sure he is slaying dragons in his dreams.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Evi, thank you so much for your generous six stars, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
LOL, superb story tale and our hero picture, exhausted after
brave battles sleeping butt up... Love it. Perfect style, fabulous
images, armed with just two swords the skyways saved..... Pili
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LOL, superb story tale and our hero picture, exhausted after
brave battles sleeping butt up... Love it. Perfect style, fabulous
images, armed with just two swords the skyways saved..... Pili
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome. ;:--). Pili
Comment from wtwb
Beautiful poem. The rhythm and imagery are excellent. I like the conclusion: would have loved to have been read this poem as a child before drifting off to sleep...and then dream of slaying dragons and monsters.
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Beautiful poem. The rhythm and imagery are excellent. I like the conclusion: would have loved to have been read this poem as a child before drifting off to sleep...and then dream of slaying dragons and monsters.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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wtwb, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Cute photo, Brooke.
I'd be happy to be able to GET in that position, let alone SLEEP in it. :-)
Great fun tale of the Knight and the dragons, though I wound have preferred the dragons to have won.
Anyway, the 'hero' could have saved himself the trouble by ALLOWING the tides to 'rise higher', as they would have then doused the town's fire. MWAHA.
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Cute photo, Brooke.
I'd be happy to be able to GET in that position, let alone SLEEP in it. :-)
Great fun tale of the Knight and the dragons, though I wound have preferred the dragons to have won.
Anyway, the 'hero' could have saved himself the trouble by ALLOWING the tides to 'rise higher', as they would have then doused the town's fire. MWAHA.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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LOL, Ray :-) I'll advise Sawyer for his next battle :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
This mirrors the gods of India and their global battles. I still have those conquering dreams, but usually lose a sword or have an untied shoe. Perfect photo.
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This mirrors the gods of India and their global battles. I still have those conquering dreams, but usually lose a sword or have an untied shoe. Perfect photo.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Oh, the heroic deed performed by little boys! So glad your brave knight is getting his rest. There will be more dragons to slay tomorrow - or other dire quests to undertake. Beautifully done, Brooke! :) Nancy
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Oh, the heroic deed performed by little boys! So glad your brave knight is getting his rest. There will be more dragons to slay tomorrow - or other dire quests to undertake. Beautifully done, Brooke! :) Nancy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Nancy, for your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
an interesting and dramatically told little story, but the cute part is the surprise ending relating it directly to the child. Very clever Brooke. Kenny
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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an interesting and dramatically told little story, but the cute part is the surprise ending relating it directly to the child. Very clever Brooke. Kenny
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ekim777
It sounds all very medieval replete with the legendary monster, the symbol of evil and fiery destruction; something out of hell. There is an innocence about it all. God is in his heaven. All is right with the world. The innocence arises from humanity itself. How different to the monsters that God sent forth to cower the worthy Job. Who of course was redeemed though he was no innocent. But his success paved the way for the coming of Christ. This must have been the second coming. I suppose mankind does progress. Meanwhile our poet has presented us with a charming poem that is not without depth. -EKim777
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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It sounds all very medieval replete with the legendary monster, the symbol of evil and fiery destruction; something out of hell. There is an innocence about it all. God is in his heaven. All is right with the world. The innocence arises from humanity itself. How different to the monsters that God sent forth to cower the worthy Job. Who of course was redeemed though he was no innocent. But his success paved the way for the coming of Christ. This must have been the second coming. I suppose mankind does progress. Meanwhile our poet has presented us with a charming poem that is not without depth. -EKim777
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Ekim, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
Every now and then, I have to go the big six on one of your fabulous poems. (I probably could use them all up on you each week, actually). This one grabbed my attention with its fabulous energy and terrific fantasy elements. The knight of the sleepy night, slays the enemy with two silver swords, but with the humility of the knights of old, fails to accept the plaudits of the crowd. He's neatly tucked away in bed catching z' because its all in his head. Clever, delightful ending to top off agreat poem.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Every now and then, I have to go the big six on one of your fabulous poems. (I probably could use them all up on you each week, actually). This one grabbed my attention with its fabulous energy and terrific fantasy elements. The knight of the sleepy night, slays the enemy with two silver swords, but with the humility of the knights of old, fails to accept the plaudits of the crowd. He's neatly tucked away in bed catching z' because its all in his head. Clever, delightful ending to top off agreat poem.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Mark, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
Brooke your imagination runs wild again
your words allow the reader to see and feel the fight of the knight to free the green land of dragons and monsters
good visual imagery
good enjambment through sentences to allow flow
good rhyme through verses
good alliteration in
sailed, skywards
swam, sea
green, green
far, from,
breathe, breath
swished, scaly
silver, swords
saved, skyward
good use "T" "L" consonance
good use "E" assonance
your verbs bring it to life
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Brooke your imagination runs wild again
your words allow the reader to see and feel the fight of the knight to free the green land of dragons and monsters
good visual imagery
good enjambment through sentences to allow flow
good rhyme through verses
good alliteration in
sailed, skywards
swam, sea
green, green
far, from,
breathe, breath
swished, scaly
silver, swords
saved, skyward
good use "T" "L" consonance
good use "E" assonance
your verbs bring it to life
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Smoothiecool, thank you for your attentive review :-) Brooke
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most welcome...SC <:> Faye
