When Dragons Sailed the Skyways
a story poem in 7/6/8/6 meter142 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi Brooke, this is a perfect poem on absolutely perfect meter, the rhyming as we have come to expect is spot on as is the rhythm and the smooth flow, great picture of Sawyer asleep.
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Hi Brooke, this is a perfect poem on absolutely perfect meter, the rhyming as we have come to expect is spot on as is the rhythm and the smooth flow, great picture of Sawyer asleep.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome Brooke.
Comment from Leineco
Oh the Power of Imagination
when wielded by a child!
The haunting realization
that once we too were wild -
slaying dragons by the dozens,
marshaling troops against zombies
rescuing maidens from dungeons,
Gulliver ruling o'er pygmies. . .
Perhaps that's why we write now -
a way to embrace tamed fantasy
to climb back onto the bough
of gallantry and fancy :-)
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Oh the Power of Imagination
when wielded by a child!
The haunting realization
that once we too were wild -
slaying dragons by the dozens,
marshaling troops against zombies
rescuing maidens from dungeons,
Gulliver ruling o'er pygmies. . .
Perhaps that's why we write now -
a way to embrace tamed fantasy
to climb back onto the bough
of gallantry and fancy :-)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Leineco, I so appreciate your thoughtful poetic response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Brooke,
Pix like this one are just priceless! Your wrote the perfect poem to go with it too.
Way to go Grandma.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
Pix like this one are just priceless! Your wrote the perfect poem to go with it too.
Way to go Grandma.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Jax :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
All safe and tucked in bed, exhausted from dueling with the sea and the dragons. Great job with imagery by using strong verbs such as "swished their scaly tails" and "slashing through the rising waves". All good! 8)
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All safe and tucked in bed, exhausted from dueling with the sea and the dragons. Great job with imagery by using strong verbs such as "swished their scaly tails" and "slashing through the rising waves". All good! 8)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Alan K Pease
It is a children's poem turning toward the adults who read with their own experiences with dragons and monsters. Nothing suceeds like success although the hero may toss about in his nighttime visions.
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It is a children's poem turning toward the adults who read with their own experiences with dragons and monsters. Nothing suceeds like success although the hero may toss about in his nighttime visions.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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Alan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved the whimsy of this one, the picture, and the way it's written on two levels; first, the story, then the reveal - that's it's a little boy's fantasy. I think this one belongs in that book you're going to publish. Now, when was that, again???
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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I loved the whimsy of this one, the picture, and the way it's written on two levels; first, the story, then the reveal - that's it's a little boy's fantasy. I think this one belongs in that book you're going to publish. Now, when was that, again???
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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:-) Thank you, my encouraging friend Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
Ha ha! Your last stanza made me laugh, Brooke. I assumed that's a picture of Sawyer all snuggled in for the night :)
I love your poem, as I do all of them. I particularly like your title: When Dragons Sailed the Skyways." You've used wonderful alliteration, and your abcb rhyming, both perfect and proximate, is well done.
Thanks for sharing yet another fabulous story in a poem, Brooke. Take care. Alana
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Ha ha! Your last stanza made me laugh, Brooke. I assumed that's a picture of Sawyer all snuggled in for the night :)
I love your poem, as I do all of them. I particularly like your title: When Dragons Sailed the Skyways." You've used wonderful alliteration, and your abcb rhyming, both perfect and proximate, is well done.
Thanks for sharing yet another fabulous story in a poem, Brooke. Take care. Alana
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Alana, thank you so much - yep, that's Sawyer in his favorite sleep pose :-) Brooke
Comment from Drew Delaney
Nice poem with good second line rhyming
Nice rhythm
Subject is what most kids enjoy such as dragons , knights and monsters
Nice picture of Sawyer with butt in air
Most children sleep uncovered. LOL
Drew xx
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Nice poem with good second line rhyming
Nice rhythm
Subject is what most kids enjoy such as dragons , knights and monsters
Nice picture of Sawyer with butt in air
Most children sleep uncovered. LOL
Drew xx
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Drew, thank you :-) Sawyer always has his sleep bag, and he is the planet's best baby sleeper - Miranda combines all sorts of rituals like drawing the curtains, putting the white noise machine on, putting him in that sleeping bag - and he goes to bed with no fuss, falls right to sleep and wakes up twelve hours later like clockwork. :-) Brooke
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh this is so cute Brooke! Quite an adventure for such a little guy!
Love the picture! I used to watch my son play with different toys and wonder what was going through his mind as he played.
He was always very busy. LOL I do so enjoy your poems.xx Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Oh this is so cute Brooke! Quite an adventure for such a little guy!
Love the picture! I used to watch my son play with different toys and wonder what was going through his mind as he played.
He was always very busy. LOL I do so enjoy your poems.xx Nancy
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
This is one he will have a chuckle about when he gets bigger. Knights have to sleep, too! I loved your knight's tale, I've just written one which will be posting in a day or two. Not a bit like yours, though! Great story line and rhymes. Faye
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This is one he will have a chuckle about when he gets bigger. Knights have to sleep, too! I loved your knight's tale, I've just written one which will be posting in a day or two. Not a bit like yours, though! Great story line and rhymes. Faye
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
