When Dragons Sailed the Skyways
a story poem in 7/6/8/6 meter142 total reviews
Comment from NadineM
Don't you just love the butt in the air sleeping pictures all kids pose for?!! Haha...
This was another cute poem about slaying dragons and monsters where I could see your Sawyer battling and of course WINNING!! These "Sawyer-inspired" poems will make a wonderful book and keepsake for him! Wow. Grandma LOVES her little man.
Great rhyming and rhythmic message here in this poem. Vivid imagery and alliteration added to this already playful poem. I think we know where Sawyer gets his imagination!! (I know his parents are creative too, but Grandma holds the pen!)
Thanks for sharing this with me.
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Don't you just love the butt in the air sleeping pictures all kids pose for?!! Haha...
This was another cute poem about slaying dragons and monsters where I could see your Sawyer battling and of course WINNING!! These "Sawyer-inspired" poems will make a wonderful book and keepsake for him! Wow. Grandma LOVES her little man.
Great rhyming and rhythmic message here in this poem. Vivid imagery and alliteration added to this already playful poem. I think we know where Sawyer gets his imagination!! (I know his parents are creative too, but Grandma holds the pen!)
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Nadine - yep, every kid in our family over the generations has done the little butt in the air thing. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Brooke this is a delightful children's story written in poetry style. Children seem to love dragon stories so I'm sure they would enjoy this. I could picture the scenes in my mind. Well done.
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Hi Brooke this is a delightful children's story written in poetry style. Children seem to love dragon stories so I'm sure they would enjoy this. I could picture the scenes in my mind. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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Wendyanne, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this post. We all have slayed dragons and monsters when we were young. I wish I could go back and do it all over again.
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This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this post. We all have slayed dragons and monsters when we were young. I wish I could go back and do it all over again.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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Tomes, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from krys123
Brooke,
brilliantly clever inventive and creative imagination,
humorous picture, tactful alliterations ("sale the sky- ways" and "green green" and "swish their scaly" and "silver swords" and "ready to be read"),
outstanding descriptive and expressive imagery: "As flames were growing hotter and waves were rising high"...and "Great monsters soon were racing to hide in the ocean depths, and any Dragon still alive dragged off with limping steps.", These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your poem.
An excellent written fairy tale that I enjoyed reading very much as it showed your mastery in writing the rhythm, tempo and meter along with your rhyming.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
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Brooke,
brilliantly clever inventive and creative imagination,
humorous picture, tactful alliterations ("sale the sky- ways" and "green green" and "swish their scaly" and "silver swords" and "ready to be read"),
outstanding descriptive and expressive imagery: "As flames were growing hotter and waves were rising high"...and "Great monsters soon were racing to hide in the ocean depths, and any Dragon still alive dragged off with limping steps.", These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your poem.
An excellent written fairy tale that I enjoyed reading very much as it showed your mastery in writing the rhythm, tempo and meter along with your rhyming.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Alex, thank you so much for your thoughtful analysis and kind wishes :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Peace be with you always
Alex
Comment from Eternal Muse
Most enjoyable, Brooke, and I love a picture of Sawyer! This poem had a ring of "Puff, the magic dragon lived by the sea" theme (smile). Great rhymes, meter, flow, metaphors. A wonderful read for kids from 3 to 80.
Thank you for the treat.
From the canyons, love, Y.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Most enjoyable, Brooke, and I love a picture of Sawyer! This poem had a ring of "Puff, the magic dragon lived by the sea" theme (smile). Great rhymes, meter, flow, metaphors. A wonderful read for kids from 3 to 80.
Thank you for the treat.
From the canyons, love, Y.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Yelena, thank you so much - I don't think would be happy about all the slain dragons in this one. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from rjpurdy
WHEW! Sounds like a long day at the office. I am eager to take your class Brooke, so I can become a better critic for one thing. But what is there to critique? Your standard of excellence is far beyond my meager knowledge. However, I do know what satisfies me and your poetry always fills the bill.
Thank you Brooke. Rod
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WHEW! Sounds like a long day at the office. I am eager to take your class Brooke, so I can become a better critic for one thing. But what is there to critique? Your standard of excellence is far beyond my meager knowledge. However, I do know what satisfies me and your poetry always fills the bill.
Thank you Brooke. Rod
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - another great poem from you in good abcb rhyme form. A great story for children and I like the way you don't compromise the use of good language terms to suit the children. Children are quite capable of learning good intelligent words. I like that the knight could not be found - did they look under the covers for that body there - could it be the knight LOL. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Brooke - another great poem from you in good abcb rhyme form. A great story for children and I like the way you don't compromise the use of good language terms to suit the children. Children are quite capable of learning good intelligent words. I like that the knight could not be found - did they look under the covers for that body there - could it be the knight LOL. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
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I couldn't agree more, Dorothy - that is precisely how I built my vocabulary as a child - reading a new word and asking what it meant or looking it up when I got a little older, and I LOVED learning some new word - it made me feel so smart and grown up :-) Thanks so much for your thoughtful review. :-) Brooke
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Hi Brooke - I remember vividly running home from school - I was about 6 years old - unable to contain myself. Couldn't wait to tell my Mum that I could spell the word 'mountain'. Strange, but I can still see myself running up the back lane to our house desperate to tell Mum that. Dorothy x
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
...I don't blame him. Slaying dragons is a nasty business and really takes it out of you, lol.
This would have been a great story in a poem entry...too bad there isn't one handy.
I enjoyed the solid rhyme and wonderful delivery in this tale of a knights fight of freedom for his kingdom...great read.
Best wishes, Bill
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Hi Brooke,
...I don't blame him. Slaying dragons is a nasty business and really takes it out of you, lol.
This would have been a great story in a poem entry...too bad there isn't one handy.
I enjoyed the solid rhyme and wonderful delivery in this tale of a knights fight of freedom for his kingdom...great read.
Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Bill, thanks so much - many times I post poems when no appropriate contest is available - I'm just no good at holding onto a poem until I can enter a contest with it :-) Brooke
Comment from simplyteresa
I always look forward with great joy to your next poem, for I'm confident that it will uplift my day and bring a smile. My son is now 19, but this poem of fighting dragons reminded me both of his youthful innocent playful side and the fact that now he has to slay actual dragons disguised in many forms.
Your talents are a true blessing.
Smiles,
Teresa
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I always look forward with great joy to your next poem, for I'm confident that it will uplift my day and bring a smile. My son is now 19, but this poem of fighting dragons reminded me both of his youthful innocent playful side and the fact that now he has to slay actual dragons disguised in many forms.
Your talents are a true blessing.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Teresa. I always feel it so fulfilling when one of my poems triggers the memories and feelings of a reader. Brooke
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Brooke,
You are always amazing in both your talent and in your generosity to share your knowledge. I can say with full confidence that you are truly one of the reasons I continue to return to FS when time and my life permit.
Warm Smiles,
Teresa
Comment from LIJ Red
This has to be a bedtime story for one too young for Reign Of Fire. Excellent young poem. Your word pictures of the
fantastic come through clearly...
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This has to be a bedtime story for one too young for Reign Of Fire. Excellent young poem. Your word pictures of the
fantastic come through clearly...
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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LIJ, thanks so much :-) Brooke
