When Dragons Sailed the Skyways
a story poem in 7/6/8/6 meter142 total reviews
Comment from Tayari
that was brilliant. Simply awesome. I'm new to fan story and I love poetry so much. Therefore I Just wanted to see some of your work because your the number 1 ranked poet. This creativity at its best especially the finisher stanza cause it matches your illustration perfect. Thanks for sharing this you gave me some sight instantly
P.S I love the fact the hero in this is your son
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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that was brilliant. Simply awesome. I'm new to fan story and I love poetry so much. Therefore I Just wanted to see some of your work because your the number 1 ranked poet. This creativity at its best especially the finisher stanza cause it matches your illustration perfect. Thanks for sharing this you gave me some sight instantly
P.S I love the fact the hero in this is your son
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Tayari, for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
Little man, sleeping his fame away
Preparing himself to save another day
Another damsel in distress
Will be glad he took time to rest
To fight for her his very best
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Little man, sleeping his fame away
Preparing himself to save another day
Another damsel in distress
Will be glad he took time to rest
To fight for her his very best
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Buck, thanks so much, my rhyming friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a sweeet photo of Sawyer. He DOES look like he had a very busy day at play. The poem captures this so well. I miss having little kids in the house, but Amanda is still young enough to be fun and keep me moving. :)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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What a sweeet photo of Sawyer. He DOES look like he had a very busy day at play. The poem captures this so well. I miss having little kids in the house, but Amanda is still young enough to be fun and keep me moving. :)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Phyllis :-) Say hi to Amanda for me :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This photo brings back memories, all three of my children slept like that. A good dragon slaying story where the hero wins the freedom. I could imagine many pictures in a story book to go with this one, I enjoyed it (must be a big kid still)
valda
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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This photo brings back memories, all three of my children slept like that. A good dragon slaying story where the hero wins the freedom. I could imagine many pictures in a story book to go with this one, I enjoyed it (must be a big kid still)
valda
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
Lovely poem with excellent rhyming. My favorite lines were:
As flames were growing hotter
and waves were rising high,
he cried, "I will not meet defeat,
not ever, no, not I!"
The above stanza reminds me that when the going gets tough. The tough get going.
Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Lovely poem with excellent rhyming. My favorite lines were:
As flames were growing hotter
and waves were rising high,
he cried, "I will not meet defeat,
not ever, no, not I!"
The above stanza reminds me that when the going gets tough. The tough get going.
Well done!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Chi, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Ha, very entertaining. After a hard day of fighting sea monsters and slaying dragons, I would be dead on my feet too. A Childs imagination cane be very taxing, a they themselves inspirational. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Ha, very entertaining. After a hard day of fighting sea monsters and slaying dragons, I would be dead on my feet too. A Childs imagination cane be very taxing, a they themselves inspirational. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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lancellot, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from billmetz
Very well presented. I think of "Puff the magic dragon" when reading this. Very well presented and with a surprised ending. A lot of talent is displayed in this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Very well presented. I think of "Puff the magic dragon" when reading this. Very well presented and with a surprised ending. A lot of talent is displayed in this poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much for your generous rating and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Lovely tale of daring-do for your young knight, the perfect accompaniment for the picture. My kids used to sleep in that position sometimes after a busy day.
Patrick
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Lovely tale of daring-do for your young knight, the perfect accompaniment for the picture. My kids used to sleep in that position sometimes after a busy day.
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Patrick, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwigirl2821
A tired hero! Laughing. Another great write that would make a wonderful story picture book. I can see the vibrant colors of this dragon and your little hero would be absolutely adorable! xoxo d
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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A tired hero! Laughing. Another great write that would make a wonderful story picture book. I can see the vibrant colors of this dragon and your little hero would be absolutely adorable! xoxo d
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Deb, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
Its a simple poem which is perfect for a child, but what I liked , which a lot of writers are unable to do, is command that running rhythm, where the line before commands the next. This is a feature of my, 'Tambour.'
The both lines do not have to have the same syllable count because one determines the other and if it is done correctly, the perfect rhythm continues throughout.
Though simple, there is no mistaking the skill in keeping the pace with these command lines. Bravo, Brooke.
It goes to show, even something written so simply and enjoyable, with a child in focus, skill is still evident. Thus its claim for my last six stars.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Its a simple poem which is perfect for a child, but what I liked , which a lot of writers are unable to do, is command that running rhythm, where the line before commands the next. This is a feature of my, 'Tambour.'
The both lines do not have to have the same syllable count because one determines the other and if it is done correctly, the perfect rhythm continues throughout.
Though simple, there is no mistaking the skill in keeping the pace with these command lines. Bravo, Brooke.
It goes to show, even something written so simply and enjoyable, with a child in focus, skill is still evident. Thus its claim for my last six stars.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, RG - I'm honored by your six stars and by your comments. I learned my love of poetry from those I learned as a child, and have always believed children's poetry ought to be the best poetry that good writing can possibly make it :-) Brooke
