Because We Dream
Quatrain contest entry67 total reviews
Comment from Jackarrie
I enjoyed this poem for the quatrain contest. I is a great tribute to the mind of all dreamers and artists whether it is poetry, painting, music etc. We are driven by what we feel inside to express them.
Well written
Good luck in the contest
Mary
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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I enjoyed this poem for the quatrain contest. I is a great tribute to the mind of all dreamers and artists whether it is poetry, painting, music etc. We are driven by what we feel inside to express them.
Well written
Good luck in the contest
Mary
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the kind review Mary. I wish I could give them all a hug and say hooray for sharing your creativity. - Wendy
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the wonder of dreaming to create our crafts that are evoked within
good visual imagery
good enjambment to allow flow in sentences
good rhyme through verses
good use "N" "S" "L" consonance
good use "E" "O" assonance
good alliteration in
hike, heal
seek, sea, sail
reason, rhyme
embracing, evokes
mingle, might-bes
create, crafted
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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good luck in the contest
your chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the wonder of dreaming to create our crafts that are evoked within
good visual imagery
good enjambment to allow flow in sentences
good rhyme through verses
good use "N" "S" "L" consonance
good use "E" "O" assonance
good alliteration in
hike, heal
seek, sea, sail
reason, rhyme
embracing, evokes
mingle, might-bes
create, crafted
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Hi Smoothiecool and thank you for the thoughtful review. I'm glad you enjoyed the read and appreciate the good luck wish. - Wendy
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most welcome ...Wendy
have a blessed weekend...SC <:> Faye
Comment from chasennov
Quatrain contest entry "Because We Dream" So true, so true. This is an incredibly lovely poem you have created here. It has both power and pace, subtlety and grace. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Quatrain contest entry "Because We Dream" So true, so true. This is an incredibly lovely poem you have created here. It has both power and pace, subtlety and grace. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Good Morning and thank you for the kind review. I found the photo first, started in another direction entirely ( a-rock-and-a-hard-place thoughts) but this is what demanded to be written. I an so glad you enjoyed it. - Wendy
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You are most welcome, Wendy.
Comment from Charlene0513
To rosehill, A look into the mind of a person that demonstrates his/her skills by experimentation and risk at their own costs to hopefully reveal their own muse with a touch of class.
A couple areas of alliteration used.
Charlene
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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To rosehill, A look into the mind of a person that demonstrates his/her skills by experimentation and risk at their own costs to hopefully reveal their own muse with a touch of class.
A couple areas of alliteration used.
Charlene
Comment Written 21-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Hi Charlene and thank you for reading and reviewing my work. You are right on in discerning the message of my tip of the hat to artists everywhere. When I re-read a line I have written I am often surprised to find it packed with poetic devices. I try not to do so many that they overwhelm the message and I appreciate your pointing out the ones you noticed. - Wendy
Comment from skye
What a wonderful poem, filled with strong images and strong rhymes and lines. You created what might be, maybe, possibilities, and opened the mind to more and more. Excellent.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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What a wonderful poem, filled with strong images and strong rhymes and lines. You created what might be, maybe, possibilities, and opened the mind to more and more. Excellent.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2014
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Hello skye and thank you for taking the time to read and review what I have written. I am glad you enjoyed my tip of the hat to artists of all stripes, mired in the might be and maybe to good effect. I'm pretty sure that even the renaissance, still-life painter probably added a petal or two or an imagined sunlight kiss for an otherwise dull representation of fruit and bread on a dark table. - I'm glad you enjoyed this. - Wendy
Comment from donaldww
I remember reading the phrase, "between a rock and a hard place" in Virgil's Aeneid. When Aeneas sailed past the heel of Italy, on his way to Africa and his dalliance with Dido, he had to manoeuvre his ship between a rock and the coast.
In light of the picture you have chosen, it's reasonable to assume you were on a similar voyage in your dreams.
Dreams are "improbable," but "our hearts applaud invention," even when it's in our own minds, late at night.
"Because we are not satisfied
existing with what is and was"
The perfect pair of lines to describe the spark behind the creative process.
It's not inspiration or desire that get's us moving, it's dissatisfaction!
Great job! Good luck in the contest!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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I remember reading the phrase, "between a rock and a hard place" in Virgil's Aeneid. When Aeneas sailed past the heel of Italy, on his way to Africa and his dalliance with Dido, he had to manoeuvre his ship between a rock and the coast.
In light of the picture you have chosen, it's reasonable to assume you were on a similar voyage in your dreams.
Dreams are "improbable," but "our hearts applaud invention," even when it's in our own minds, late at night.
"Because we are not satisfied
existing with what is and was"
The perfect pair of lines to describe the spark behind the creative process.
It's not inspiration or desire that get's us moving, it's dissatisfaction!
Great job! Good luck in the contest!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much for the "glowing" review. The rock and a hard place is indeed where this poem started, but it took off on its own sailing ship, ended up on another shore altogether. I had just seen a little cartoon that said "Everyone tells you how hard it would be to try and be an artist. But no one tells you how hard it is not to be one." I thought of this photo I had tucked away and thought of being squeezed between your dreams and reality. Well, That poem will have to find another photo and another day. I am appreciative of the review and honored by the strewing of so many stars in my direction. - Wendy
Comment from mermaids
Embracing what their muse evokes is my favorite line,so true. the artist and the muse togeher create the mulitude of art that you mention in your author notes. You have a smooth flow of rhyming lines that bring to life the dreams of artists.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Embracing what their muse evokes is my favorite line,so true. the artist and the muse togeher create the mulitude of art that you mention in your author notes. You have a smooth flow of rhyming lines that bring to life the dreams of artists.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Hi Elaine, I appreciate your pointing out your favorite line. It helps me study the piece and, hopefully, become a better writer. I am glad that you enjoyed this. -Wendy
Comment from JPilcher
Very cool piece of work here!! The picture is perfect & to be able to write about this subject in the way you did - it was grand!!!
My only advice would be to at least bold your lettering because after all, what's most important, is your words. It just helps make them stand out more I think. :) Jill P.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Very cool piece of work here!! The picture is perfect & to be able to write about this subject in the way you did - it was grand!!!
My only advice would be to at least bold your lettering because after all, what's most important, is your words. It just helps make them stand out more I think. :) Jill P.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Thank you Jill for the read and review. I am please that you found it, "grand." I'll work on the lettering, but lots of folks are pretty picky about not messing with it, heck, they don't want pictures either. I find that while we paint with words, it is equally good to acknowledge that the view is important. When I feed the guests breakfast at my B & B, I know that the guests, "eat first with their eyes," and try to serve a beautiful plate of food on surrounded by china, crystal and silver. I consider the photos the food for the eyes.
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The picture is the cherry on top - I always love a good illustration & prefer one actually. I stand by the bold lettering though, 'cause your words are, after all, most important. ;) <3 Jill P.
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi rosehill I enjoyed your poem about creative people like writers, poets, artists etc. The world would be a boring place without them.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Hi rosehill I enjoyed your poem about creative people like writers, poets, artists etc. The world would be a boring place without them.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the read and review Wendyanne. I smile every time I see your moniker because I'm Wendy and my sister is Bari Anne so it seems like a sister duet to me. I am glad you enjoyed. -Wendy
Comment from Eternal Muse
I have to give a six for this one. It was brilliant. Your picture totally captivated me, but your words were simply fantastic.
A great command on rhyme and meter. Quite a treat to a hardened meter buff like me.
Because we can appreciate
that even folly has its use
we celebrate skilled magic where
absurdity needs no excuse.
Awesome! Bravo. I enjoyed it thoroughly from beginning to an end.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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I have to give a six for this one. It was brilliant. Your picture totally captivated me, but your words were simply fantastic.
A great command on rhyme and meter. Quite a treat to a hardened meter buff like me.
Because we can appreciate
that even folly has its use
we celebrate skilled magic where
absurdity needs no excuse.
Awesome! Bravo. I enjoyed it thoroughly from beginning to an end.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2014
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Hi Yelena and thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my words. Your meter praise is doubly delightful, knowing how important it is to you. I am more than a bit of a stickler about that as well, along with enjoying pure rhymes. I tend to look at the near/slant rhymes as a bit of laziness. I started in a different direction with this one, but it pulled me up short and decided its own fate somehow. I am honored by the six. - Wendy
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No, near rhymes works quite effectively sometimes. There is no more crime in my book than forced rhyming (lol). It is so painful to read sometimes, I can't help but feel deep compassion for the author who went through all this suffering (LMAO).
Glad to meet a kindred spirit.
Love, Yelena
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I always refer to that as the "Ugly Stepsister Syndrome," trying to shoehorn big feet into a tiny glass slipper. You might get it in, but it is quite painful.
