If I Were a Swan
a poem in rhyme and mixed meter122 total reviews
Comment from Dutchie
Hi Brooke. Such a gracious poem for the gracious Swan/
Very well written and the flow is as smooth as the swan moves.
Really wonderful. Fia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke. Such a gracious poem for the gracious Swan/
Very well written and the flow is as smooth as the swan moves.
Really wonderful. Fia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Fia, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Tell me something, Brooke, dear poet and magnificent one at that: have you been reading my mind? Or are we born to the same family? Under the same star? WHAT?!!! Your poem just made the secret thought I've hidden away PUBLIC! (Hahahahaha - seriously - I WONDERED about swans and that pedalling all along!) :0) (Clever gal. I'm adding that to your Caribean resume...*grin*)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Tell me something, Brooke, dear poet and magnificent one at that: have you been reading my mind? Or are we born to the same family? Under the same star? WHAT?!!! Your poem just made the secret thought I've hidden away PUBLIC! (Hahahahaha - seriously - I WONDERED about swans and that pedalling all along!) :0) (Clever gal. I'm adding that to your Caribean resume...*grin*)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Dawn - a twilight zone moment LOL :-) Brooke
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LOL - yup. My @$!! laptop is acting up again, so I can't stay long...:(
Comment from Ekim777
This poem bears a secret as personified by the swan. For life to boast some grace, great effort is required. Grace right down here on earth must be gained by great labor. That is why the smoothness of our lives is so precious or is it just an illusion? -Ekim777
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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This poem bears a secret as personified by the swan. For life to boast some grace, great effort is required. Grace right down here on earth must be gained by great labor. That is why the smoothness of our lives is so precious or is it just an illusion? -Ekim777
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Ekim, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from SteveY
Indeed, what people don't really see or know anything about. Perfect grace is accomplished by a lot of hard work. Great job with this one.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Indeed, what people don't really see or know anything about. Perfect grace is accomplished by a lot of hard work. Great job with this one.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Steve, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
In few words and poetic form you tell a tale. I see swans here on Cape Cod when I drive around town and I like the idea that they are holding secrets from me. This is a poem that makes the reader feel good.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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In few words and poetic form you tell a tale. I see swans here on Cape Cod when I drive around town and I like the idea that they are holding secrets from me. This is a poem that makes the reader feel good.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gladness
What do their feet look like? Are they not elegantly peddling around to move the beautiful swan? I don't know, but you make me wonder.
Anita
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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What do their feet look like? Are they not elegantly peddling around to move the beautiful swan? I don't know, but you make me wonder.
Anita
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Anita :-) Brooke
Comment from butterfly4265
Two in the same day - what a bonus!
Who knew that swans were anything but graceful as they glide across the water! Unless of course you get too close and they turn into aggressive b******s!
Yet another excellent one which it has been my pleasure to review - really! :-)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Two in the same day - what a bonus!
Who knew that swans were anything but graceful as they glide across the water! Unless of course you get too close and they turn into aggressive b******s!
Yet another excellent one which it has been my pleasure to review - really! :-)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thank you, butterfly, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: a lovely poem to greet my morning. Swans have other secrets, too. I was once in a boat with a few other people. We slowly drew up close to a swan so I could take a good picture. The swan came at me so I couldn't get that picture. They can be so aggressive despite their seemingly calm and smooth demeanor. But, I prefer to just think of their grace and those feet under water propelling them along, working very hard but appearing a ballerina. Nice write. Linda
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Brooke: a lovely poem to greet my morning. Swans have other secrets, too. I was once in a boat with a few other people. We slowly drew up close to a swan so I could take a good picture. The swan came at me so I couldn't get that picture. They can be so aggressive despite their seemingly calm and smooth demeanor. But, I prefer to just think of their grace and those feet under water propelling them along, working very hard but appearing a ballerina. Nice write. Linda
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Halfree
Wow, good day for me. Two new poems by my favorite poet on FS. Just like this one..no lofty comments needed. Nicely done and a great read. The last verse...very well said and powerful. Been a good morning...two new poems to read from a gifted writer.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Wow, good day for me. Two new poems by my favorite poet on FS. Just like this one..no lofty comments needed. Nicely done and a great read. The last verse...very well said and powerful. Been a good morning...two new poems to read from a gifted writer.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Halfree - you've left me with a smile :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Ahh, but it is the sloppy, imperfect struggle of legs underwater that keeps the elegant swan in motion. Grace under pressure- it would be nice to pull that off. Just not all the time.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Ahh, but it is the sloppy, imperfect struggle of legs underwater that keeps the elegant swan in motion. Grace under pressure- it would be nice to pull that off. Just not all the time.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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ravenblack, thank you so much :-) Brooke
