White the World
a poem in rhyming couplets139 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
:-) This poem reads like a snow flurry! Words, images, motion
all aswirl - intertwining - doubling back into view again, then slowly
settling. . .building a monotone vision of winter's signature color :-)
Nice one :-)
(though a bit scary, in terms of "not ready for that yet" imagery LOL
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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:-) This poem reads like a snow flurry! Words, images, motion
all aswirl - intertwining - doubling back into view again, then slowly
settling. . .building a monotone vision of winter's signature color :-)
Nice one :-)
(though a bit scary, in terms of "not ready for that yet" imagery LOL
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Leineco, thank you so much - I'm not ready yet either :-) Brooke
Comment from maggieadams
A poem has sound and yours is a delightful sound....all the 'w' alliteration and the pure the pearls combine to paint a picture. Personification of winter, another poetic device, made it so pleasing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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A poem has sound and yours is a delightful sound....all the 'w' alliteration and the pure the pearls combine to paint a picture. Personification of winter, another poetic device, made it so pleasing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Maggie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is so good, Brooke. Here is my go at doing a 'proper' review!!
Now, alliteration, that has got to be the:
soft sound snow swirling...Excellent.
white world, and, where winter's waved wand...Magic.
pure pearls...Wonderful
A really lovely poem. xsx Sandra :)
Now to learn what assonance is! How did I do?? :)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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This is so good, Brooke. Here is my go at doing a 'proper' review!!
Now, alliteration, that has got to be the:
soft sound snow swirling...Excellent.
white world, and, where winter's waved wand...Magic.
pure pearls...Wonderful
A really lovely poem. xsx Sandra :)
Now to learn what assonance is! How did I do?? :)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Sandra, thank you so very much :-) yep, you identified the alliteration well - assonance is when you have like vowel sounds in close proximity without necessarily rhyming - like in brake and rain. I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
I enjoyed your entertaining personification of winter, Brooke. It's snowing here now,mand they say it will keep snowing for most of the day. Love the artwork, and your poem is a delight.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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I enjoyed your entertaining personification of winter, Brooke. It's snowing here now,mand they say it will keep snowing for most of the day. Love the artwork, and your poem is a delight.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Karyn, thank you so much, my friend :-) Hey, if it's going to snow like it or not, we might as well appreciate its beauty :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Pure the pearls the world is wearing --
no expense is Winter sparing.
All the world in white is donned
where the Winter's waved her wand.
your words fire the imagination of a wonderland of snow --- but thankfully, it hasn't arrived - YET - I loved the rhythm and rhyme to this, Brooke.
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Pure the pearls the world is wearing --
no expense is Winter sparing.
All the world in white is donned
where the Winter's waved her wand.
your words fire the imagination of a wonderland of snow --- but thankfully, it hasn't arrived - YET - I loved the rhythm and rhyme to this, Brooke.
Margaret
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Margaret, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
I really enjoyed this lovely description of the snow falling written in the rhyming couplets, Brooke!
Your imagery is very nice. I particularly liked the first two lines:
"White the world with glittered pearling (beautiful!)
soft the sound as snow is swirling --
Where the Winter's waved her wand,
strands of white the world has donned."
Your rhyming is perfect, and your alliteration is very well done. I love the personification you've given the world and winter.
Thanks for sharing another perfectly written poem, my friend! Alana
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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I really enjoyed this lovely description of the snow falling written in the rhyming couplets, Brooke!
Your imagery is very nice. I particularly liked the first two lines:
"White the world with glittered pearling (beautiful!)
soft the sound as snow is swirling --
Where the Winter's waved her wand,
strands of white the world has donned."
Your rhyming is perfect, and your alliteration is very well done. I love the personification you've given the world and winter.
Thanks for sharing another perfectly written poem, my friend! Alana
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Alana, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Michaelk
Two days ago I took a picture of my feet outside in sandals. I was standing in a half inch of snow. I titled the picture, 'Denial'. That will tell you how much I am looking forward to winter.
That being said, I loved your poem. Your descriptions were fantastic. I don't think I've ever heard snow described as glittered pearls, but it is so apt, and yet so elegant. Your personification of Winter waving her wand was very easy to visualize as well. Your rhyme and rhythm are great as always.
Wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Two days ago I took a picture of my feet outside in sandals. I was standing in a half inch of snow. I titled the picture, 'Denial'. That will tell you how much I am looking forward to winter.
That being said, I loved your poem. Your descriptions were fantastic. I don't think I've ever heard snow described as glittered pearls, but it is so apt, and yet so elegant. Your personification of Winter waving her wand was very easy to visualize as well. Your rhyme and rhythm are great as always.
Wonderful poem.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Michael - I detest winter - last year we had 68 inches distributed over 10 storms - it seemed like it was always snowing, and I was often stuck in my apartment for days on end. I write about how pretty the snow is just to talk myself into not slitting my wrists. LOL :-) Brooke
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Wow! And I thought I hated winter. The next time you get depressed during Winter just think of me. I have to tend a wood/coal furnace to keep warm. And it needs to be tended every two to four hours, even overnight. :)
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That is the saddest thing I've heard in a long, long time - at least I have central heat. Now I'm going to be worried about you!! :-)
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Hey, if you're worried about me then at least your mind is off your own problems. :)
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true, very true :-)
Comment from Sanku
Winter,the magician has started her work.snowy pearls that glitter and the crisp wind that twirl help the landscape wear a brilliant white veil. The personification and the alliteration brings to life the winter scene.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Winter,the magician has started her work.snowy pearls that glitter and the crisp wind that twirl help the landscape wear a brilliant white veil. The personification and the alliteration brings to life the winter scene.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Sanku, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hey...please not winter yet. I am not in love with snow. Your poem was cute but made me sad...becasue winter will come and the sun will rest and well...you get my drift...
padumachitta
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hey...please not winter yet. I am not in love with snow. Your poem was cute but made me sad...becasue winter will come and the sun will rest and well...you get my drift...
padumachitta
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you, padumachitta, for your thoughtful review. Yep, I am also not a winter cold fan :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Good use of interchanging lines-slightly modified
Good rhythm and rhyme.
Great imagery. You make snow feel good.
Should have used Sawyer in his snow cap
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Good use of interchanging lines-slightly modified
Good rhythm and rhyme.
Great imagery. You make snow feel good.
Should have used Sawyer in his snow cap
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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emrpoems, thank you so much :-) Brooke
