Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is an excellent sonnet on the slow death of love. I am sure this is one many can relate to. Very well written, strong imagery and a great entry for this prompt. I wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014

Thanks, Sasha.

Steve

Comment from tdragonfly

Excellent

A perfect summer when two people met fall in love and spend a magical summer together. Then its over . Autumn is here and we are reminded how things can die or dry up. By the time the chill of winter is here we know for sure that it was just a summer fling.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Great Sonnet form!

And a familiar motif. . .I'm sure, like me, many a reader was drawn back to "first love" memories. I think that is the true power of poetry - it serves as a jumping off place for the human range of experience and relevance. And yet, does so, by accessing the totem of similarities we share. Different details. . . and yet, same effect.

Nicely done :-)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014

Thank you.

Yes, a few reviewers have commented along the lines of 'reminds me...'

Steve

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

This is a lovely sonnet, Steve. Your story is well told, about blossoming love with a bitter ending.

You've followed the writing prompt well. Your abcb rhyming is perfect, and you've made great use of alliteration and enjambment. Your words flow with a great rhythm. You've used imagery well. Your ending couplet is particularly moving:

"Those days we let the carefree harvest spill
Are frozen now in bitter winter's chill."

Well done! Best of luck in the contest. Alana

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014

Thanks, Alana

No luck in the contest, sadly...

Steve

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

A perfectly realized sonnet that not only catches deep love and love lost or lamented and the character of the seasons. Excellent word choices to give it the feel of a classic love - " We quaffed life's potent vintage to the Lee's". Frozen in winter's bitter chill- a true heartbreaker. Either love lost or chilled to where it is no longer vibrant.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014

Thanks for the thoughtful review.

Steve

Comment from flamingstar

Excellent

Oh what a shame...and what a shame I have no sixes left. Why oh why does it always have to end like that? Your last couplet is very powerful and lingers dolefully. And I love the line "for autumn came as autumn always must." Although I wish it hadn't.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014

Thank you!

Yes, I am quite pleased with the 'autumn' line - makes me sound like a real philosopher! :O)

Steve

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Oh, this is so beautiful, Steve. The love that spills off the screen is palpable. Your excellent use of English and your skill of poetic phrasing always makes for a delicious read.
Loved this.
Rose.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014

Thanks, Rose!

Steve

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A good sonnet in perfect iambic pentameter and good abab rhyme form throughout which makes a good English sonnet. A rather sad turn in the third stanza but follows the rules of a turn. Good final rhyming couplet and a good read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014

Thanks, Dorothy - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Cool cool imagery.....oooo bitter winter's chill
I loved this. Where was the photo taken?
I applaud the word choices...quaffed ...lees... I loved sailing with the Lee rail under...it speaks of the excitement of love
God bless

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014

Thanks, Jenny.

Don't think 'drink something to the lees' comes from sailing - not sure where it comes from actually - is it a synonym for dregs do you think?

Steve

reply by kiwijenny on 11-Nov-2014

Yes that makes sense...lees took me off on a tangent

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

If this doesn't win--I might cry. Pristine sentiment, burning sunlit passion contrasted with desolation painted like autumn, frozen by winter. Lovely implications, inspiring. Kenny

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014

Thanks, Kenny - but be prepared to cry - sometimes content outweighs style!

Steve

reply by Kenneth Schaal on 11-Nov-2014

Most often as a matter of fact. See what being smart pays--0

reply by Kenneth Schaal on 11-Nov-2014

One leading entry has missed the iambics even. I mean uneven, I mean...