Andrea's Ghost
An acrostic contest entry86 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
An interesting acrostic presented well, but I am not sure what her liking married men or necromancy, meaning the mayor raised her to have an affair? I do like the power of her wicked song, but I was expecting her revenge to have something to do with her proclivities. I like the poem as a whole, just not sure of how the first line fits.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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An interesting acrostic presented well, but I am not sure what her liking married men or necromancy, meaning the mayor raised her to have an affair? I do like the power of her wicked song, but I was expecting her revenge to have something to do with her proclivities. I like the poem as a whole, just not sure of how the first line fits.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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The legend has it that Andrea threatened to tell the whole town about her sexual affair with the Mayor of Newtown, and he, in turn trumped up charges to have her brought to trial, then executed as a witch to silence her forever, Ed. Was she truly a witch? Who knows for sure -- some say yes, others no, that she was simply a poor unfortunate girl who fell in love with the wrong man. Of course, I can't take the time to put all of this in author's notes as I'm tired of being lambasted for the lengths of those I've included already.
That's how it fits, and I hope that helps you to comprehend it.
~Dean
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Makes perfect sense now. And if anyone lambasts you for author notes, chop them up into little pieces. I enjoy the lore behind the poem.
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Hah, thanks, Ed, I do too when others do it, but not everyone does. I usually do what I just did with you and answer their questions should they have any. As for chopping them up into tiny pieces, my blades, axes and saws are all sharpened and raring to go, heh-heh.
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I find a really big wood chipper works best. Just not in the house. Man, was that a mess.
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Comment from BunnyS
Very interesting author's notes... I'm absolutely fascinated by ghost stories and the paranormal. Sometimes I struggle with my walk as a Christian and my desire to learn more about the afterlife.
As always, I love your work; and the attention to detail that makes every line work together in horrifying harmony. You have the whole package... the artwork, the creativity... the ability to make it all work beautifully together. Amazing work!
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Very interesting author's notes... I'm absolutely fascinated by ghost stories and the paranormal. Sometimes I struggle with my walk as a Christian and my desire to learn more about the afterlife.
As always, I love your work; and the attention to detail that makes every line work together in horrifying harmony. You have the whole package... the artwork, the creativity... the ability to make it all work beautifully together. Amazing work!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Dean:
Ironically, your acrostic poem entitled Andrea's Ghost could have
been a double entry - if Fanstory allowed such things - because not
only is it a wonderful acrostic but it also tells a story in a poem. My
soon to be six-year-old granddaughter asked me recently if I believed
in ghosts, a tricky question if one does not want to lie, yet does not want
to scare their grandchild.
thanks for sharing
good luck in the contest
love, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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Dean:
Ironically, your acrostic poem entitled Andrea's Ghost could have
been a double entry - if Fanstory allowed such things - because not
only is it a wonderful acrostic but it also tells a story in a poem. My
soon to be six-year-old granddaughter asked me recently if I believed
in ghosts, a tricky question if one does not want to lie, yet does not want
to scare their grandchild.
thanks for sharing
good luck in the contest
love, Jan
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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Thanks for checking it out, Jan. I sincerely appreciate that. :)
~Dean
Comment from GracieAnn
Dean, this is a creative write that is typical of your style. You and I might have discussed before whether ghosts exist or whether they are simply demonic appearances. A soul does not exist between two worlds in my understanding. But, many believe they are disembodied spirits. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Dean, this is a creative write that is typical of your style. You and I might have discussed before whether ghosts exist or whether they are simply demonic appearances. A soul does not exist between two worlds in my understanding. But, many believe they are disembodied spirits. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Thanks very much, GracieAnn...
Absent form the body, at home with the Lord...yes, I have heard that said before many times. However, in addition to being a writer and illustrator, I am also an avid amateur ghost hunter, and it's one of my favorite hobbies. Even before I took up the hobby, I could tell you unequivocally and without a shadow of a doubt that ghosts do, in fact, exist.
Comment from acerisestory
I very much like the presentation of another spooky and well written poem, Dean. Adrea showed them all, didn't she? That's what they get for cutting off her beautiful head! "Trapped forever in hell where she harbors their souls." Yikes!
Your acrostic doesn't seemed forced at all. I very much liked your use of the word, "necromancy," a new word to add to my vocabulary! Your rhyming, both perfect and proximate, is well done. You've made great use of alliteration to increase the flow of your well chosen words.
Well done, my friend! Best of luck in the contest. Alana
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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I very much like the presentation of another spooky and well written poem, Dean. Adrea showed them all, didn't she? That's what they get for cutting off her beautiful head! "Trapped forever in hell where she harbors their souls." Yikes!
Your acrostic doesn't seemed forced at all. I very much liked your use of the word, "necromancy," a new word to add to my vocabulary! Your rhyming, both perfect and proximate, is well done. You've made great use of alliteration to increase the flow of your well chosen words.
Well done, my friend! Best of luck in the contest. Alana
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Alana. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Alan K Pease
Andrea is a woman to avoid luring people to their doom in the depths of hell. I do believe that the abandoned house that could be the source of the stories. Seems to have happened again in the recent news cast, just a different place. Excellent acrostic.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Andrea is a woman to avoid luring people to their doom in the depths of hell. I do believe that the abandoned house that could be the source of the stories. Seems to have happened again in the recent news cast, just a different place. Excellent acrostic.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Alan, I appreciate that. I'm happy you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from Janet Foor
I love that you give us a history of your topic in the poem. It really draws the reader into the story. As always, well done from the artwork and presentation to the ghostly end. Well done Dean.
Blessings and Happy New Year
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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I love that you give us a history of your topic in the poem. It really draws the reader into the story. As always, well done from the artwork and presentation to the ghostly end. Well done Dean.
Blessings and Happy New Year
Janet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Janet, you're very kind. I'm glad you enjoyed this acrostic. Have a wonderful weekend, and thanks for the sixer! ;)
~Dean
Comment from Writingfundimension
A great contest entry, Dean. I enjoyed the story in your Acrostic poem. Yes, Connecticut is a very haunted state. It's the home of the celebrated, though controversial, team of paranormal investigators and exorcists, Ed and Lorraine Warren. I am a big fan of the aforementioned. Thanks for sharing some of the history of hauntings, too, in your author's notes.
Good luck in the contest!
:) Bev
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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A great contest entry, Dean. I enjoyed the story in your Acrostic poem. Yes, Connecticut is a very haunted state. It's the home of the celebrated, though controversial, team of paranormal investigators and exorcists, Ed and Lorraine Warren. I am a big fan of the aforementioned. Thanks for sharing some of the history of hauntings, too, in your author's notes.
Good luck in the contest!
:) Bev
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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From the movie, "The Conjuring", also about a witch. It's an excellent movie.
Thanks again!
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Yup. I've got a copy. One of the best, and it shows the Warren's at work in a mostly accurate light. Personally, the idea of a haunted museum filled with objects like Annabelle just plain gives me the willies!
'Welcome, Dean.
:) Bev
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Not me. I'd love to operate a museum like that, as long as there were no ventriloquist's dummies in it. I can't even stand to look at one of those things! LOL...
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What is there about those dummies? I can't stand them either. Did you ever see the SyFy program Haunted Collector? The main investigator was a 'student' of the Warrens and have his own museum. How would you contain the energy, Dean? Just curious.
Bev
Comment from Treischel
An impressive Acrostic poem, where every line hangs on the letters of the Words - Andreas Ghost. Even more so that it is rhymed. It carries your signature trappings well. I thought the last rhyme could be a bit better: how about:
Trapped forever in Hell where all sinners go
Or
Trapped forever in Hell stacking souls in a row
Just a thought.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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An impressive Acrostic poem, where every line hangs on the letters of the Words - Andreas Ghost. Even more so that it is rhymed. It carries your signature trappings well. I thought the last rhyme could be a bit better: how about:
Trapped forever in Hell where all sinners go
Or
Trapped forever in Hell stacking souls in a row
Just a thought.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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Great suggestions, Tom, and I really appreciate it.
Thanks very much for the review.
Comment from rod007
This is the fate of those who dare meddle with the neck of this lusty witch. Perhaps the ones who fornicated with her also suffered the same fate. Well done, Dean.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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This is the fate of those who dare meddle with the neck of this lusty witch. Perhaps the ones who fornicated with her also suffered the same fate. Well done, Dean.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2015
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They most probably did, Rod. Thanks very much for the review.
